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When I Died

"Life denies everything to some. Though they live and die with no dignity, they'll be crowned thereafter" .......by the poet
I lived poor and died poor. No obituary written Nowhere a black flag fluttered No one grieved No bells tolled No prayers recited, To still my departed soul! My body was wheeled in a hearse With a few following With hesitant steps More as a custom than a gesture true The open gates of the walled cemetery Allowed a glimpse of the newly dug grave In a remote corner it stood Close to an overgrown hedge Among many a mound That bore no name on it Oh, the indigent and the lonely Are destined to huddle together In death under the sod With their identities merged Into a single clan! My body when swiftly lowered to the pit And as everyone left to join the rage of life, I pondered, how on this Earth The distinctions of rank Extend down unto dust And follow one like a faithful mongrel
~ Placed First ~ Feb. 22.2022 F Form-Free Verse- New- Poetry Contest Sponsor Constance La France Topic- Death

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Date: 3/4/2022 10:27:00 PM
No place for poor souls.....So beautifully the poem sounded.....much love and God Bless :)
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Date: 2/25/2022 11:30:00 PM
How sad that even in death one is put into an undeserving class. You have expressed the sorrow and injustice well Valsa. Congratulations on your deserving First Place win. Blessings xxoo
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Date: 2/26/2022 1:06:00 AM
Thanks a lot Connie for your congratulations ! I feel very thankful to all of you who responded to this poem of mine
Date: 2/25/2022 2:38:00 PM
Valsa, congratulations on your First Place win in my Free Verse contest with your wonderfully penned poem and I love your created quote also ~ Constance
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Date: 2/26/2022 12:51:00 AM
I must specially thank you Constance for choosing this poem for a win ! In fact this is one of my favorite poems as I have written this with much feeling ! My heart often pains to see the disparity in the world. The trials of life follow some people from the cradle to the grave. They never enjoy even a happy interlude.
Date: 2/24/2022 6:02:00 AM
"Oh, the indigent and the lonely Are destined to huddle together In death under the sod With their identities merged Into a single clan!" WOW! i expect to see this one race to the top of the winner's circle.
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Date: 2/26/2022 1:04:00 AM
Your wish is being fulfilled ! Thanks a lot Caren for your blessings !
Date: 2/23/2022 1:17:00 AM
I think some buried in the greatest and most elaborate graves would very possibly trade places with the poor in the unmarked grave once this earthly life is over. I think of the Bible story of Lazarus and the rich man. Ashes to ashes and dust to dust, but the spirit lives on forever, but to reward or condemnation, a sobering truth. I visited a cemetery, poor and unkept with long unmarked graves, for many, their souls now rejoice in heaven. Thank you for writing this heart touching poem Valsa. <3
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Date: 2/26/2022 1:03:00 AM
"Their souls rejoice in Heaven". This is what I too believe, BJ. Love your detailed response to my poem ! You have honored me by honoring my poem.... the one I consider as a favorite of my writes. Also could gauge the depth of your compassionate heart ! Thanks a lot !<3 <3
Date: 2/22/2022 10:26:00 AM
I always wondered how a culture could develop an "Untouchable" class, but must admit riding first class was always preferable to third class! Aloha!
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Date: 2/26/2022 12:55:00 AM
Untouchability was a ridiculous concept, our country had in some parts. As a citizen, I feel ashamed of it ! Thanks a lot Rico. There is much comfort traveling in first class, but think of those who do not have any money to travel even in third class
Date: 2/22/2022 4:59:00 AM
Some live and die alone--not by choice but by their misfortune and your poem speaks eloquently of their plight and inequities of life!
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Date: 2/22/2022 6:20:00 AM
The inequities of life are so distressing ! While some are born with silver spoons in their mouth, some starve even for a square meal a day ! Thanks a lot Vijay !
Date: 2/22/2022 2:57:00 AM
Dust we were, dust we will become., even the the great emperors became dust.
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Date: 2/22/2022 4:00:00 AM
Exactly ! Dust unto Dust ! Thanks a lot Victor !
Date: 2/21/2022 9:32:00 PM
Valsa, this ingenious poetry has such definite Finality, death, which sooner or later happens to us all when we are called by our Maker. Well penned my friend.Hugs and blessings.Jennifer.
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Date: 2/22/2022 4:03:00 AM
Death is the finality of life here. But there is a beautiful life awaiting us. So death shouldn't be abhorred. When the call comes, we have to oblige ! Thank you dear friend Jennifer ! Love and hugs !
Date: 2/21/2022 7:43:00 PM
Valsa, you outdid yourself by writing a touching poem. I felt like I wanted to cry from the first to the last verse. Your metaphors are beautiful, and your wording is flawless, dear friend. I wish you a long, healthy, and peaceful life. Best wishes for a successful contest.
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Date: 2/21/2022 8:22:00 PM
Thanks a lot for your genuine feelings of love and empathy. Some lives always touch me. In life and death, they are equally ignored. I feel that Heaven is the place reserved for such . Once again thanks for your great appreciation my friend .

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