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Weeping

beyond my sorrow there is a path that beckons I could go that way or stay and hold hands with death and weep upon a cold stone _____________________ August 16, 2014 Poetry/Tanka/weeping Copyright Protected, ID 08-650-676-16 All Rights Reserved, 2015, Constance La France Submitted to the Standard contest, Simply This, Top Ten Tanka Sponsor, Andrea Dietrich, Judged 09/2015 First Place

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Jimi Peranteau

Date: 3/17/2015 2:17:00 PM

Beautifully written, paints a picture in one's mind. Congrats on the win!

Skat A

Date: 3/15/2015 11:57:00 PM

Broken, CONGRATULATIONS, on your top Tanka win:) ~SKAT~

Jack Horne

Date: 3/15/2015 4:48:00 PM

such a powerful and sad write, my friend

Eve Roper

Date: 3/14/2015 7:24:00 PM

Congratulations on your win a very descriptive verse a 7

Sandra Haight

Date: 3/14/2015 4:35:00 PM

Wow...powerful contrast in your Tanka..congratulations on your fine win. Sandra

Sara Kendrick

Date: 3/14/2015 3:10:00 PM

Congrats on your great win..Sara

Jan Allison

Date: 3/14/2015 10:48:00 AM

Dropping back with my congrats :-) Hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/14/2015 9:24:00 AM

Constance, you took sorrow and contrasted it with the other "path that beckons," making this a very good model of how Tanka should be written. I just loved this one! Congratulations in my contest.

Edward Ebbs

Date: 3/12/2015 8:10:00 PM

Take the path the beckons...

Tammy Reams

Date: 3/12/2015 10:21:00 AM

This is a sad but beautiful write. It hits the heart of love ones lost. Good luck in the contest.

Rhonda Johnson-Saunders

Date: 3/10/2015 2:30:00 PM

Loved ones who go before us would never want us to grieve indefinitely...but we all have bad days...I'm always drawn to the depths of your emotive writes, Hugs, Rhonda

Shane Cooper

Date: 3/10/2015 4:16:00 AM

My dear friend I think you have made this decision already, would that it were other wise. you have friends that will support you if you need them. Let go your pain and regret. There is love in this grey world still if you but look. be safe. love Shane xxx

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 3/9/2015 6:00:00 PM

Those who love us would have no desire for us to weep upon a cold stone. This is a powerful write that hints at the life that still awaits us beyond our loss.

David Meade

Date: 3/9/2015 2:04:00 PM

Hear the call, follow the path . . . death will wait! May we always hear the call in our deepest darkness and have the energy to following. Loved your Tanka. 7

Sara Kendrick

Date: 3/9/2015 10:33:00 AM

Reads like a winner..Weeping endures for the night but joy comes in the morning..Enjoyed reading your contest entry..Thanks for the visit to my page..Sara

Emile Pinet

Date: 3/9/2015 10:28:00 AM

You have a talent and should write as much as you can to exercise your skills to a fine art....you have it in you to be notable. Great work. Emile. #7

Jan Allison

Date: 3/9/2015 10:27:00 AM

So deep and sad I found this very chilling - guess my present circumstances wxplain why - good luck with the contest:-) Hugs Jan xx