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"Unadorned, Utopia, Utterly, Uplifting" contest submitted 3/17/24

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“…Your life is sacred. There is and always has been a path for your soul, and if you follow that path, it will lead you to the inner utopia that your soul longs to experience in this lifetime.” Debbie Ford
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ She smiles, for she is the Chandelier Princess; A young queen sitting on an ivory throne with her golden crown glittering when light falls upon it. She smiles, for she is a fair lady; Wears dress of ruffles and exquisite satin, Her cinnamon hair neatly fashioned in a meticulous bun. She smiles, upon her throne yet I see utopian-like happiness; A symbol of her hidden pangs, Which bitter autumn brought upon the bud of her heart. She smiles, yet I see tales of concealed suffering and pain; A ribbon of her ever flowing tears, that her mind transfers to her soul. She smiles, yet her blares can't be hidden; Not even from her being - where emotions flow, Nagging her thoughts roaring like thunder. She smiles, yet finds not solace In the mask covering her real face Veiling where her true self doth lie. She smiles, yet dies gradually in silence; Her pain feeds her shame, Crying silent tears for imperfections, disguised with lies. When will you take the statute of your own peace? You, dear Princess, put forth weakness to amuse; So long lives these feelings, draining life right out of you. Let not yourself to the union of the untutored – Inner Utopia awaits. Remove the mask. Admit impediments. Thy wounds shan’t be left untreated. They last forever unless they be healed.

