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Towards the Light

Life like glowing beings along my path Playfully they blink as each one I pass Windshield bathed in a luminecent bath Around the curve I step on the gas I feel like I am heading towards the stars Playfully they blink as each one I pass On a collision course with other cars Before I know it I'm out of control I feel like I am heading towards the stars between the lights it's as black as coal Help me, I don't wish to go to the light Before I know it I'm out of control My eyes adjust within death it is bright Help me, I don't wish to go to the light Life like glowing beings along my path windshield bathed in a luminecent bath For Nettes Find The Puzzle contest Written by: Richard Lamoureux October 3rd, 2014 Your word TARNDAI My word TETENISI

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Debbie Guzzi

Date: 1/21/2015 10:30:00 AM

A near death experience ( I had a similar one - shiver- one's enough) I enjoyed it. Light & Love

Timothy Hicks

Date: 10/13/2014 7:22:00 PM

Soup Mail!

Timothy Hicks

Date: 10/13/2014 4:59:00 PM

Very abstract and imaginative, Richard! And on a difficult form it's seamless. I really enjoy the line "I feel like I am heading for the stars". I can't help but imagine your car heading off a cliff into the sea. It's tragic, but in a way hopeful... heading into the light, while at the same time being apprehensive. To be at peace when you go is perhaps one of the most difficult things to accomplish... sorry for the rambling comment. WELL PENNED, however!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/13/2014 5:31:00 PM

Thanks Timothy, in answer to your other question, yes she was a demon.

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 10/10/2014 10:43:00 PM

Creative and aptly done poem, Congrats on the win, Richard

Brenda Meier-Hans

Date: 10/10/2014 6:43:00 PM

Glad to see you here Richard. Congratulations on your win.

Jan Allison

Date: 10/10/2014 4:20:00 PM

Dropping back with my congrats:-) hugs jan xxx

Scott Thirtyseven

Date: 10/7/2014 6:24:00 AM

A lovely ride for the reader, and unfortunate end for the subject. Great piece of poetry, and wonderful puzzle.

Arthur Vaso

Date: 10/4/2014 9:39:00 PM

I loved the poem, but I may have to ask for your drivers license!!!! :) Cheers

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/5/2014 12:33:00 AM

Ha ha, you have to catch up with me first!

Eileen Manassian

Date: 10/4/2014 5:17:00 PM

Richard....a powerful write...in a beautiful form. SO glad that it isn't true. I never want harm to come anywhere near you or your loved ones....The only lights I want you to see are the lovely ones in the heavens on a clear reflective night. Blessings.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/5/2014 12:35:00 AM

Aww that's sweet Eileen. Blessings to you as well. Goodnight or I guess i should say good morning.

Liam Mcdaid

Date: 10/4/2014 12:13:00 PM

outstanding piece of writing richard

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/5/2014 12:36:00 AM

Thanks Liam.

Monterey Sirak

Date: 10/4/2014 9:31:00 AM

Absolutely stunning work!!!!!!!!!!!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/5/2014 12:37:00 AM

Thanks Monterey.

Sharon Gulley

Date: 10/3/2014 8:26:00 PM

A wonderfully brilliant write. The story had me caught and spell bound all the way through to the end. I enjoyed this Richard a lot, Good luck in the contest....Sharon G.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/4/2014 8:11:00 AM

Thanks Sharon.

Tim Smith

Date: 10/3/2014 4:34:00 PM

Shine here and the path will be lit for you.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/3/2014 4:56:00 PM

You'll have to explain this comment to me Tim, sometimes I'm a bit slow.

Casarah Nance

Date: 10/3/2014 4:31:00 PM

wow! well done, I was right there with ya every word of the way! :)

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/3/2014 4:32:00 PM

Thanks Brenda, a little luck could not hurt.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/3/2014 4:32:00 PM

Thanks Casarah.

Brenda Meier-Hans

Date: 10/3/2014 4:23:00 PM

Brilliantly penned Richard. Good luck in the contest.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/3/2014 4:33:00 PM

My comment for you jumped up one spot.

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 10/3/2014 3:46:00 PM

I hope this isn't a true story..I don't want you to go to the light yet either,and nor to those stars.What would We do without your poetry and your many times enlightening verse?Love it Richard.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/3/2014 4:31:00 PM

Nope not a true story, I am very much among the living. I was trying to come up with something surprising for the contest.

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 10/3/2014 3:43:00 PM

Great Take on the contest. I think you did well to do it as a Terzanelle. Hope this does well in the contest.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/3/2014 4:30:00 PM

Thanks Maurice, it did make it more challanging to connect the dots.

Jan Allison

Date: 10/3/2014 3:11:00 PM

Great imagery here Richard. Good luck in the contest. Hugs jan xx (final line you need an extra d in windshield- will remove this comment when you alter it)

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/3/2014 4:29:00 PM

Thanks Jan, no reason to remove the comment, I appreciate you pointing it out.