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'D Form - Dramatic Verse' Contest Info

Sponsor Constance La France

 

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The white statue rested above the dying woman's head, A ray of light shone thinly onto the old talisman. Carter watched silently at the old gaunt wrinkled woman. He would be brave, prepare his last rites, For he knew her end was near. She beckoned him to come near her. "Take this old handkerchief, the prophets gave me long ago, It has a gift, treasure it for it will bring you fortune." With that gesture, she closed her eyes and slept forever. Outside the cave, the sun was slowly going to its rest. Birds sang a mournful melody as they flew to their nests. Carter buried his mother to save her from predators. Then grabbed his armour and food ready to cross the desert. Around his sturdy arm, he wore a muscle old steel cuff, Underneath this, he hid the tattered handkerchief for luck. The fiery sun shone fire and thirst on the lonely young man, But he was well prepared, and from his water skin he sipped Sparingly till he wearily arrived at a city. Quickly he was arrested and taken before the king. No strangers were accepted in the well-organised place. But soon he was given a sporting chance: a fight to the death Or else he must marry the king's only sister. His wife had died childless. He had no heir. Everyone knew about his sister’s ugliness. Carter wished to fight but dead tired he had no option. A woman came, sublimely lithe, face heavily hidden. Prepare them both, ordered the king. They would be wed that night. Carter and his wife were escorted to a small palace. Alone he wondered why her face was covered with a thick veil. Evil witchcraft must have been playing some frightful curse. In the dim light of their chamber, she undid her dark veil. He could see why. Despite her figure, her face was horrid. Her only redeeming feature was her beautiful blue eyes. He had to treat her like a wife or die; what could he do? Suddenly his mother's last words inspired him. He produced The tattered handkerchief and put it on her face hopefully. Light shone bright; her face changed her into a real beauty. Elated, he could make love to her, but she warned him. The magic would last so long as she carried the handkerchief. He made her wear a beautiful blue face covering. The handkerchief was hidden in her face mask. He had no wish to be challenged for her hand. She birthed three beautiful children. The old king was happy and named Carter heir to his kingdom. PLACED 1

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Date: 8/7/2024 2:11:00 PM
Victor, outstanding, congratulations on your win in my contest with this wonderful poem, well done, Constance
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Date: 7/17/2024 6:25:00 AM
This is written so well and such imagination!! I do wish he could've come to love the woman with the flaws to her beauty rather than only because she was made beautiful. The start of a long story I think! Hope you continue! Xoxo
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Date: 7/15/2024 1:45:00 PM
Congratulations on your win. WOW!!! What a story. What a write with a great ending.  Have a blessed day writing away.................
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Date: 7/3/2024 1:01:00 PM
Dear Victor, this was so entertaining from the first word to the last. A very well written tale and I’m glad the handkerchief came to his rescue and there was a happy ending. So enjoyed it. Thank you for sharing. Good luck my friend in the contest. Hugs and smiles :):)
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Date: 7/3/2024 1:53:00 AM
Love this story! It kept me engaged and entertained!
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Date: 7/2/2024 7:20:00 PM
Dear Victor this intriguing piece is a showcase for your talent as a poetic story-teller. Dramatic, dynamic and captivating imagery and emotions, my friend. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
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Date: 7/2/2024 8:43:00 AM
Great drama. Love the tattered handkerchief prop!
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Date: 7/1/2024 9:21:00 PM
Of the scriptural revelation of late, spoke I of a hilltop that manifested the light of truth. I found this anecdote highly suggestive, and complete. Manifestations manipulate images that the mind produces. A hilltop vs Mt. Everest, or dim vs bright. All bear distinctive properties, different to the others, albeit, the truth of light is relative to the point. The handkerchief furthers in its own truth, beauty vs ugliness. Aloha
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Date: 7/1/2024 1:04:00 PM
- A skillful and interesting story, Victor :) - Have a lovely summer... I just popped in today :) - hugs
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Date: 7/1/2024 7:31:00 AM
Your poem has a story. But did he need the handkerchief? Perhaps turn the lights out. Never marry someone you don't love should be the message. I enjoy this story.
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Victor Buhagiar
Date: 7/1/2024 8:44:00 AM
My poem is just fantasy with magic in it. I have other poems like it. Hope you'll like them when I post them But then I write about everything.
Date: 7/1/2024 5:59:00 AM
A wonderful story. An imaginative mind can travel to any length. Like a fairy tale, everything has ended on a happy note. A great entry for Constance's contest.. All the Best dear Victor.
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Date: 7/1/2024 5:49:00 AM
Hey, whatever works I always say. Enchanting writing Victor. Very imaginative
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Date: 7/1/2024 1:18:00 AM
What an imaginative mind you have dear Victor. I was enthralled from beginning to end. I'm so happy that all ended well. I see a winner in this awesome story, however good luck...Hugs
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Date: 6/30/2024 10:58:00 PM
Great story with a happy ending, my friend.
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Date: 6/30/2024 8:21:00 PM
Quite a gripping story, Victor, superbly penned.
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Date: 6/30/2024 7:58:00 PM
Well written Victor, you're a marvel at story telling, good luck in the contest. Tom
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Date: 6/30/2024 2:19:00 PM
A wonderful story Victor, I really enjoyed the read. Truth is beauty is only skin deep, true beauty comes from the heart underneath… Beryl
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Date: 6/30/2024 1:29:00 PM
Great storytelling Victor and great idea for this contest.. You did the form really well..
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Date: 6/30/2024 12:37:00 PM
Brilliant storytelling as always, got me hooked from the very first line! I love the flow of your lines and how youv also written in a very descriptive manner such as “ Outside the cave, the sun was slowly going to its rest. Birds sang a mournful melody as they flew to their nests” adds on and enhances the ambiance of the narrative so well worded! And the ending is brilliant and moving! I lov reading stories like this! Pleasure always reading your work! Sending you light
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Date: 6/30/2024 10:49:00 AM
Victor, your narrative captivated me, from its enthralling inception to the fascinating, cheerful culmination. Thoroughly appreciated! Sorry if I missed your wonderful poetry as I was on vacation.
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Date: 6/30/2024 7:24:00 AM
Ahhh!! Reads like a winner for the D contest. Way to go. A good story. In a couple of places, I think it needs improvement for a better reading. Try using "Grammar Checker" on here to see if it will help you improve those couple of lines. Sara K
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Victor Buhagiar
Date: 6/30/2024 11:45:00 AM
I use Grammarly regularly and it shows me where there are mistakes.
Date: 6/29/2024 10:48:00 PM
Victor, your story held me spellbound, from its intriguing beginning, to the fascinating, happy ending. Much enjoyed!
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