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The Stroll - Gertrude Abercrombie 1943

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it's easy to imagine the moon fell out of the sky but no, it's still up there, where it's always been I look around to see what chases me; nothing moves... but the tree stands still with the mocking pose of a monster about to shout "boo!" it's ethereal moonlight I should feel bathed in it everything around me is but I cast my shadow at my feet and above my head the cloud, my familiar... holding steady with my pace as if on a lead I feel sure I'm walking the same small stretch of path over and over perhaps I can walk off the darkness and it can join the night sky where it should be I've clearly stolen the night absorbed its essence the night stays impossibly light my companion leads the way heading nowhere but with purposeful stride no one need know from looking that we are figments of our own imagination drawn from spare bits of coagulated night the mood will disperse perhaps I'll turn out to be real there's maybe even a big reveal and under the cloak is pure joy trapped and raring to go I just need to happen upon some knowledge something that makes all the pieces slide into place 'ahh' I'll say and I'll leave the cloak where I stand give the cat a map and off we'll go we won't sleep when the sun shines we'll dance and the rock can be thrown at the cloud and the tree turned upside down to walk away I'll walk a different path it'll be unrecognisable

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Date: 10/15/2023 10:02:00 AM
Dear Dilly, your interpretation of The Stroll is breathtaking, but even on its own as a poem without the artwork, it’s beyond breathtaking with intricate imagery and emotion that brings me to the center of your ravishing heart and imagination. I loved it all but I especially loved “and the rock can be thrown at the cloud/and the tree turned upside down to walk away” - wow!! A fav! Congratulations for your great win in Brian’s contest. Warmest wishes.. ~ Susan
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Date: 10/15/2023 10:36:00 AM
Thank you Susan, your comments are always so uplifting to receive - very much appreciated! I loved writing this one, it felt more like a story book looking at it than a single painting. Thanks again for your kind words and fav x
Date: 10/15/2023 6:43:00 AM
Very nicely done. Congrats on your win.
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Date: 10/15/2023 7:03:00 AM
Thanks Dale, I appreciate your comment
Date: 10/12/2023 2:38:00 AM
Perhaps I'll turn out to be real.. geat line. Great work.
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Date: 10/12/2023 2:50:00 AM
I turn out to be real every day, much to my surprise :) thank you for your comment
Date: 10/11/2023 10:41:00 PM
I don't know what to say other than you are a gifted young woman and I hope the very best for you.
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Date: 10/11/2023 10:57:00 PM
Aww thanks Vickey - (I'm not actually young) that's really kind of you to say. I can't imagine there's much call for these types of poems but I enjoy them x
Date: 10/11/2023 2:49:00 PM
You're a gifted and imaginative poet with a unique way of blending vocabulary and creating images. Wow! Your poem was intriguing and engaging from beginning to end. For some unknown reason, your poem helped me remember Alice in Wonderland. Anyway, an awesome job...and i like the painting..perfect match. Sara
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Date: 10/11/2023 2:54:00 PM
Thank you Sara - I adore the freedom of ekphrasis and just leaping into a painting and seeing what happens. Your enthusiasm is a joy, thank you for your support x
Date: 10/11/2023 1:06:00 PM
Compelling. The last six lines are precious, eclectic imagination, love your universe. voice and painting complete. ~have a nice day
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Date: 10/11/2023 1:09:00 PM
I just discovered the painter today - I think she'll be a favourite for me :) thank you Anaya - your kind words are uplifting x

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