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J with Four Options Poetry Contest

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First option out of four.
 
Written 31 July 2025
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Pride goes before destruction and a haughty spirit before a fall. Proverbs 16: 18 she stood tall on the jagged edges of the cliff face worried as she noticed the rough seas whilst above high dark clouds rumbled though the sun shone straight at her face could it enlighten her about what had happened thoughts came and went, as she remembered the letter he had sent her and wondered was she deceived by her soldier and sister he insulted her refusing to marry him and she insulted him back vowing she would never marry him come what may still thoughts rumbled inside her mind was he really proud or was she prejudiced the jagged edges of a knife pierced her soul could there have been some half-truths in his insults she still hated him but admired his handsome face facts churned in her head and confused her even more could she face those jagged edges of truths she turned and walked down the rough cliff her soul lacerated with truths and pride

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Date: 8/1/2025 4:33:00 PM
Dramatic and engaging poetry, Victor. It is so real, the thoughts we should think when our sudden rage, or theirs, causes us the rant about half-truths and cause knee-jerk reactions from others. As we later contemplate the options and intents of words blurted out in anger ... often the truer version of those words is given to us from a higher source. a FAV for my list, my friend. Good luck in the contest! Bill
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Date: 8/1/2025 10:50:00 AM
Such impressive poetry! As if reading an excerpt from a novel.. Dear Victor, you have adeptly sown the seeds of suspense and wonder into your avid reader mind and soul.. I am relishing another wondrous side of you.. digging deeper literally and metaphorically to render a so wonderful poetry that lends itself to many a reading! I have so much enjoyed your rendition of the state of pride and hurt in a so dignified beauty.. God bless you. My deepest regards.
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Date: 7/31/2025 9:49:00 PM
As she gave him tit for that, she needn't feel defeated. Yet his denial to marry her is tormenting. It's quite natural. A very emotive poem. All the Best, dear Victor!
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Date: 7/31/2025 8:42:00 PM
Powerful and beautiful, your poem captivates with its portrayal of pride and its consequential inner turmoil and pain. Very nicely written, my friend. :)
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Date: 7/31/2025 7:30:00 PM
Awesome poetry, Victor. BOL in the contest. Hope you are doing well my friend. All the best... ~CM
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Date: 7/31/2025 3:56:00 PM
How emotive and dark, a piercing and dramatic piece, Victor. This is one of those poems that is hard to shake off after reading. Good luck in the contest. I've sent you a SoupMail. Poetry hugs .... CayCay
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Date: 7/31/2025 12:50:00 PM
very interesting take on jagged edges. Nicely done!
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Date: 7/31/2025 11:31:00 AM
Always two unspoken sides in every argument. Cooler heads usually prevail. But, not always. Excellent write.
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Date: 7/31/2025 9:47:00 AM
The truth is powerful, Nicely penned
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Date: 7/31/2025 7:32:00 AM
Dearest Victor,your poem cuts deep—raw and beautifully conflicted. The imagery of jagged cliffs mirrors the sharp emotional terrain she’s navigating—betrayal, pride, truth, and pain all entwined. I love how her inner storm reflects the chaos of nature around her. It’s not just a breakup—it’s a reckoning.Good luck in the contest...Hugs
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Date: 7/31/2025 5:30:00 AM
Great write through and through. A fave!
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Date: 7/31/2025 4:19:00 AM
If a person wants to share negativity about a person's character, never do it in anger, but in a loving atmosphere where the person might learn and grow. It would be better to let God reveal their faults to them and show them the way to improve. If it was motivated from a movie scene, it turned out okay in the end, but sadly life isn't like that most of the time. LOL..Thanks for sharing your talent with us. Sara K
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Date: 7/31/2025 4:05:00 AM
Elizabeth Bennett and Mr Darcy. This picture is from Pride and Prejudice. If this was your inspiration, you did well, indeed. It's one of my favourite classics and you caught essence of wounded pride well. Blessings
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Date: 7/31/2025 4:03:00 AM
Complex interplay between love, pride, and self-identity in the face of conflict. Feelings of hate and admiration highlight the complexity of romantic relationships.
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Date: 7/31/2025 2:58:00 AM
- He was full of critical attitudes and negative qualities ... she made a good choice - An excellent poem, Victor :) - Best wishes in the contest :) - (S- mail reply) - hugs
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Date: 7/31/2025 1:56:00 AM
Glad she got away!
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Date: 7/31/2025 1:23:00 AM
He managed to make her feel bad about herself and nearly succeeded thankfully she saw through him. Tom PS Soup mail.
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