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The Human Particle

edges are better felt beneath the skin the way the wind bruises into bone like folds of water through which the mind lurks in naked silence between gasps of ragged light those threadbare atoms held in a spider’s web the lash of winter in scarcity measured where - crippled by time my body split by the darkness of you bleeds blue

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Crystol Woods

Date: 6/21/2024 8:55:00 AM

I hesitate to leave a comment because I don't feel I've gotten the entirety of your poem... just barely see the shape of your intentions. That's my ignorance, not your lack! One day I hope to comment with understanding but for now I'll say, this made me cry and I wish I knew why! Congrats on your placement! <3xo

Mat Ignacio
Date: 6/21/2024 3:00:00 PM

I appreciate your comment, this really strikes a chord with me. truthfully, my intentions are not always clear also, more just a strong feeling about something that sits just beyond grasp, trying to capture this somehow, the essence or the spirit of it - sometimes i feel the rawness and can only stare at the blank screen - look forward to reading more of your work

Unseeking Seeker

Date: 6/18/2024 9:33:00 PM

A deep, poignant poem, Mat, stark and succinct. I see it is a top winner in a contest too, superb!

Mat Ignacio
Date: 6/18/2024 9:59:00 PM

my kindest regards

Subimal Sinha-Roy

Date: 5/27/2024 11:51:00 PM

Congratulations for your podium win with such a crisp and deep poem.

Mat Ignacio
Date: 5/28/2024 8:17:00 PM

thank you, subimal, have a good day

Linda Alice Fowler

Date: 5/27/2024 9:57:00 AM

I enjoyed each line of this poem Mat. Congratulations! :)

Mat Ignacio
Date: 5/27/2024 11:59:00 AM

thank you kindly, linda - have a great rest of your day

Susan Ashley

Date: 5/27/2024 8:24:00 AM

Dear Mat, the stunning artistry of your verse reveals a melancholy of deep palpable ache. Your soulful imagery, though impactful, is strung together delicately.. as if with "a spider's web".. and the airy space between the silky strands echo the speaker's sentiments with a subtle yet poignant voice. There is room for the heart's imagination to reverberate with your verse. Congratulations for your win in Charlotte's contest. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Mat Ignacio
Date: 5/27/2024 11:58:00 AM

i appreciate your response - kindest regards

Thompson Emate

Date: 5/27/2024 7:13:00 AM

Congratulations Mat on your well-deserved win. I enjoyed the read. A short but precise poem.

Mat Ignacio
Date: 5/27/2024 7:51:00 AM

my thanks to you, thompson - all the best

Charlotte Puddifoot

Date: 5/27/2024 4:40:00 AM

i was really struck by this upon first reading..delicately spun like 'a spider's web' with every word placed to perfection; pared back lines full of impact - congrats on your 2nd place in my contest!

Mat Ignacio
Date: 5/27/2024 7:50:00 AM

deepest appreciation, charlotte - have a great day

Tonye George

Date: 5/23/2024 7:57:00 PM

Bleeding blue feels like a higher type of pain. Lovely written Mat.

Mat Ignacio
Date: 5/24/2024 7:59:00 AM

my gratitude, Tonye - all the best

NJ Tomcatx

Date: 5/23/2024 5:03:00 PM

Excellent writing--and thought-provoking.

Mat Ignacio
Date: 5/24/2024 7:59:00 AM

thank you mr t, i appreciate your time

Jessica Carrasco

Date: 5/22/2024 7:23:00 PM

Wow, you have the way of the great poets...beautiful!

Mat Ignacio
Date: 5/22/2024 7:31:00 PM

thank you for the thoughtful remark - kindest regards

Paige Hind

Date: 5/22/2024 1:32:00 PM

Darkly beautiful, Mat...this is real

Mat Ignacio
Date: 5/22/2024 3:10:00 PM

thank you paige, have a good day

Di11y Da11y

Date: 5/22/2024 11:20:00 AM

How do you put words together so uniquely?! Marvellous word choices that are power packed and make you feel you are gasping for air as you read - a rare talent!

Mat Ignacio
Date: 5/22/2024 11:56:00 AM

i appreciate the kind response - best regards