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written for the nursery rhymes contest sponsored by Tom woody, i cant do whacky and funny writing so its a bit twisted and dark. 

Premiere Contest WinnerTwisted tale of Humpty Dumpty

Truth isn't always within the region of reason; it can flirt with the edges of insanity. Let's dive into the twisted reality of Humpty Dumpty. Its bitter smell will linger like rotten eggs in the night breeze.

Once upon a time, when sunshine kissed the honeyed horizon, there existed a handsome knight. His eyes glistened like emeralds in the illuminating moonlight, and his hair was golden, like perfect strands of straw. The Queen, with her long ivory hair and sapphire eyes, became utterly infatuated by this mysterious man. With the King's duties keeping him away for long periods, the Queen grew very lonely. So with the King gone and as the last caws of the crows silenced, the Queen would invite Humpty Dumpty (originally known as Humble Harold Junior) to her chamber of lavish entertainment.

There, he would tell her comical tales of the valley, make her laugh, and drink until the moon slipped below the white-tipped ocean. She longed for any form of kindness and warmth, and he, with his charming nature, knew how to make her feel cherished.

But it wasn't long before the King found out about their scandalous escapades in graphic detail. You see, he never fully trusted his wife, so when he was gone for periods of time, he left behind sinister spies. And when he knew what went on in his absence, he was furious,  with the wrathful rage of a thousand suns.

So one day, the King summoned a wicked sorcerer to cast a spell upon Humpty Dumpty. He told the magician to take all his beauty away and turn him into a hideous clown. But the dark arts played their little games and turned him into an egg instead!

Even though the Queen no longer recognized him, not a day went by when she didn't think of his kind soul. Whenever she saw his eyes, she felt his presence. The King wasn’t pleased with this—a narcissist's worst nightmare lay before him.

So this time, he ordered the guards to build a wall, lure Humpty Dumpty to sit on it, and then push him to his doom, ensuring he would never see the light of dawn again. And he did not. He slowly cracked, leaving behind a puddle of rancid yolk. As he lay dying, he uttered his last breath, cursing the King and all of his servants to a nightmarish realm. As the light faded from his eyes, the yolk transformed into a devilish well, where the water turned blood red and screams of anguish could be heard.

As time passed, his voice still lingered and echoed through the hallways, while his ghost continued to haunt the King, especially when the clouds were heavy and laden with ash, and the sky flowed with eclipsed beams. You can see his silhouette sitting on the cursed well. 

