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Two-Faced

A tyburn is a six line poem consisting of 2,2,2,2,9,9 syllables. 
The first four lines rhyme and are all descriptive words. 
The last two lines rhyme and incorporate the 
1st, 2nd, 3rd, and 4th lines as the 5th to 8th syllables.
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winsome
awesome 
fearsome
loathsome
man of her dreams – winsome, awesome treat
till hurt, betrayed – fearsome, loathsome cheat.

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Contest: Write Me a Tyburn
Sponsor: Kim Rodrigues
Placed 1st

love hurtstyburn

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Angela Crabtree

Date: 1/26/2021 2:07:00 PM

Wow! Perfect write, Paul. Hope you have a great night :)

Eileen Manassian

Date: 3/27/2020 3:12:00 PM

You are a genius...I can say no more.

Paul Callus
Date: 3/29/2020 5:27:00 AM

You are too kind, Eileen....thank you [but I'll willingly accept your sincere praise:)] Hugs // paul

Susan Ashley

Date: 2/24/2018 11:07:00 AM

Paul, returning with a big congratulations for your wonderful first place win with this masterfully written poem. Warmest wishes always. ~Susan

Paul Callus
Date: 2/24/2018 1:44:00 PM

A double thank you for a double visit, Susan:) Your congrats and support are much appreciated. ~ Warm regards // paul

Pandita Sietesantos

Date: 2/20/2018 9:44:00 AM

BIG congratulations to you - my dear friend, Paul, I am always thrilled by your amazing pieces and this one in particular is exquisite - a powerful message cleverly delivered with a few powerful articulate words! Perhaps, one day when I feel brave enough, I will give this challenging new form a try :-)! Love and hugs. Pandita

Paul Callus
Date: 2/20/2018 10:46:00 AM

What a pleasure to have you stopping by with such lovely and encouraging comments, Pandita:) I hope the new year is treating you well:) ~ Love and hugs // Paul

Barbara Barry-Nishanian

Date: 2/18/2018 5:29:00 PM

"Restrictive,' you replied ...is an understatement! What a challenge, New form for me too as John said. Really...CONGRATS! bbn

Paul Callus
Date: 2/19/2018 10:47:00 AM

Thank you for the generous comments, Barbara...they are truly appreciated:) Pleased to have made your acquaintance. Regards // paul

Old Buck

Date: 2/17/2018 3:34:00 PM

Paul: I wouldn't even try this, but you've done a splendid job here. Keep them coming. And thank you for sharing with all of us on the soup. oldbuck

Paul Callus
Date: 2/17/2018 4:18:00 PM

You are too kind, OB!! Thank you! Pleased to have you stopping by. Regards // paul

Gregory Richard Barden

Date: 2/15/2018 8:52:00 PM

This is great stuff, Paul, witty and creative ... congrats, my friend! :-)

Paul Callus
Date: 2/17/2018 4:17:00 PM

Your complimentary feedback is appreciated, my friend...thank you! Regards // paul

Laura Hay

Date: 2/8/2018 7:18:00 AM

What a very clever piece of work Paul, so deserves its winning pin. Congrats! Warm regards, Laura.

Paul Callus
Date: 2/8/2018 9:34:00 AM

Many thanks, Laura...both comments and congrats are appreciated. ~ Warm regards // paul

John Fleming

Date: 2/5/2018 2:34:00 PM

I am not really familiar with this form of poetry, Paul. I can see why this was placed first in the contest though -- indeed it is very cleverly constructed! Nicely done, Paul. My very best regards...as always. :) john

Paul Callus
Date: 2/5/2018 3:37:00 PM

Thank you, John; so pleased you enjoyed it. It's a challenging form because it's too restrictive. Best regards to you too:) // paul

Darlene De Beaulieu

Date: 2/3/2018 7:34:00 PM

Hello Paul, I do like your tyburn.I want to say congrats. Regards Darlene De Beaulieu.

