David Kavanagh Poet Monorhyme

This::illusion

This may come unspoken
dismay is mostly taboo

This count feels endless
discount refills the queue

This trust I lost in God
distrust found in the pew

This stain runs too deep
disdain sets in like glue

This dress shows all flaws
distress perfectly fits you

This gust left a whisper
disgust in what it blew

This pair of nuts lost out
despair one couldn’t screw

This missed the G spot
dismissed as nothing new

This solves all our questions 
dissolves the answers too

This illusion belies the hurt
disillusion because it’s true

By
David Kavanagh

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David Kavanagh May 1, 2025 at 4:55 AM Thank you to everyone who commented on this piece, I’m off the soup for a few weeks, and will catch up with everyone soon! Cheers David

Daniel Henry Rodgers April 30, 2025 at 6:44 AM Congrats David, Reading this I felt there’s a raw honesty here with the pain of seeing through illusions, but also the strange clarity that comes when nothing is left but truth. Spring Blessings, My Friend, Daniel David Kavanagh May 1, 2025 at 4:57 AM Ain’t that the truth Daniel, I’m off the soup for a few weeks, will catch up with you later, cheers David

Terry Flood April 26, 2025 at 3:34 PM Sorry I’m late with congrats, David. I’m up to my armpits right now. But this is so damned clever… at first I actually missed the twisted sound-alikes at the start of each couplet… duh! Really don’t know how you came up with so many… brilliant! David Kavanagh April 27, 2025 at 4:40 AM Haha! thanks Terry, maybe the (this illusion) worked on you better than I thought, once I got a few going they seemed to all fall into place, I’m taking a few weeks off soup at the moment, this-pair is setting in, need a break, cheers David

Paul Willason April 16, 2025 at 5:48 PM Good to see your name up there on the POTD role David...a deserving piece of poetic play with interesting branches of meaning...great food for the mind. Your skill leaks out of every line. A pleasure to read. David Kavanagh April 17, 2025 at 6:25 AM Heya Paul, It’s certainly an unusual one even for me lol! but somehow seems to work in the duality sense, once I got the idea to solidify the wordplay into a mono-rhyme, it all came together well in the end, thanks for your kind comments, cheers David

Duke Beaufort April 16, 2025 at 4:25 PM David, so very clever this is! I smiled while reading and contemplating each line. The world we live in is one remarkable place...we are really lucky to be able to enjoy it all for a brief tick in time. David Kavanagh April 17, 2025 at 6:18 AM Good man Duke, yes indeed we are only guaranteed this moment at hand, tomorrow can look promising but never guaranteed, glad you enjoyed this little wordplay, and gave you a smile, thanks so much for stopping by my poems, cheers David

Nancy Kaufman April 16, 2025 at 4:05 PM Hi David, Congratulation on this very clever POTD, "This:: Illusion". I really liked the word repetition. Enjoy your day! David Kavanagh April 17, 2025 at 6:11 AM Hey Nancy, hope you’re keeping well, these wordplay’s can be a bit hit and miss at times, in delighted this particular one got recognised as POTD, thanks for stopping by, cheers David

Paul Bell April 16, 2025 at 11:44 AM Ah, many a G spot has been lost in the pews to dodgy nuts. Probably why God works in mysterious ways. Great, POTD. Jan Allison April 17, 2025 at 1:55 AM ha ha ha love it Paul thanks for the giggle x David Kavanagh April 16, 2025 at 12:08 PM Ha ha, whatever gave you that idea Paul, certainly not my upstanding POTD, thanks for stopping by with the spinoff humour, cheers David Lin Lane April 16, 2025 at 11:48 AM That's hilarious, Paul. lol

Mickey Grubb April 16, 2025 at 10:09 AM Wow David--faith and doubt, hope and despair, clarity and confusion--such are the dualities of life. Definitely thought-provoking...Congrats on your POTD honors. David Kavanagh April 16, 2025 at 11:34 AM Great to meet you Mickey, life is so full of duality, glad you felt it here in this piece, thought provoking sounds great to any poet, cheers David

I Am Anaya April 16, 2025 at 9:44 AM David, congratulations on POTD! In classic Cobain style Master of passive aggressiveness, some words deep, others are simply silly simply because they rhymed well. All the anger, angst and sadness are funneled into a blind rage. But towards the end, the narrator realizes the futility (oh well, whatever, nevermind) and then we end by denying any of it from occurring at all (a denial). Kurt best for channeling and a great e.g. of your work ~enjoyed as Always, Anaya David Kavanagh April 16, 2025 at 11:30 AM Heya Anaya love the Nirvana vibe, I did feel it when writing, all the mixed up emotions ambivalence, indifference, don’t know if I quite achieved rage! But Certainly a broad spectrum of emotion throughout even acceptance and denial in that last line, A cathartic write all round, cheers David,

Kim Rodrigues April 16, 2025 at 9:15 AM I guess we shouldn’t go anywhere, sit on any pew, hypocrites and sinners all about. I wonder why God cares at all. I know He does. Great pondering of an unbeliever. Congrats on POTD David Kavanagh April 16, 2025 at 11:11 AM Thanks so much Kim, you are certainly one believer amongst many on this soup that I know are totally genuine! (Great pondering of an unbeliever) ill take that as a genuine compliment, cheers David

Lin Lane April 16, 2025 at 8:40 AM Peculiar that one would take your mention of 'G spot' and turn it into yet one more attempt to climb onto a soap box about God. Distasteful. David Kavanagh April 16, 2025 at 10:59 AM Haha I knew that G spot was going to be quite (controversial) but just seemed to work for that particular line, especially following on from the (ahem) pair of nuts, lol, ah I’m pretty sure all Gods and especially Goddesses have a great sense of humour, cheers David Lin Lane April 16, 2025 at 10:15 AM Ha and a big AS IF!

