Richard Lamoureux Poet Terzanelle

Towards the Light

Life like glowing beings along my path
Playfully they blink as each one I pass
Windshield bathed in a luminecent bath

Around the curve I step on the gas
I feel like I am heading towards the stars
Playfully they blink as each one I pass

On a collision course with other cars
Before I know it I'm out of control
I feel like I am heading towards the stars

between the lights it's as black as coal
Help me, I don't wish to go to the light
Before I know it I'm out of control

My eyes adjust within death it is bright
Help me, I don't wish to go to the light
Life like glowing beings along my path
windshield bathed in a luminecent bath

For Nettes  Find The Puzzle contest
Written by: Richard Lamoureux
October 3rd, 2014

Your word TARNDAI
My word TETENISI

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Debbie Guzzi January 21, 2015 at 10:30 AM A near death experience ( I had a similar one - shiver- one's enough) I enjoyed it. Light & Love

Timothy Hicks October 13, 2014 at 7:22 PM Soup Mail!

Timothy Hicks October 13, 2014 at 4:59 PM Very abstract and imaginative, Richard! And on a difficult form it's seamless. I really enjoy the line "I feel like I am heading for the stars". I can't help but imagine your car heading off a cliff into the sea. It's tragic, but in a way hopeful... heading into the light, while at the same time being apprehensive. To be at peace when you go is perhaps one of the most difficult things to accomplish... sorry for the rambling comment. WELL PENNED, however! Richard Lamoureux October 13, 2014 at 5:31 PM Thanks Timothy, in answer to your other question, yes she was a demon.

Dr.Ram Mehta October 10, 2014 at 10:43 PM Creative and aptly done poem, Congrats on the win, Richard

Brenda Meier-Hans October 10, 2014 at 6:43 PM Glad to see you here Richard. Congratulations on your win.

Jan Allison October 10, 2014 at 4:20 PM Dropping back with my congrats:-) hugs jan xxx

Scott Thirtyseven October 7, 2014 at 6:24 AM A lovely ride for the reader, and unfortunate end for the subject. Great piece of poetry, and wonderful puzzle.

Arthur Vaso October 4, 2014 at 9:39 PM I loved the poem, but I may have to ask for your drivers license!!!! :) Cheers Richard Lamoureux October 5, 2014 at 12:33 AM Ha ha, you have to catch up with me first!

Eileen Manassian October 4, 2014 at 5:17 PM Richard....a powerful write...in a beautiful form. SO glad that it isn't true. I never want harm to come anywhere near you or your loved ones....The only lights I want you to see are the lovely ones in the heavens on a clear reflective night. Blessings. Richard Lamoureux October 5, 2014 at 12:35 AM Aww that's sweet Eileen. Blessings to you as well. Goodnight or I guess i should say good morning.

Liam Mcdaid October 4, 2014 at 12:13 PM outstanding piece of writing richard Richard Lamoureux October 5, 2014 at 12:36 AM Thanks Liam.

Monterey Sirak October 4, 2014 at 9:31 AM Absolutely stunning work!!!!!!!!!!! Richard Lamoureux October 5, 2014 at 12:37 AM Thanks Monterey.

Sharon Gulley October 3, 2014 at 8:26 PM A wonderfully brilliant write. The story had me caught and spell bound all the way through to the end. I enjoyed this Richard a lot, Good luck in the contest....Sharon G. Richard Lamoureux October 4, 2014 at 8:11 AM Thanks Sharon.

Tim Smith October 3, 2014 at 4:34 PM Shine here and the path will be lit for you. Richard Lamoureux October 3, 2014 at 4:56 PM You'll have to explain this comment to me Tim, sometimes I'm a bit slow.

Casarah Nance October 3, 2014 at 4:31 PM wow! well done, I was right there with ya every word of the way! :) Richard Lamoureux October 3, 2014 at 4:32 PM Thanks Brenda, a little luck could not hurt. Richard Lamoureux October 3, 2014 at 4:32 PM Thanks Casarah.

Brenda Meier-Hans October 3, 2014 at 4:23 PM Brilliantly penned Richard. Good luck in the contest. Richard Lamoureux October 3, 2014 at 4:33 PM My comment for you jumped up one spot.

Charmaine Chircop October 3, 2014 at 3:46 PM I hope this isn't a true story..I don't want you to go to the light yet either,and nor to those stars.What would We do without your poetry and your many times enlightening verse?Love it Richard. Richard Lamoureux October 3, 2014 at 4:31 PM Nope not a true story, I am very much among the living. I was trying to come up with something surprising for the contest.

Maurice Yvonne October 3, 2014 at 3:43 PM Great Take on the contest. I think you did well to do it as a Terzanelle. Hope this does well in the contest. Richard Lamoureux October 3, 2014 at 4:30 PM Thanks Maurice, it did make it more challanging to connect the dots.

Jan Allison October 3, 2014 at 3:11 PM Great imagery here Richard. Good luck in the contest. Hugs jan xx (final line you need an extra d in windshield- will remove this comment when you alter it) Richard Lamoureux October 3, 2014 at 4:29 PM Thanks Jan, no reason to remove the comment, I appreciate you pointing it out.