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Touch Me-Monday

NO!
Not now
Damn alarm
Feel like crying
Another Monday
I have to go to work
And still feeling so confused
Look at all those freaking stop lights
Touch me, tell me I am not dreaming
Will one of you damn lights turn green today

It's rush hour? How come we are not moving
Touch me again. With a baseball bat
Take me away from this nightmare
A tropical island please
I’ll touch that alarm clock
With a large hammer
No more Mondays
Feel better? 
Feel good?
YES!


Vince Suzadail Jr
For Nette Onclaud's Touch me count -up and down contest

Copyright © Vince Suzadail Jr. | Year Posted 2011

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Akash Yadav Date: 8/24/2011 5:13:00 AM this is a great write... I wish you all the best for future...sincerely, akash. Login to Reply

Phyllis Babcock Date: 7/28/2011 11:07:00 AM I think we all could visualize ourselves in this situation Vince. No more Mondays would be great. love phyl Login to Reply

Judy Ball Date: 7/28/2011 12:55:00 AM Been theere and done that. Looking forward to retirement. Very good feeling in this. Love the imagery. I could see myself in your words. A good write. God Bless, JB Login to Reply

Robert A. Dufresne Date: 6/8/2011 6:12:00 PM Sounds alot like my commutes, Vince. excellent Etheree . Thanks fo your comment on my poem. Login to Reply

Mohammad Yamin Date: 5/30/2011 1:18:00 PM A superb Etheree - a great write. It is always so rewarding to read your well articulated poems. Thanks for your encouraging comments on my poem Mother. I missed the Mother's Day Contest. -Mohammad Login to Reply

James Fraser Date: 5/1/2011 7:52:00 AM Many congratulations on your win in Nette's fine contest Vince. Have a lovely Sunday....:) Login to Reply

Carol Sunshine Brown Date: 4/29/2011 11:45:00 AM Congratulations on your win Vince in Nette's contest. Love, Carol Login to Reply

Elaine George Date: 4/28/2011 10:42:00 PM Definitely FIRST PLACE! Win. Many congrats, Lainie Login to Reply

Emma Buckeridge Date: 4/28/2011 9:00:00 PM Congratulations on the big win! Great poem, I sure feel like this on a Monday morning. Well done. Login to Reply

Debbie Guzzi Date: 4/28/2011 5:41:00 PM LOL, yup, me and road rage, I hear ya! Congrad's on your win. Light & Love Login to Reply

Kash Poet Date: 4/28/2011 10:37:00 AM Just Excellent!!Congrats on your 1st place win,Vince--kash Login to Reply

Iolanda Scripca Date: 4/28/2011 10:30:00 AM Oh, Vince, you've spoken my mind :) This is seriously funny!!! I hate Mondays too. Who doesn't? You are an excellent poet/writer!!! Congrats on your bIG win! Love, iolanda Login to Reply

Gautami Phookan Date: 4/28/2011 10:26:00 AM Excellent write on 'bad' Mondays. Congrats on your 1st place win. liked this one..gautami Login to Reply

Francine Roberts Date: 4/28/2011 9:36:00 AM great job , congrats on your first place win Login to Reply

Carolyn Devonshire Date: 4/28/2011 9:32:00 AM Wish I could send you a "tropical island," Vince. There are alarm clocks (with padding) that you can throw against a wall to make them stop ringing. Maybe for your next birthday... Excellent work! Congratulations on taking the top spot in Nette's contest! Love, Carolyn Login to Reply

Linda-Marie Sweetheart Date: 4/28/2011 4:34:00 AM Congrats Vince on your first place win in Nette's contest with this exquisite entry my friend... a lovely lilting piece of poetry ..enjoy your top spot for a top notch poem..luv.. Login to Reply

Gwendolen Song Date: 4/28/2011 12:23:00 AM I started to write for this contest and took a similar angle...u have some serious hatred for Mondays, don't you? Hilarious write! Congrats on your first place win! Gwendolen Login to Reply

Kabuteng P.Ink K. Date: 4/27/2011 10:51:00 PM Oh this one is so cool, Vince ^_^ you got me smiling a lot here, and I really liked how you did yours, starting with No! & ending with Yes! Very witty etheree on Monday ^_^ Super congrats on your 1st place win ^_^ --- btw-- can you pls tell me the title of your stream write? Thank you :D Login to Reply

Samual Ronthorpe Date: 4/27/2011 7:39:00 PM Excellent. Congrats on a great write. Login to Reply

Joyce Johnson Date: 4/27/2011 6:50:00 PM My goodness Vince you hate Mondays much more than I do. But then I am retired. Congratulations on your big win. Love, Joyce Login to Reply

John Freeman Date: 4/27/2011 6:37:00 PM Congratulation Vince on first place. Agape, Moses Login to Reply

Carrie Richards Date: 4/27/2011 5:22:00 PM Hooray...this was a favorite of mine! So glad to see it is number 1 !! Congrats Vince!! well deserved! Login to Reply

Andrea Dietrich Date: 4/27/2011 5:18:00 PM vince, this is awesome. One of the few I have read on the subject of Monday. The worst day of the week for me and I too feel just like you about it. Congratulations. Great humor shining thru. Login to Reply

Poet Destroyer A Date: 4/23/2011 1:02:00 AM Wow! Sounds like.Friday... that's the.only day I dread to get up.. and move around... and I hear ya on them stop lights... enjoyed your poem... take.care...p.d. Login to Reply

Carrie Richards Date: 4/20/2011 6:40:00 PM Sooo many folks will relate to this one!! Better have another cup of coffee, Vince!! You'll need it!! LOL !! Login to Reply

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