One by one, all the king’s horses and all the king’s men began to disappear. Nobody knows what happened to them, but you can still hear their screams reverberate through the night… 
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Gasun Avatar
July 28, 2024 at 6:08 PM
Wow! Dearest poet friend Ink, this is extremely captivating and awesome story poem. You're both a very talented poetess and a story writter. I adore this story poem and enjoyed so much. Congratulations belatedly on your well-deserved trophy win! Thank you so much for sharing. God bless you always and your writings. Hugs
Daniel Avatar
July 26, 2024 at 3:18 AM
What a dark tale! I love your twist on this nursery rhyme, Ink:)
Buehler Avatar
July 23, 2024 at 10:20 PM
Dear Ink, you have created a fascinating, fun tale of Humpty Dumpty. Thank you for creating smiles that linger. Congratulations on your trophy win. Blessings.
Beaufort Avatar
July 23, 2024 at 5:36 PM
IE, you managed to write something incredible. This seems to me to be in the style of Edgar Allan Poe. It also gives a lot to think about. I'm not a fan of jealousy or envy, and this tale covers the consequences as a story we're all sure to remember....just in case our minds should take us in that direction. My mind working this imagines our politicians as figures in this story. BTW, you have me smiling again!!!
M  Avatar
July 23, 2024 at 7:43 AM
Wow Sweet Ink ….you certainly can tell a good tale! A captivating write from start to end! Well done you! Debx
George Avatar
July 21, 2024 at 9:03 PM
Wow....You have taken the story of Humpty Dumpty to unimaginable heights. Thus you have proved your might as a story teller too. Romance outside wedlock is seen as a crime. Unfortunately here in the story, the accuser and the culprit and everyone related to them meet with a tragic end."As the light faded from his eyes, the yolk transformed into a devilish well, where the water turned blood red and screams of anguish could be heard." This really added a ghoulish dimension to the story. I am sure, this can be developed into a real horror movie. It has all the ingredients.... suspense, crime, romance, dark forces, witchcraft, punishment et al...Hearty Congratulations on your trophy win, dear gifted friend... !
Empress Avatar
July 23, 2024 at 11:47 AM
You are too sweet sweet valsa thank you so very much
Jones Avatar
July 21, 2024 at 9:16 AM
What a wonderful talent you are! You could write for movies and tv! What riches you would make Inky! Thank you for sharing it on soup and congratulations on your trophy win!
Empress Avatar
July 21, 2024 at 9:31 AM
Awwn you are too sweet really. This was just an idea that came to me while thinking of what to do as i cant be funny ahhah thank you sweet soul
Dietrich Avatar
July 21, 2024 at 8:58 AM
Wow you did a ghost story out of it. Congrats on the trophy, Ink
Empress Avatar
July 21, 2024 at 9:31 AM
Thank you sweet andrea so much always
Woods Avatar
July 21, 2024 at 7:54 AM
This was wonderful! Creative and intriguing story! Congratulations! Xoxo
Empress Avatar
July 21, 2024 at 9:32 AM
Thank you so much crystol, i appreciate you reading
Kendrick Avatar
July 21, 2024 at 7:44 AM
Congratulations on your winning work. Way to go. Very creative and well, yolky. Sara K
Empress Avatar
July 21, 2024 at 9:32 AM
Yolky haha thank you dear sara
Rhymes Avatar
July 21, 2024 at 1:58 AM
Wow didn’t know you can write like this . Enjoyed reading
Empress Avatar
July 21, 2024 at 9:32 AM
Awwn thank you dahlin i shud write a book lol what do you think
Hind Avatar
July 20, 2024 at 6:00 PM
Oh, a great win for you! You could write a novel. :)
Empress Avatar
July 21, 2024 at 9:32 AM
Awwn thank you so much
DiMino Avatar
July 20, 2024 at 4:36 PM
Wow! Quite a tale, held my interest, from the amorous beginning to the liquid splatter, or drip or ooze rather. Andersen and Poe in one glorious, congealing yoke. Every bit deserving of honor. Great read!
Empress Avatar
July 20, 2024 at 10:37 PM
Oh i dont know anderson but i love poe and listen to his poetry spoken on youtube to sleep. thank you for such a wonderful comment im grateful truly
Jama Avatar
July 20, 2024 at 3:15 PM
See I told you it is good Ink. ????
Empress Avatar
July 20, 2024 at 3:17 PM
Thank you for your suggestions to enhance this bloody write. Haha. Your honesty is helpful haha
George Avatar
July 20, 2024 at 3:09 PM
The king went rogue and his wrath was merciless but that's how you protect your wife. A lovely one Dear Inky. Now you are good with storytelling. Lovely descriptions and flow. What if she ate the egg? Her sweet Humpty Dumpty would be in her stomach for a long time and she would feel more closer to him. Hahaha. Congratulations on your lovely win. I still haven't figured out my storytelling skills.
Empress Avatar
July 20, 2024 at 3:12 PM
Omg thats brilliant hahaha im dying! In her stomach forever! You are so funny!! I wish I thought of that! Thank you dear tonye
Roper Avatar
July 20, 2024 at 2:20 PM
Back with congratulations I knew it would be a winner.
Empress Avatar
July 20, 2024 at 2:53 PM
Thank you thats so kind of you dear eve
Slaughter Avatar
July 20, 2024 at 1:37 PM
Twisted...and dark...indeed! Congrats, Ink Empress.
Empress Avatar
July 20, 2024 at 2:53 PM
Thank you so much
Anaya Avatar
July 20, 2024 at 12:02 PM
The intro excites the reader. A lonely Queen with ivory hair, the descriptions are gorgeous, and her naughty way does so many in with cold, cruel dark magic. The imagery is stunning, the nursery tale is better I think, a darker version. Flows so beautifully well crafted, very creative in story telling Empress! Wonderfully done xhugs
Anaya Avatar
July 20, 2024 at 3:09 PM
Back with congratulations!!!!
Empress Avatar
July 20, 2024 at 3:06 PM
Thank you so much dear anaya. Haha i should try storytelling more often
Hind Avatar
July 20, 2024 at 11:19 AM
Wow, go Ink! You're a great storyteller! I can't do short stories. So original- an egg yolk...very interesting.
Empress Avatar
July 20, 2024 at 3:13 PM
Awwn thank you so much, reading tom woody helps, please check his work out
One Avatar
July 20, 2024 at 10:09 AM
Such a vivid imagination you have dear and how well you created a dark tale of the Humpty Dumpty.. The lingering presence of Humpty Dumpty's ghost and the gradual disappearance of the King’s men create a chilling sense of retribution. The final image of the King's ghostly silhouette by the cursed well solidifies the poem's theme of inescapable guilt and torment. The interesting blend of dark fantasy and horror, using vivid imagery and a compelling narrative to transform a simple nursery rhyme into a profound and disturbing tale.. BOL in contest..
Empress Avatar
July 21, 2024 at 9:33 AM
Thank you silent one
Roper Avatar
July 20, 2024 at 10:07 AM
awesome story , what a cruel king...
Empress Avatar
July 21, 2024 at 9:33 AM
Thank you so much dear eve
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