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To the Dandelion in the Concrete

You probably don't think much of me save for the season of spring when your lawn litters itself with giant over-buttered popcorn (birds that think they can sing, supersonic sneezes? those kinds of things) And yet here I am, standing out like a stamp on a letter (a marble in a field? even better) I don't wish to be a bother, only a friend (merely an acquaintance would suit me fine) But alas ... I see your eager fingers reaching for the spray (you DO know that I'll just come back ... like ... the following day?) I'm not like those other plants, all stuck up regardless of circumstance (certainly not like those stoic cedars; when the breeze hits me right I like to dance) But don't get it twisted that my musicality means I'm soft as goo, for - like my herbaceous brethren - I have my weapons, too The grass they have blades, but I... I am a shining emerald lance, a golden head is my insignia Address: two-ten Sidewalkville, in the Botanical State of Suburbia That line by your feet? well, that's my line in the sand This patch of summer lawn is my country folk's native land And I dare you to cross it (nay, make it double) Take your ten timid toes an inch to the right and there'll be no trouble For you see ... I am invincible: I cannot be erased Matters not how many lawnmower blades you replace To that tunnel-light I will not inspect To that goodly night I will not go gentle Merely attempting to slay me, to your child's health 'twould be detrimental (and who had the audacity to call me dandy?) Just because my colorful coat reminds one of candy doesn't presume sweetness of taste, fragility of frame... (weak in the knees? please) I headbutted my way into existence right through the concrete all the while you slept all swaddled in your sheets (tender to the touch, softness of the head? you presume volumes too much) I thrive in the August heat: triple degrees, my dose of caffeine Any other species would have wilted away, destined to be crunched under so many city feet (I'm looking at you, autumn leaves) But me? When it's my time to go, to the azure heavens is where I'll be (when the moon sets low and those bright dots begin to show) That's when you'll know I am eternal Resilient as a rock, but like an eagle I am free (no date upon the calendar could possibly confine me) NOTE: I originally attempted to make an entry for that Pantoum Personification contest, but I quickly realized pantoum was out of the question ... lol. Don't like to share posts in a row that have such similar titles (like my other one, The Dandelions Beg to Differ) ... however, I think it's okay since this one is ACTUALLY about dandelions. Lol.

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Date: 5/17/2020 9:36:00 AM
I always enjoy reading you Tim, I see congrats are in order, potd and potw. I truly enjoy how you write, this personification is a delight!
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Date: 5/10/2020 11:46:00 AM
Hi Tim: Well.....POTW and of the day. So well deserved. This is so defiant but has a tongue in cheek mischievousness to it. I love the allusion to the puffs being eternal (which they are). Paratrooper babies spreading everywhar....You can use that LOL SuZ
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Timothy Hicks
Date: 5/11/2020 11:48:00 AM
"Paratrooper babies" ... hahaha. LOVE it!
Date: 5/7/2020 8:48:00 AM
Love Dandelions, hate Pantoums. Two green thumbs up. xomo
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 5/10/2020 4:56:00 AM
I'm the opposite dont like dandelions ... they are invading our lawn at the moment, love writing pantoums I don't find them challenging now lol:-)
Date: 5/6/2020 8:56:00 PM
back to say congratulations on your POTW... hugs
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Date: 5/5/2020 6:00:00 PM
If Silent One says you are talented, it must be true and it must be from his heart. A rare honor you have.. to receive POTD and POTW--both speak to your gifted poetry. Congrats Tim--hope to see more of you.
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Timothy Hicks
Date: 5/6/2020 5:21:00 PM
Thanks again for your wonderful visits, Vijay. Wasn't expecting either POTD or POTW! But happily surprised.
Date: 5/5/2020 8:54:00 AM
Poem of the week aswell.... thats what happens when a talented poet returns... Its always good to be strong and free.. Congrats on POTW..
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Timothy Hicks
Date: 5/6/2020 4:55:00 PM
You're too kind Silent .... thank you!
Date: 5/4/2020 10:04:00 PM
Timothy, it’s a pleasure for me to return with my congratulations for your poem’s recognition with POTW honors. A wonderfully worthy choice. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan
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Timothy Hicks
Date: 5/6/2020 4:49:00 PM
Thanks for returning for the congrats ... see ya around, my friend.
Date: 5/3/2020 10:06:00 PM
I have always loved dandelions. My son used to pick them for me when small and I was always delighted. Tea made with them is medicinal. A clever look at the often disdained flower Timothy. Congratulations on have this honored with POTW! xxoo
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Timothy Hicks
Date: 5/4/2020 3:04:00 AM
Thanks Connie! I've had dandelion tea in the past which I thought was quite good - though there are other things you can do with them as well, but I haven't experimented.
Date: 5/3/2020 1:28:00 PM
Such fabulous personification sweet candy man, its a joy to see you back on soup. I did comment on another of your poems yesterday and am delighted to offer my congrats on POTD - to me a dandelion is a weed, to others its a culinary delight!:-) hugs jan xx
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Timothy Hicks
Date: 5/4/2020 2:56:00 AM
Aww thanks Jan (surprised you remember my Candy Name persona ... lol). And thanks for the congrats!
