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Titanic- The Note I Wrote

With a lump in my throat, I thought "Is this it" I never thought I would go down with the ship As I floated in the sea with my life jacket on I thought to myself "Soon- my life will be gone" Some last-minute thoughts... had rushed through my head! A note, I must write...before I am dead Drenched... Written in my mind, I blew it to the moon with the mist from my breath... Sealing it with a kiss! ~My family, my friends, my dear wife... I thank you all for being part of my life~ I love you, all... so much!! Six children I've raised, beautiful- indeed Helped my friends, when they were in need Made peace 'round the neighborhood Tried my best to always be good I've had my ups and downs for sure (As I laughed to myself) "I've never had a "down" as this extreme, before" Floating... Watching the beautiful dark sky Watching the countless amount of giant stars Listening to the romantic sounds of the calm open water Slowly, I closed my eyes... And that was the last thing I remember So many nights; still, I cry Why wasn't I... one of the unlucky to die?

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Tom Woody

Date: 1/17/2024 6:08:00 AM

Nice twist on the contest Charles. Yours survived! Nice and thanks for supporting

Charles Messina
Date: 1/17/2024 6:29:00 PM

Hey Tom, thanks for the positive waves, my friend. Great contest...and the winners are all well deserved. Always a pleasure...Charlie

Maria Williams

Date: 1/8/2024 3:39:00 AM

Gosh, I didn't see that end coming. I guess some of the surviving ones did feel a sense of guilt; You, being the sweet soul that you are, would have for sure. You described the emotions well, Charlie. Good luck in the contest...Hugs

Gershon Wolf

Date: 1/6/2024 8:07:00 PM

Yup. Funny how guilty we feel when we luck out. Who can know the "Master Plan?"

Jeanette Swan

Date: 1/5/2024 3:43:00 PM

This is a lingering poem that stays in my head.

Jan Allison

Date: 1/4/2024 5:02:00 PM

gosh Charles I never expected the twist at the end, excellent ink:-) hugs jan xx

Ink Empress

Date: 1/4/2024 11:15:00 AM

Ah i can imagine this feeling and that experience you’ve described in such a soul hitting manner. I felt the imagery and it felt like i saw through your words, this scene unfolding. As someone that travels by sea alot in maldives, i find this dreadful to even imagine. Cus we are surrounded by waters and sometimes we get really rough seas. Especially lately. I think tom woody will like this. Best wishes for the contest dear charles. Always a pleasure reading your work

Hilo Poet

Date: 1/3/2024 5:53:00 PM

Charles, 'tis not a Frank, mo' of a Hank. Ah, south of the border, and when you get there, hang left bro. till a beautiful Magnolia falls on your lap and your refrains start to stutter. Aloha 2024 good buddy, thanks for the Fave, William

Charles Messina
Date: 1/3/2024 8:28:00 PM

Hank or Frank...I love what you wrote. (lol) Thank you, William. I appreciate your kind words. Aloha 2024 my friend, thanks also for the Fave! ~Charlie

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 1/3/2024 9:31:00 AM

Wow what an amazing twist at the end. I would be counting my blessings! Gorgeous writing.

Charles Messina
Date: 1/3/2024 8:29:00 PM

Oh, me too (lol). Thank you, Andrea. Coming from you, that means a lot :)

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 1/3/2024 9:05:00 AM

WOW!!! I enjoyed reading your wonderful "Titanic" write/story/great ending. Good Luck... Looks like we both did this one. Have a blessed day writing away............

Charles Messina
Date: 1/3/2024 8:32:00 PM

Thank you so much, Paula. I appreciate your kind words, dear friend. I will check your poem out soon :) Have a wonderful week...blessings.

Silent One

Date: 1/3/2024 6:48:00 AM

You described these emotions so well, deep and scary and it would have been such a horrid time for these people... best of luck in the contest..

Charles Messina
Date: 1/3/2024 8:36:00 PM

Thank you, SO. for the good vibes. Yeah bro. horrid and traumatizing. Can't imagine being on that ship. I appreciate the GL wishes.

Bill Baker

Date: 1/2/2024 10:06:00 PM

Beautifully dramatic poetry, Charlie. A FAV for my list, my friend. I could feel the emotions as he realized the end was near. To think of loved ones and then accept his fate, only to then have to live with the why for the rest of his life. Thanks for sharing your poetic talents with us. Happy New Year! Have a great 2024! Bill

Charles Messina
Date: 1/3/2024 4:28:00 AM

Bill, thank you so much for your kind words and for fav'g this. I can't imagine what went through the minds of those who survived this unimaginable experience. especially those who lost their loved ones that horrific night. Happy New year, my friend! Stay well and right some more in 2024 :)

Tom Cunningham

Date: 1/2/2024 9:53:00 PM

It must have been a terryfying experience Charlie, the only good thing to come out of that disaster was that all ships must now carry enough lifeboats for passengers and crew.. Tom

Charles Messina
Date: 1/3/2024 4:37:00 AM

It's terrifying and life changing Tom, I'm sure. Yes, on a positive note one good thing has come from it. Let us pray that they will just be there for show and tell. Happy New Year! Charlie

Beryl Edmonds

Date: 1/2/2024 8:30:00 PM

Truly a wonderful write Charles, I enjoyed reading every word. Belle

Charles Messina
Date: 1/3/2024 4:40:00 AM

Thank you so much, Belle. I enjoyed writing this. I would imagine something like this would have run through my mind on that horrific night. Happy New Year, dear friend! Charlie

Unseeking Seeker

Date: 1/2/2024 6:54:00 PM

Powerful and so intimate ~ a beautiful write, Charlie.

Charles Messina
Date: 1/3/2024 4:43:00 AM

Thank you so much, my dear friend, U.S., I put a little thought into this one (lol) Happy New Year! Charlie

I Am Anaya

Date: 1/2/2024 3:54:00 PM

PTSD, it's undeniable here. Charlie many end their lives after such trauma. Floating... Watching the beautiful dark sky Watching the countless amount of giant stars Listening to the romantic sounds of the calm open water... Slowly, I closed my eyes And that was the last thing I remember, I love this part, Charlie.

Charles Messina
Date: 1/3/2024 4:52:00 AM

Oh yeah...PTSD for sure. It's hard to move on when someone you love so much has been suddenly taken away. Thank you for your lovely comment, Anaya. Happy New Year, my dear friend! Charlie

Di11y Da11y

Date: 1/2/2024 12:48:00 PM

So many beautiful elements I felt the flowing emotional changes - good luck in the contest

Charles Messina
Date: 1/3/2024 4:54:00 AM

Thank you so much, Dilly. I can't imagine what went through the minds while afloat and afterwards, with the survivors. Thanks for the GL wishes :) Happy New Year!

Sotto Poet

Date: 1/2/2024 11:55:00 AM

Your pen is truly remarkable, effortlessly transcending the confines of the ship, the seas, and the skies. Charlie, your talent for building vivid pictures with words is excellent, and I found myself enthralled, awaiting the magic of each thriving verse. I wish you luck in the contest! I am happy for the attention I earned in the previous contest, and I wish you a prosperous new year 2024.

Charles Messina
Date: 1/3/2024 5:00:00 AM

Lasaad, what can I say after a comment like this, thank you so much for your kind words, my friend. I enjoyed writing for the contest...thanks for the GL wishes. Your poem was excellent and deserves every bit of the attention it got and more. Wishing you a Healthy and Happy New Year! Charlie