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Voice On My Shoulder

Dogma deemed absurd, I fought scruple’s bird, its voice I still heard, but conscience was blurred. A peer-pressure nerd, the threat was the herd; their counsel preferred, my standards deferred. Accident incurred; two bodies interred. My mind I re-gird with thoughts from God’s Word. written April 28, 2017 for John Hamilton's Rhymer's Delight, Internal Monorhyme Contest

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Date: 2/15/2018 9:25:00 AM
Nice, I don't want to say to much since I don't want to B.S. You But I like poems that rhyme that my thing
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Date: 2/16/2018 6:39:00 AM
Thanks for commenting. It has more rhyme than I prefer but for a contest, one adapts personal preference. Sorta of a fun write but a ver serious message to teens in particular.
Date: 5/3/2017 11:07:00 PM
Heavy one, Reason. Congrats on your well-deserved placement in the contest.
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Date: 5/4/2017 5:46:00 PM
I don't get that heavy often, Carole; but though it has never been a personal issue with me, peer pressure has been many a young person's plague. Thanks for the read and the nice comment.
Date: 5/1/2017 3:25:00 PM
REason, you approached a serious topic with great word usage on internal rhyme. GREAT job and congrats for your win.
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Date: 5/4/2017 5:47:00 PM
Thank you, Andrea, I value your comments and appreciate your time and energy in reading my work and making encouraging remarks. Have a great day and I appreciate you.
Date: 4/30/2017 6:54:00 PM
Hi Reason enjoyed your rhymes, thanks for your entry, congrats on a fine placement!
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Date: 5/1/2017 12:51:00 AM
thanks, John, so worth this poet's write. Thanks for a great prompt and for a welcome placement. You are kind.
Date: 4/29/2017 9:30:00 AM
Thanks, Jo, have a great day wallowing in poetry.
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Date: 4/29/2017 8:59:00 AM
A nice one, Reason:) all the best:)
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Date: 5/1/2017 9:56:00 AM
Thanks, Jo, have a great day wallowing in poetry.

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