Paul Callus
Date: 2/5/2018 3:26:00 PM

Thank you, Darlene. Your comments and congrats are appreciated. Regards // paul

Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart

Date: 2/3/2018 12:44:00 PM

Back with congrats! xomo :)

Paul Callus
Date: 2/3/2018 1:47:00 PM

A repeat visit is doubly appreciated, Maureen...thank you!:) Wishing you a lovely weekend. // paul

Eve Roper

Date: 2/1/2018 8:37:00 PM

Paul, back with a big congratulations on this great piece :)

Paul Callus
Date: 2/2/2018 1:02:00 PM

Thank you for revisiting with congrats, Eve:) Have a lovely weekend. Hugs // paul

Line Gauthier

Date: 2/1/2018 8:02:00 PM

Good one, Paul. Congrats on your win.

Paul Callus
Date: 2/2/2018 1:00:00 PM

Glad you enjoyed it, Line. Thank you. Regards // paul

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 2/1/2018 7:51:00 PM

very nicely done, Paul! Congrats for the win.

Paul Callus
Date: 2/2/2018 1:00:00 PM

Thank you, Andrea. Have a nice weekend. // paul

Curtis Moorman

Date: 2/1/2018 5:45:00 PM

Paul, this is the kind of writing I hope to achieve one day. Great win!

Paul Callus
Date: 2/2/2018 12:58:00 PM

You are too kind, Curtis...thank you:) Regards // paul

Reason A. Poteet

Date: 2/1/2018 5:40:00 PM

You aced the form, Paul and with a couplet portraying opposites. Congratulations on your top placement. The hard part of dreams is waking up to the truth.

Paul Callus
Date: 2/2/2018 12:40:00 PM

Thank you for the insightful comments and congrats, Reason. Regards // paul

Viv Wigley

Date: 2/1/2018 4:34:00 PM

Brilliant, Paul, a fine example of the form. Congrats on your 1st! Regards, Viv

Paul Callus
Date: 2/1/2018 4:46:00 PM

Thank you for stopping by with comments and congrats, Viv! Best regards, paul

Roy Pett

Date: 2/1/2018 4:16:00 PM

Back to offer my congratulations on your well deserved win with this brilliant Tyburn Paul. :))

Paul Callus
Date: 2/1/2018 4:46:00 PM

Thank you, Roy...a double visit is always appreciated:) Regards // paul

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 2/1/2018 2:29:00 PM

Aptly said, Paul! Congrats on 1st place!

Paul Callus
Date: 2/1/2018 3:26:00 PM

This is definitely a lovely surprise, Kim:) Thank you!! Best regards // paul

Eileen Manassian

Date: 1/28/2018 1:03:00 AM

WOW. I've never written one of these, and I'm not sure I can do it justice as you have. It's wonderful and true...unfortunately. Hugs, dear one. I miss you.

Paul Callus
Date: 1/28/2018 12:07:00 PM

Thank you, Eileen. You too have been missed, but I know you have been abroad enjoying the company of family and friends, especially your daughter. I also was away from Soup for a while, for various reasons. Hugs // paul

Elaine George

Date: 1/27/2018 9:26:00 AM

A very masterful conveyance of this poetry form, dear Paul.

Paul Callus
Date: 1/27/2018 9:44:00 AM

Thank you Elaine; your lovely comment is much appreciated! Have a nice weekend. Regards // paul

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 1/24/2018 3:04:00 AM

An excellent example of this challenging form Paul. I can relate from long ago in my youth. I think it will do well! : )

Paul Callus
Date: 1/27/2018 9:29:00 AM

Hi Connie....trying my best to catch up with accumulated mail! Life deals out both sweet and sour experiences! Thank you for stopping by. Regards // paul

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser

Date: 1/24/2018 2:16:00 AM

Never heard of this form before, thanks for a very informative post and a good example.. :D I might try this one time :O Smiles & hugs, olive_eloi

Paul Callus
Date: 1/27/2018 9:25:00 AM

Excuse the late reply, Olive_eloi. I had never heard of this form, either! Do try it, but it's not much fun, too restricted, even for one like me who likes short forms!! Have a lovely weekend. Hugs & smiles // paul