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In this wild sea I grab the flotsam, harshly heaved, waves so high that up is down and my arms fatigued. So free At last unfettered And the only woe I have is: Will my arms hold? Will this board stay in one piece? Will I finally immerse, drown, go down? The night above, constellation in consternation, in gloomy twilight dark as icy sea below. Their light a callous last reminder. Cold-bloodedly cruel Once was a time I prayed that love would salvage me, that sea and beach would only be there for me to harvest shells and sing my love in sandy painted words. The moon a beaming mouth of merciful compassion, a little boat too far to reach but comforting, lulling me to sleep so deep, so deep. *** April 29, 2017 Copyright © Darren White

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Date: 4/30/2017 11:44:00 AM
Dear Darren. You had me at the title. The waves and all her being of the sea will salvage you. When you can not be there in person to witness her have her in your mind. Your work is amazing. Have a wonderful night. Well done completely and entirely.
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Darren White
Date: 4/30/2017 11:51:00 AM
Thank you so much Lisa :) The sea is always with me.
Date: 4/30/2017 2:28:00 AM
Wow. 7! xomo :)
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Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 4/30/2017 9:36:00 AM
Indeed :)
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Darren White
Date: 4/30/2017 2:30:00 AM
Like a painting, isn't it mo? :) Thanks!
Date: 4/29/2017 8:47:00 PM
So beautiful and in form also!!!
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Darren White
Date: 4/29/2017 10:52:00 PM
Thank you Kim :)
Date: 4/29/2017 5:06:00 PM
Wow, VERY nice one, Darren. I love how you patterned it to even look like the waves. You are writing at your best here, Darren!!
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Darren White
Date: 4/29/2017 10:51:00 PM
Thanks, Andrea, for the compliment!
Date: 4/29/2017 10:26:00 AM
This is definitely going in my favorites. So creatively expressed. Love the formation, you should be immensely proud of this write Darren. 7+++
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Darren White
Date: 4/29/2017 10:28:00 AM
What a wonderful comment, Elizabeth, thank you so much :)
Date: 4/29/2017 8:51:00 AM
A. Beautiful creation my friend...I love it ..a fav
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Darren White
Date: 4/29/2017 10:06:00 AM
Thanks Tim :) Also for the fav!
Date: 4/29/2017 8:15:00 AM
Loved the metaphor, you carried it from start to finish with style, only a brilliant poet like you could achieve this Darren.Loved it to bits and again the metaphor was immaculate.
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Darren White
Date: 4/29/2017 8:20:00 AM
Thank you so much for this wonderful comment Miraj.
Date: 4/29/2017 7:19:00 AM
Beautiful picture, Beautifully wave cast in the word depiction Darren - I was wondering what you were doing surfing in the dark - Then I realized Phew! lucky you were only having a dream. Super 7 on all counts
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Darren White
Date: 4/29/2017 7:25:00 AM
Thanks Maria :) It's mostly metaphorically speaking, but yeah, no surfing for me in the middle of the night with my wheelchair ;) And thank you for another 7!
Date: 4/29/2017 7:12:00 AM
Darren, no wave will ever be so high that it will pull you down. Your phrases are emotional life preservers...comparing the beach to "sandy painted words" and the moon as a mouth that would become a safe haven, a rescue boat. You may be young but your expressions and feelings are anciently wise.
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Darren White
Date: 4/29/2017 7:18:00 AM
Thank you so very much Lin, also for seeing what I did to the moon, including the boat... I was wondering if anyone would notice :)
Date: 4/29/2017 6:33:00 AM
Your poetry has a powerful ebb and flow to it. It is art, music and words wrapped in a graceful but painful dance where the printed word dares to let go of the flotsam and sail even when the heart still clings for dear life. A superb poem my friend that goes in my favorites:) Amitiés
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Darren White
Date: 4/29/2017 6:43:00 AM
Thank you so very much my friend. I love it how you interpret my poem, and yes, the heart indeed does. Thank you for the fave.
Date: 4/29/2017 4:58:00 AM
Loved it. elegantly written Darren!
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Darren White
Date: 4/29/2017 5:19:00 AM
Thank you very much, Amy :)

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