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This::illusion

This may come unspoken dismay is mostly taboo This count feels endless discount refills the queue This trust I lost in God distrust found in the pew This stain runs too deep disdain sets in like glue This dress shows all flaws distress perfectly fits you This gust left a whisper disgust in what it blew This pair of nuts lost out despair one couldn’t screw This missed the G spot dismissed as nothing new This solves all our questions dissolves the answers too This illusion belies the hurt disillusion because it’s true By David Kavanagh

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David Kavanagh

Date: 5/1/2025 4:55:00 AM

Thank you to everyone who commented on this piece, I’m off the soup for a few weeks, and will catch up with everyone soon! Cheers David

Daniel Henry Rodgers

Date: 4/30/2025 6:44:00 AM

Congrats David, Reading this I felt there’s a raw honesty here with the pain of seeing through illusions, but also the strange clarity that comes when nothing is left but truth. Spring Blessings, My Friend, Daniel

David Kavanagh
Date: 5/1/2025 4:57:00 AM

Ain’t that the truth Daniel, I’m off the soup for a few weeks, will catch up with you later, cheers David

Terry Flood

Date: 4/26/2025 3:34:00 PM

Sorry I’m late with congrats, David. I’m up to my armpits right now. But this is so damned clever… at first I actually missed the twisted sound-alikes at the start of each couplet… duh! Really don’t know how you came up with so many… brilliant!

David Kavanagh
Date: 4/27/2025 4:40:00 AM

Haha! thanks Terry, maybe the (this illusion) worked on you better than I thought, once I got a few going they seemed to all fall into place, I’m taking a few weeks off soup at the moment, this-pair is setting in, need a break, cheers David

Paul Willason

Date: 4/16/2025 5:48:00 PM

Good to see your name up there on the POTD role David...a deserving piece of poetic play with interesting branches of meaning...great food for the mind. Your skill leaks out of every line. A pleasure to read.

David Kavanagh
Date: 4/17/2025 6:25:00 AM

Heya Paul, It’s certainly an unusual one even for me lol! but somehow seems to work in the duality sense, once I got the idea to solidify the wordplay into a mono-rhyme, it all came together well in the end, thanks for your kind comments, cheers David

Duke Beaufort

Date: 4/16/2025 4:25:00 PM

David, so very clever this is! I smiled while reading and contemplating each line. The world we live in is one remarkable place...we are really lucky to be able to enjoy it all for a brief tick in time.

David Kavanagh
Date: 4/17/2025 6:18:00 AM

Good man Duke, yes indeed we are only guaranteed this moment at hand, tomorrow can look promising but never guaranteed, glad you enjoyed this little wordplay, and gave you a smile, thanks so much for stopping by my poems, cheers David

Nancy Kaufman

Date: 4/16/2025 4:05:00 PM

Hi David, Congratulation on this very clever POTD, "This:: Illusion". I really liked the word repetition. Enjoy your day!

David Kavanagh
Date: 4/17/2025 6:11:00 AM

Hey Nancy, hope you’re keeping well, these wordplay’s can be a bit hit and miss at times, in delighted this particular one got recognised as POTD, thanks for stopping by, cheers David

Paul Bell

Date: 4/16/2025 11:44:00 AM

Ah, many a G spot has been lost in the pews to dodgy nuts. Probably why God works in mysterious ways. Great, POTD.

Jan Allison
Date: 4/17/2025 1:55:00 AM

ha ha ha love it Paul thanks for the giggle x

David Kavanagh
Date: 4/16/2025 12:08:00 PM

Ha ha, whatever gave you that idea Paul, certainly not my upstanding POTD, thanks for stopping by with the spinoff humour, cheers David

Lin Lane
Date: 4/16/2025 11:48:00 AM

That's hilarious, Paul. lol

Mickey Grubb

Date: 4/16/2025 10:09:00 AM

Wow David--faith and doubt, hope and despair, clarity and confusion--such are the dualities of life. Definitely thought-provoking...Congrats on your POTD honors.

