Time In Slow Motion

From the parlor window,
 an old woman looks beyond the decrepit wooden rails
   of the low fence
      Five Rhode Island Reds are grazing around in tall brown grass hunting 
          grasshoppers, and she welcomes the company
               One cock sits perched on a post, in the shade of an elm
                                                          keeping watch 
Down the deserted asphalt road,
     heat waves blur the horizon
        A dusty whirlwind has picked up a tumbleweed
          And spins it against nearby barbed wire that surrounds the coop
               The sound of the windmill moans a painful whine

She looks with empty eyes, at the room around her,
  An old clock ticks away the minutes in slow motion
      The mantel displays photographs of a life she hardly recalls
              
She lays her hand on the desk, 
  picks up the phone that never rings and carefully listens to the dial tone 
     Then, she will once again turn toward the window 
           that needs a good scrubbing,
      
             where her gaze curves down the gravel driveway, 
                   toward someone not coming
Copyright © | Year Posted 2009

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Brown Avatar
August 14, 2010 at 9:08 AM
Congratulations Carrie on your win in Nikko Palmario's contest "Twist and SHOCK" Love, Carol
Marcum Wong Avatar
August 13, 2010 at 4:33 PM
Congratulations on your big win with this very moving poem Carrie. Loneliness is beautifully conveyed in this creative piece. Aloha, Connie
Dietrich Avatar
August 10, 2010 at 9:52 PM
Congratulations, Carrie top form as always! LUv, Andrea
Freeman Avatar
August 10, 2010 at 7:41 PM
Congratulations, Carrie, on a beautiful poem. Enjoy! Agape, Moses
Brown Avatar
August 9, 2010 at 7:21 AM
Congratulations Carrie on your win in Paula Swanson's contest "Ding-A-Ling". Love, Carol
Guzzi Avatar
August 8, 2010 at 5:42 PM
Such a unique original take on the topic I would expect no less from you...so far for me you are number one (shhooosh!) Light & Love
Fraser Avatar
August 8, 2010 at 8:12 AM
It's a delight to read this fine poetry again Carrie. Many congratulations on your win in Nikko's fine contest >> James
Mehta Avatar
August 7, 2010 at 9:40 PM
Congrats on your win, Carrie
Sweetheart Avatar
August 7, 2010 at 12:08 PM
Congrats Carrie on your winning poem in the Twist and Shock contest with this exceptional write.. enjoy another sweet victory today..with luv..
Ryerson Avatar
August 7, 2010 at 11:37 AM
The way you put your words together and make them flow never ceases to amaze me, Carrie!...I usually pick out a favorite phrase or line when I comment on your stuff but in this case? Too many to mention! I am at a complete loss when it comes to this form...maybe you could tutor me sometime?...Congratulations as always! - Tim
K. Avatar
August 7, 2010 at 9:48 AM
Hi Carrie :) Congrats on your win in my contest-- this was just so beautifully written and that twist of waiting for somebody who's not coming was just so sad-- nikko :)
Roberts Avatar
August 7, 2010 at 9:21 AM
congrats on your win with this awesome entry
George   Avatar
August 7, 2010 at 1:59 AM
A very emotional scene that pulls at the heart-strings, Carrie. Congratulaton on you BIG WN. love, Lainie
Sweetheart Avatar
August 6, 2010 at 8:46 AM
Congrats Carrie on your big win in Paula's contest with another magnificent write.. enjoy your win and happy weekend..with luv..
Loving Iii Avatar
December 26, 2009 at 12:15 PM
just what i needed for my christmas to be compleate. congrads on your placement. sad is'nt it? John H Loving III
George   Avatar
December 21, 2009 at 11:07 PM
Dear Carrie, Congratulations on both sensational entries making it through the first round and best wishes on advancing to the finals. Lainie
Guzzi Avatar
December 21, 2009 at 4:55 PM
boy do I hear you. BUT such "ripe" discription I love it..so rich and full of life even if the heroine only experiences it subconsciuosly..she shows us the life she is submerged in. Light & Love
Curcio Avatar
December 21, 2009 at 9:54 AM
What a sad tale! Congrats on your first round win Carrie
Sheart Avatar
December 21, 2009 at 9:45 AM
Carrie my friend,Congrats on your poems winning the first round of PS contest!! Very well deserved, enjoyed reading your wonderful poetry. Here’s wishing you a very Merry Christmas and a Happy New Year!! May 2010 be your best year ever! Love Light Patty
Strand Avatar
December 21, 2009 at 12:49 AM
Congrats on your first round contest success Carrie.Rgds Brian
Gorelick Avatar
December 20, 2009 at 11:34 AM
this tears at your heart...congrats on getting to the second round. Well done! BG
Fraser Avatar
December 20, 2009 at 11:28 AM
Many congratulations on reaching the second round with your fine poem Carrie >> James
Taylor Avatar
July 28, 2009 at 10:14 PM
I love the imagery...very good piece
Buys Avatar
July 26, 2009 at 4:04 PM
Awesome atmosphere you have captured here, very sad and poignant. well written and a pleasure to read. Well done. Love Heidie
Joe Avatar
July 26, 2009 at 3:09 PM
This is great poetry. You capture something as a painter does. I like the lay-out of this poem because it gives the feeling of descent that adds so much to the narrative. The narrative carries itself well and I like the way that you have dominant vowel sounds in each stanza allowing the reader to feel the narrative as well as read it.
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