Date: 5/3/2020 12:09:00 PM
Some see a weed, I will always see a flower. A blessing. Just like you and me, it takes moments of growth and changes, to reach everything we will become. I love everything about this, the way you create each moment and mood. This is my first time reading thoughts from your pen. You are a very talented writer. I wish to place this in my favorites. To read again and again. Congratulations Timothy, on Poem of the Week. :) Brandy
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Timothy Hicks
Date: 5/4/2020 2:43:00 AM
Honored to meet another dandelion admirer and to be apart of your favorite's list!
Date: 5/3/2020 11:36:00 AM
Back to Congratulate you. I’m not surprised this one got POTW! Well done Timothy.
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Date: 5/1/2020 10:19:00 AM
Tim, Happy May Day, the day of flowers! Enjoyed your write immensely. You really put the 'lion' in dandelion! So much great imagery here: 'headbutted my way into existence', 'like over-buttered popcorn', 'standing out like a stamp on a letter', too many to mention, really. 'And who had the audacity to call me dandy?' is probably my favorite. This is the tough kid down the street that's the runt of the gang but first to start a fight. Even if you spray him he'll just grow back. Love it, a fav.
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John Watt
Date: 5/5/2020 5:30:00 PM
I was very happy to see this be "picked" for poem of the week, Timothy, well done, and keep the golden words coming!
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Timothy Hicks
Date: 5/3/2020 12:12:00 PM
Honored to hear you say that .... The "tough kid down the street" ... I like that. You hit the nail on the head for that spunky attitude I was shooting for.
Date: 4/30/2020 2:34:00 PM
Outstanding stuff here, Timothy! Faved. Can't believe I'm just discovering you. You're a doozy of a poet!
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Timothy Hicks
Date: 4/30/2020 9:39:00 PM
Your comment made my day .. thank you Edward!
Date: 4/29/2020 1:26:00 AM
"when the breeze hits me right I like to dance" I love personification poems, this is awesome. (: Apparently they are an invasive species, but my, are they special. I love the finishing line. Apparently they are an all year plant, correct? I had to do a biology project on invasive species and I chose the dandelion. Always, Laura
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Timothy Hicks
Date: 4/30/2020 9:39:00 PM
Thanks Laura. Glad you liked. I don't know much about the science behind dandelions, but that wouldn't surprise me if they were an all year plant.
Date: 4/27/2020 4:05:00 PM
You are SO good, Timothy. I can find only one tiny thing to criticize. Why not say "NO date upon the calendar could possibly confine me" How I wish I could come up with the clever phrasings like the ones you sprinkle through your free verse poems. I am lucky to come up with even one when I write free verse! another fave.
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Timothy Hicks
Date: 4/30/2020 9:38:00 PM
Thanks for the correction and good eye! Appreciate hearing what you have to say.
Date: 4/27/2020 11:45:00 AM
So much we have to learn from the resilience of the dandelion so beautifully personified in your write, dear. So glad you're back!!! Thanks for thr visits to my poems.
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Timothy Hicks
Date: 4/30/2020 9:37:00 PM
Hopefully I can stay for a little while and not abandon ship for nearly 4 years ... lol! Thanks for your comments, Eileen.
Date: 4/27/2020 6:13:00 AM
love the personification of the dandelion here...a fun poem to read this morning... little children love to pick them and give them to their moms, bus drivers and teachers as gifts...kind of cool even if they are lawn pests! my best friend used to love to eat the greens with a bacon dressing of sorts, not for me but they certainly are plentiful enough to gather for food! great write! hugs
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Timothy Hicks
Date: 4/30/2020 9:37:00 PM
Thanks Sandra... maybe if I'm feeling brave I'll try that myself!
Date: 4/27/2020 2:50:00 AM
An excellent personification, Timothy...serious and witty at the same time. It is true that dandelions are not enamoured by many, but beneath that exterior they have a lot of good to give. To me, they have always offered positive inspiration, and undoubtedly you have experienced that as well! ~ Regards // paul
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Timothy Hicks
Date: 4/30/2020 9:36:00 PM
Thanks Paul. Yes ... dandelions, to me, are the lovable outcasts in the botany world.
Date: 4/26/2020 10:21:00 PM
A true poet!
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Timothy Hicks
Date: 4/30/2020 9:33:00 PM
Thanks Art!
Date: 4/26/2020 8:07:00 PM
Another amazing write. I am jealous of your talent. I like how your mind works. Bravo!
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Date: 4/26/2020 7:09:00 PM
Amazing Timothy, hope you're safe and doing well.
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Timothy Hicks
Date: 4/30/2020 1:44:00 AM
Thanks TS. I am doing well, thanks for asking.
Date: 4/26/2020 6:34:00 PM
Timothy, your brilliance is displayed mightily in this poetically fierce yet ever endearing Personification. My heart was captivated and my imagination enchanted by your daring dandelion. I loved the plucky spirit of this piece; "I headbutted my way into existence right through the concrete" and "Resilient as a rock,but like an eagle I am free." Had me smiling. Awesome and a fav! Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
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Timothy Hicks
Date: 4/30/2020 1:44:00 AM
Thanks so much for your kind words .... and fave! It encourages me :)