David Kavanagh
Date: 4/16/2025 11:34:00 AM

Great to meet you Mickey, life is so full of duality, glad you felt it here in this piece, thought provoking sounds great to any poet, cheers David

I Am Anaya

Date: 4/16/2025 9:44:00 AM

David, congratulations on POTD! In classic Cobain style Master of passive aggressiveness, some words deep, others are simply silly simply because they rhymed well. All the anger, angst and sadness are funneled into a blind rage. But towards the end, the narrator realizes the futility (oh well, whatever, nevermind) and then we end by denying any of it from occurring at all (a denial). Kurt best for channeling and a great e.g. of your work ~enjoyed as Always, Anaya

David Kavanagh
Date: 4/16/2025 11:30:00 AM

Heya Anaya love the Nirvana vibe, I did feel it when writing, all the mixed up emotions ambivalence, indifference, don’t know if I quite achieved rage! But Certainly a broad spectrum of emotion throughout even acceptance and denial in that last line, A cathartic write all round, cheers David,

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 4/16/2025 9:15:00 AM

I guess we shouldn’t go anywhere, sit on any pew, hypocrites and sinners all about. I wonder why God cares at all. I know He does. Great pondering of an unbeliever. Congrats on POTD

David Kavanagh
Date: 4/16/2025 11:11:00 AM

Thanks so much Kim, you are certainly one believer amongst many on this soup that I know are totally genuine! (Great pondering of an unbeliever) ill take that as a genuine compliment, cheers David

Lin Lane

Date: 4/16/2025 8:40:00 AM

Peculiar that one would take your mention of 'G spot' and turn it into yet one more attempt to climb onto a soap box about God. Distasteful.

David Kavanagh
Date: 4/16/2025 10:59:00 AM

Haha I knew that G spot was going to be quite (controversial) but just seemed to work for that particular line, especially following on from the (ahem) pair of nuts, lol, ah I’m pretty sure all Gods and especially Goddesses have a great sense of humour, cheers David

Lin Lane
Date: 4/16/2025 10:15:00 AM

Ha and a big AS IF!

Di11y Da11y
Date: 4/16/2025 9:02:00 AM

I hear some think it (either/or interpretation) might not exist Lin :)

Jan Allison

Date: 4/16/2025 7:39:00 AM

your poem made me smile david especially as I used to go to church as a youngster 'This trust I found in God distrust lost in the pew' so much bigotry and hypocrisy regarding religion - no wonder I am a none believer! hugs jan x

David Kavanagh
Date: 4/16/2025 9:43:00 AM

Yeah I totally understand Jan, religion was beaten into us in school, even in the local church real nasty stuff was going on that we only found out about years later, but yeah all that aside there is some fun lines mixed in with the serious ones to try bring balance, thanks again for stopping by! Cheers David

Linda Alice Fowler

Date: 4/16/2025 7:27:00 AM

I smiled my way through this one David - twice. LOL Really great lines in your illusion. Congratulations on POTD! :)

David Kavanagh
Date: 4/16/2025 9:36:00 AM

Smile away Linda, because it means I did a half decent job, this poem was just waiting to be plucked from the ether, glad I stumbled upon it first, cheers David

Maureen McGreavy The Insolent Rib

Date: 4/16/2025 7:15:00 AM

If origami were a poem. I love the way this folds in upon itself, then flies away. Congratulations on POTD! xomo

David Kavanagh
Date: 4/16/2025 9:32:00 AM

Super comment from super Mo, a guy could spark a poem of such eloquence, thanks so much, cheers David

Tom Woody

Date: 4/16/2025 6:25:00 AM

I've spoken to many over the years who lost faith as a result of church or preacher shenanigans (distrust (trust?) lost in the pew). Some have been hurt terribly. I help them to see God hates the bad behavior too and will respond in due time. Enjoy your special day

David Kavanagh
Date: 4/16/2025 9:30:00 AM

Thanks Tommy, yeah I wasn’t sure about that distrust or trust, but it checked out ok on the grammar checker, I only live in the here and now, and all that bad pew behaviour must be dealt with accordingly, in the here and now, cheers David

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 4/16/2025 4:56:00 AM

- Congratulations on your p.o.t.d., David :) - hugs

David Kavanagh
Date: 4/16/2025 9:19:00 AM

Thank you so much Anne-Lise I am thrilled with the honour! Cheers David

Ink Empress

Date: 4/16/2025 4:05:00 AM

Back with congratulations on receiving POTD! Well deserved! I enjoyed reading this one. Sending you light