Jan Allison April 16, 2025 at 7:39 AM your poem made me smile david especially as I used to go to church as a youngster 'This trust I found in God distrust lost in the pew' so much bigotry and hypocrisy regarding religion - no wonder I am a none believer! hugs jan x David Kavanagh April 16, 2025 at 9:43 AM Yeah I totally understand Jan, religion was beaten into us in school, even in the local church real nasty stuff was going on that we only found out about years later, but yeah all that aside there is some fun lines mixed in with the serious ones to try bring balance, thanks again for stopping by! Cheers David

Linda Alice Fowler April 16, 2025 at 7:27 AM I smiled my way through this one David - twice. LOL Really great lines in your illusion. Congratulations on POTD! :) David Kavanagh April 16, 2025 at 9:36 AM Smile away Linda, because it means I did a half decent job, this poem was just waiting to be plucked from the ether, glad I stumbled upon it first, cheers David

Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart April 16, 2025 at 7:15 AM If origami were a poem. I love the way this folds in upon itself, then flies away. Congratulations on POTD! xomo David Kavanagh April 16, 2025 at 9:32 AM Super comment from super Mo, a guy could spark a poem of such eloquence, thanks so much, cheers David

Anne-Lise Andresen April 16, 2025 at 4:56 AM - Congratulations on your p.o.t.d., David :) - hugs David Kavanagh April 16, 2025 at 9:19 AM Thank you so much Anne-Lise I am thrilled with the honour! Cheers David

Ink Empress April 16, 2025 at 4:05 AM Back with congratulations on receiving POTD! Well deserved! I enjoyed reading this one. Sending you light David Kavanagh April 16, 2025 at 9:18 AM Hey Ink, A big surprise to get POTD today, one just never knows what ticks the boxes on any given day to receive the honour, thanks so much for stopping by again and leaving a second helping of light, cheers David

Karen Jones April 16, 2025 at 3:24 AM Engaging potd. Giggled at the nut screw lines and Gspot lines. lol Congratulations David Kavanagh April 16, 2025 at 9:10 AM Heya Karen, every so often I even surprise myself with the twisty tangents I go off on lol! Cheers David

Lin Lane April 16, 2025 at 3:22 AM I guess the 'g spot' was the right spot to write about in order to get POTD. And that's not an illusion. Congratulations, my antihero. ;-) David Kavanagh April 16, 2025 at 6:37 AM Antiheroes are allowed! Heroes taboo lol! Oxymoronically I guess the ‘G spot’ was not dissed or missed after all, thanks for fun comment and congratulations Lin! Cheers David

Tania Kitchin April 16, 2025 at 3:16 AM David, a great thought provoking poem. Congratulations on POTD. David Kavanagh April 16, 2025 at 6:32 AM Heya Tania, I was trying to balance thought provoking, and wordplay here, looks like I just about got away with it lol! Cheers David

Beryl Edmonds April 16, 2025 at 2:02 AM Very good indeed David, I like how every first and second lines start with the same letters and how every alternate lines rhyme, and of course the content. Congratulations on receiving the honour of poem of the day… Beryl David Kavanagh April 16, 2025 at 6:29 AM Your very kind Beryl, I’m delighted you spotted all the angles of my wordplay here, thanks so much for stopping by with congratulations, cheers David

Zyrool Gifford April 16, 2025 at 1:04 AM Hello David, congratulations on your POTD win with this amazing piece. Wishing you a wonderful day as you celebrate. David Kavanagh April 16, 2025 at 3:04 AM Thank you Zyrool, I’m delighted with your supportive comment and also to receive POTD, I love stripping back words and giving them an alternative perspective, cheers David

Tom Cunningham April 16, 2025 at 12:32 AM Congratulations to you David on today's POTD honour on a another thought provoking verse. Tom David Kavanagh April 16, 2025 at 2:56 AM Woohoo! this is a big surprise today Tom, I’m absolutely delighted with the POTD accolade, as this one was originally designed to be a Monoku, but then I seen it open up into a monorhyme wordplay with lots of scope to add duality in each line, thanks so much for being the bearer of good news! Cheers David

Ink Empress April 15, 2025 at 6:31 AM Dear David Its one of those poem that do not need understanding but appreciation, for the clever wordplay and diction and how youv phrased thoughts and flowed your poem with such catchy rhymes in a sublime manner! I love the lines “ This illusion belies the hurt disillusion because it’s true” the cadence and rhythm of your unique wordplay stands out! Excellent! A very deep poem that needs nothing more than just accolades for the exquisite nature of poetic expression! Life to me is an illusion. Pleasure reading! Sending you light always! Ink Empress April 15, 2025 at 10:52 AM I love that song!!! Thnk u for mentioning! He is amazing!! David Kavanagh April 15, 2025 at 10:45 AM Thanks Ink, you’re always very kind with comments, this one is indeed a play on words, but with a little extra meaning embedded in each line, mostly by using duality in the (Dis-/This-) sense, I’m pretty sure there’s many more just waiting to be plucked from the Dictionary, Kurt was a master at this, remember (hello-hello- how low) in ‘Teen Spirit’ was barely imperceptible! Cheers for the light, David!

Lin Lane April 14, 2025 at 4:53 AM I find nothing to dis in your couplets, David. When positive thoughts and emotions become disavowed and discouraging, eventually they disappear. You distinctly made every one of your points David Kavanagh April 14, 2025 at 6:30 AM Haha very good Lin I’m delighted you found nothing to dis—approve of in this one, finding the words was possibly the easy part, making paradoxical sense took a bit of overnight work, thanks so much for kind review cheers David