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Two Lovers On The Porch

Black star studded night
Porch totally visible by porch light
Two young lovers standing on porch
Knowing daddy soon will call of course

Serious talk has occured
Only the night has heard their words
He's saying that he joined the force
Soon he'll leave for service of course

She's afraid she'll be alone
With him gone so far from home
Maybe her time can be usefully spent
She'll go to school if he'll give consent


(Inspired by Brian Strand's Edward Hooper's Summer Evening contest but not an 
entry.)

Copyright © | Year Posted 2009




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Date: 2/19/2010 8:03:00 AM
second stanza reminds me of Dear John(: so cute. but about your poem, it's all true. there is so much going on in the minds of people younger, that they can't always control their actions at the moment. -Always&Forever Lynette
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Date: 10/20/2009 9:49:00 AM
Its a nice poem Sara. Keep up love. Thanks
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Date: 10/19/2009 11:52:00 PM
Dear Sara, You should have entered. It is very good. Love, Lainie
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Date: 10/19/2009 1:56:00 PM
You should enter it.It's a great read loving,tender it's beautiful Sara.I have Fredrichs ataxia.Thanks for reading my poem.Teresa
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Date: 10/19/2009 7:01:00 AM
nicely penned, good job!
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Date: 10/18/2009 8:00:00 PM
Very nice write. Good imagery and great rhyming. Thanks for sharing and thank you for your comments on my poems. Caroline.
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Date: 10/18/2009 12:09:00 PM
beautiful write enjoy reading your poetry..........kate
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Date: 10/18/2009 7:56:00 AM
It should have been one really good write flows so very well. Really likes your use of ryhme in this one keep that pen flowing
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Date: 10/18/2009 5:01:00 AM
Sara - You truly have a gift my dear - Thank you so VERY much for ALL of the insprirational words. My husband leaves for Afghanistan in July, so these all hit home. Thanks again for your great writes. Love, Kelly
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Date: 10/17/2009 6:23:00 PM
Beautiful piece Sara >> James
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Date: 10/17/2009 5:05:00 PM
I loved the poem, I can only aspire to be as accomplished a poet as you!
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Date: 10/17/2009 4:27:00 PM
A beautiful poem, Sarah. I like it. Also thanks for your encouraging comments on my poem Big Heart. -Mohammad
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Date: 10/17/2009 2:50:00 PM
Beautiful narration of two young lovers on the porch, things are so different when thought out in a young mind. I remember thoes times at the things I would have done differently, had I waited and thought it out through a more mature mind. I sure we all have, and would have done differently. Thanks for your encourgement in contest. Sincerely, love, Moses
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