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The Valley of Loss

Age bought me to this valley I must walk, there is no turning back, I have no choice. All those who went before me now lie still, unanswered are the sounds of my own voice. A soft white bed beneath, this valley floor with every step I take I hear it sing, a gentle dirge of sorrow to the dead, no Nightingale, this sound the song of springs. The winding strands around me are not trees but tubes and wires that rise to right and left horizon nothing more than a flatline, mere confirmation of a soul bereft. My parents walked this valley, brother too, and recently good friends though none will cross, some saw this path approach, some never knew, the deeper that I go, deeper my loss. November 14th, 2017 For contest 'Empty your soul with words', sponsored by Broken Wings.

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Date: 12/9/2017 3:51:00 PM
Very intense but important message, Viv, I enjoyed this very much! Congratulations on your well-deserved win, my friend - blessings!
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Date: 11/26/2017 7:29:00 AM
Viv, such a deep and dark and sorrowful write, well done and congratulations on your win in my contest !
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Viv Wigley
Date: 11/26/2017 11:11:00 AM
Thanks, Constance, nice to be among such a strong crop of entries. Viv x
Date: 11/25/2017 2:01:00 PM
The third stanza in this write is amazing my friend, congratulations
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Date: 11/26/2017 1:51:00 AM
Thanks Brian, I'm honoured to be included in such a strong crop of entries. Regards, Viv
Date: 11/19/2017 6:20:00 AM
Excellently written, Viv, though it's the sad reality of all our lives, especially as one grows older...
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Viv Wigley
Date: 11/26/2017 1:52:00 AM
Indeed, Jo, my black tie seems to have taken up premanent residence at the front of my wardrobe. Viv x
Date: 11/18/2017 7:29:00 PM
wow, this is so DEEP and AMAZING, Viv. I don't think anyone else could do the theme of Valley of loss than you have show us with this sad poem.
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Viv Wigley
Date: 11/19/2017 1:00:00 AM
Thanks Andrea, I'll try anfd get back to being more upbeat as soon as poss. Viv x
Date: 11/14/2017 7:36:00 PM
Very deep and emotional, these words sure resonate with me, great poem!
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Viv Wigley
Date: 11/15/2017 11:31:00 PM
Thanks Arthur, it's a theme that will never cease to metamorphosize into something different every time. Regards, Viv
Date: 11/14/2017 7:42:00 AM
such emotion in your words Mr Viv I can relate to so much of your poem especially over recent years:-( the final stanza realy hits home hard:-( Good luck in the contest i think Constance will love this melancholy write:-) hugs Jan xx
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Viv Wigley
Date: 11/15/2017 11:33:00 PM
sad to have such a common bond lately, Jan- time is a healer until another death comes along and kicks you in the teeth. Hugs, Viv x

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