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Date: 4/7/2024 3:18:00 PM
Sara, congratulations on your win in my contest with this outstanding poem, I like the quote too, hugs
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 4/7/2024 6:21:00 PM
thank you, Constance, for your congratulatory words and for my placement in your contest. Humbly grateful you found my poem outstanding. Wishing you a splendid evening, Sara
Date: 3/28/2024 2:22:00 PM
- So true and well written - Congratulations on your win in the contest, Sara :) - Have a lovely Easter :) - hugs
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 3/28/2024 4:47:00 PM
thanks for dropping by, Anne-Lisa. Grateful for your congratulatory remarks. Have a blessed evening and lovely Easter. Hard to believe Easter is here...March just blew by so quickly :-) Hugs, Sara
Date: 3/26/2024 11:02:00 AM
Back with Congratulations on your win. I enjoyed reading this wonderful "Utopia" story/write/quote/great ending again. Enjoy your day/win..............
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 3/26/2024 5:31:00 PM
thank you for returning, Paula, and for your congratulatory words. I appreciate all the support you give me. You're a gem, hugs, Sara
Date: 3/26/2024 8:48:00 AM
"...Inner Utopia awaits..." - a powerful write dear Sara. That entire stanza is a gem. Congratulations! :)
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 3/26/2024 5:31:00 PM
thanks for your visit, Linda, and for your congratulatory words. I'm excited, enjoy your evening, hugs, Sara
Date: 3/18/2024 4:40:00 AM
Hi Ms. Sara, You dug real deep on this one girly.. "her pain feeds her shame", "when will you take the statue of your own peace". Best wishes in your contest, amazing work here.
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 3/26/2024 5:30:00 PM
thank you, Nancy, for your visit and comments. Sorry I missed your visit earlier. Don't know how I did it. have a great evening, Sara
Date: 3/17/2024 10:52:00 PM
Had to take a breath at times to pace the emotional impact on reading this poem Sara, a mastetful write giving evidence of your profound knowledge of the human condition. Has an almost Shakespearean flow to the ear...this is a poem that deserves to be read aloud.
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 3/18/2024 4:11:00 AM
Thanks for stopping by, Paul. What wonderful comments! I appreciate your enthusiasm and complimentary words. I like your idea of reading it aloud...would help with the pace. Have a great day...Sara...appreciate your consistent support :-)
Date: 3/17/2024 4:26:00 PM
A marvellous write Sara, no one knows the hurt or fears someone owns, they hide it behind a smile and a caring soul. I’m reduced to tears too, reading this Free Verse from you. Blessings Beryl x
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 3/17/2024 6:02:00 PM
awww, thank you, Beryl. I'm grateful my poem moved you to tears. I thought the poem was one many people would identify with. Thanks for your visit & have a blessed evening, Sara
Date: 3/17/2024 3:18:00 PM
I am left in anticipation. Does the princess find happiness? It's an erudite poem that reaches out to the reader. Thank-you for this optimistic tool to use in life.
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 3/17/2024 6:03:00 PM
thank you for your in depth read, dear Hilda. We are left wondering if the princess goes within and finds her own Utopia. Thank you for your positive comments and for your visit. Have a pleasant evening, Sara
Date: 3/17/2024 11:04:00 AM
I enjoyed reading your wonderful write/story/great ending/picture. "Good Luck" Have a wonderful day..................
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 3/17/2024 6:04:00 PM
thank you for visiting, Paula. Wishing you a blessed evening, Sara
Date: 3/17/2024 10:29:00 AM
Wow, a nice poem.
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 3/17/2024 6:04:00 PM
thank you, Jay. Appreciate your visit today. Have a splendid evening, Sara
Date: 3/17/2024 9:51:00 AM
wow! Your creative mind is flowing like a fountain here, its a fav, anyone who can write and share like this, deserves it Sara :)
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 3/17/2024 6:05:00 PM
oh, dear Rose, you are so kind and mindful. I appreciate your enthusiasm for this poem. I'm humbly grateful for your fave...that means a great deal to me. Have a delightful evening, Sara
Date: 3/17/2024 8:43:00 AM
Wow. This one is very impactful. Some women are like this. It's a real shame.
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 3/17/2024 6:06:00 PM
I agree, Andrea, some women are like this...camouflaged and inauthentic in their own cocoon. Thanks for visiting today & have a pleasant evening. Sara
Date: 3/17/2024 7:39:00 AM
Dear Sara, i dont know why im in tears reading this, this hit so deep. You are such a beautiful soul, i do believe you can see beyond all the glamor and smiles, the untold tales of an individual. As you are truly an empathetic soul, and that is rare and precious, i love the way youv started also the poem and how it just flows in such an evocative and soul stirring manner . So many lines stood out for me but “ When will you take the statute of your own peace?” That hit the strongest for me. A fav
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 3/17/2024 6:08:00 PM
oh dearest Ink, your words touched me; I'm grateful you see me as an empathetic soul. You're right...I've always seen beyond the office, even in photographs. It's a blessing most of the time and certainly helps when writing :-) I appreciate your in depth read as well as your fave...humbly grateful. Your words are gratifying...have a splendid evening, Sara
Date: 3/17/2024 6:48:00 AM
You built her portrait brilliantly Sara. Sometimes a smile hides the pain within--for the fair lady suffers in silence. Great advice in the ending lines toward a path of inner peace.
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 3/17/2024 6:09:00 PM
thanks for visiting, Vijay; I'm grateful you saw the deeper meaning behind the 'portrait' I painted. I appreciate your insights and kind words...have a pleasant evening, Sara
Date: 3/17/2024 6:39:00 AM
Hi Sara.. Your poignant poem delves into the complex emotions of a character, described as the "Chandelier Princess," who outwardly presents an image of regal grace and beauty but inwardly harbours hidden pain and suffering. The contrast of her external appearance with her internal struggles creates a compelling narrative that invites reflection on the masks we wear and the true selves we conceal.. An excellent poem..
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 3/17/2024 6:11:00 PM
thanks, Silent One. I'm grateful for your complimentary words. I find them encouraging and supportive. I appreciate you seeing the contrast I created. Wishing you a pleasant evening, Sara
Date: 3/17/2024 6:35:00 AM
Dear Sara, reading your soulful poem is an experience, realization of a profound truth. I always enjoy reading your poems, and this one is truly special. Love ~
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 3/17/2024 6:12:00 PM
thank you, Malabika, for your mindful and complimentary words...grateful you enjoy reading my poems. I echo those some thoughts about yours...the one you wrote today was exquisite. Hugs, Sara
Date: 3/17/2024 6:19:00 AM
healing, often unknown to the one whose secrets grieve their souls, is found in the release, the repentance, the rest of the soul who finds salvation from One who knows, even though the sinner sometimes won't admit the sin that silences and shames, remembering only to blame. This is an urgent poem who speaks to the heart and remembers the beautiful in our hope. God bless you sweet friend. Love, Gina
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 3/17/2024 6:13:00 PM
thank you for your visit, Gina, and for your insightful and mindful words. I agree...sinners won't admit their sin and live in painful silence...sad to me. Appreciate your wisdom; have a great evening, blessings, Sara

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