David Kavanagh
Date: 4/16/2025 9:18:00 AM

Hey Ink, A big surprise to get POTD today, one just never knows what ticks the boxes on any given day to receive the honour, thanks so much for stopping by again and leaving a second helping of light, cheers David

Karen Jones

Date: 4/16/2025 3:24:00 AM

Engaging potd. Giggled at the nut screw lines and Gspot lines. lol Congratulations

David Kavanagh
Date: 4/16/2025 9:10:00 AM

Heya Karen, every so often I even surprise myself with the twisty tangents I go off on lol! Cheers David

Lin Lane

Date: 4/16/2025 3:22:00 AM

I guess the 'g spot' was the right spot to write about in order to get POTD. And that's not an illusion. Congratulations, my antihero. ;-)

David Kavanagh
Date: 4/16/2025 6:37:00 AM

Antiheroes are allowed! Heroes taboo lol! Oxymoronically I guess the ‘G spot’ was not dissed or missed after all, thanks for fun comment and congratulations Lin! Cheers David

Tania Kitchin

Date: 4/16/2025 3:16:00 AM

David, a great thought provoking poem. Congratulations on POTD.

David Kavanagh
Date: 4/16/2025 6:32:00 AM

Heya Tania, I was trying to balance thought provoking, and wordplay here, looks like I just about got away with it lol! Cheers David

Beryl Edmonds

Date: 4/16/2025 2:02:00 AM

Very good indeed David, I like how every first and second lines start with the same letters and how every alternate lines rhyme, and of course the content. Congratulations on receiving the honour of poem of the day… Beryl

David Kavanagh
Date: 4/16/2025 6:29:00 AM

Your very kind Beryl, I’m delighted you spotted all the angles of my wordplay here, thanks so much for stopping by with congratulations, cheers David

Di11y Da11y

Date: 4/16/2025 1:33:00 AM

Haha as I've said already, this one zinged in all the right ways lol :) congratulations on your POTD David, very much deserved for your thought provoking, honest poetry.

David Kavanagh
Date: 4/16/2025 6:26:00 AM

Thanks Dilly, It was a great buzz when the idea for this one tangentially connected from a different piece altogether, I’m delighted it went down so well, cheers David

Zyrool Gifford

Date: 4/16/2025 1:04:00 AM

Hello David, congratulations on your POTD win with this amazing piece. Wishing you a wonderful day as you celebrate.

David Kavanagh
Date: 4/16/2025 3:04:00 AM

Thank you Zyrool, I’m delighted with your supportive comment and also to receive POTD, I love stripping back words and giving them an alternative perspective, cheers David

Tom Cunningham

Date: 4/16/2025 12:32:00 AM

Congratulations to you David on today's POTD honour on a another thought provoking verse. Tom

David Kavanagh
Date: 4/16/2025 2:56:00 AM

Woohoo! this is a big surprise today Tom, I’m absolutely delighted with the POTD accolade, as this one was originally designed to be a Monoku, but then I seen it open up into a monorhyme wordplay with lots of scope to add duality in each line, thanks so much for being the bearer of good news! Cheers David

Ink Empress

Date: 4/15/2025 6:31:00 AM

Dear David Its one of those poem that do not need understanding but appreciation, for the clever wordplay and diction and how youv phrased thoughts and flowed your poem with such catchy rhymes in a sublime manner! I love the lines “ This illusion belies the hurt disillusion because it’s true” the cadence and rhythm of your unique wordplay stands out! Excellent! A very deep poem that needs nothing more than just accolades for the exquisite nature of poetic expression! Life to me is an illusion. Pleasure reading! Sending you light always!

Ink Empress
Date: 4/15/2025 10:52:00 AM

I love that song!!! Thnk u for mentioning! He is amazing!!

David Kavanagh
Date: 4/15/2025 10:45:00 AM

Thanks Ink, you’re always very kind with comments, this one is indeed a play on words, but with a little extra meaning embedded in each line, mostly by using duality in the (Dis-/This-) sense, I’m pretty sure there’s many more just waiting to be plucked from the Dictionary, Kurt was a master at this, remember (hello-hello- how low) in ‘Teen Spirit’ was barely imperceptible! Cheers for the light, David!