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Not reflected in glass, though bathed in light I'm always only inches from the long dark night No certainty of self will I ever amass Though bathed in light, not reflected in glass The shadow of the frame falls on my spine It bolsters me up, stops me losing my mind Wrongly placed shadows in the darkness I claim Falls on my spine, the shadow of the frame With unfocussed gaze, breathing heavy air Too aware of inside to even see out there Even squares of light seem like impassable maze Breathing heavy air, with unfocussed gaze Scratch to lift paint to create texture Our self assessments are merely conjecture Never trust anyone who believes themselves a saint To create texture scratch to lift paint

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Date: 7/29/2024 2:40:00 PM
Furniture on the right casts the shadow, but what is the glassy floor? This painting is beautiful in a way it soothes. :)
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Di11y Da11y
Date: 7/29/2024 10:37:00 PM
I've done loads of these swap quatrains - they are very quick to turn out and feel quite satisfying. I've not changed, I just go where my mood takes me :)
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I Am Anaya
Date: 7/29/2024 3:59:00 PM
I just noticed it rhymes, unusual and different from what I am used to-- a freeer self of you. Maybe you'll come back to free verse!
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Di11y Da11y
Date: 7/29/2024 2:44:00 PM
Thanks Anaya, moonlight can be ethereal. I looked at this one a while and felt there was more to see from stepping back as well. It very much has 'the only one awake' vibes. Thanks for stopping by x
Date: 7/28/2024 4:04:00 PM
I love the poem and the painting. I can't find a thing wrong with the lighting, especially since we can't see the light source or how many lights there are. I hate to admit it but I tend to be a window snoop.
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Di11y Da11y
Date: 7/28/2024 10:49:00 PM
Thank you Hilda! :) yes, me looking for things to more to say is more why the lighting is mentioned. Paintings often have an echoing theme I've noticed, so the repeat of the cross shape from frame to back is likely just that. I love your confession of being a window snoop - I have been at previous addresses but I don't think there's a decent view of anything from the front of this house and the windows have blinds at the back, so I'd be visible snooping. I'm an occasional doorbell camera snoop I suppose haha thank you for your comment, appreciated x
Date: 7/28/2024 12:03:00 PM
The shadows do appear wrong, but only to a studious eye like yours, I totally missed, still it works to great effect, and takes nothing from the painting, or indeed your wonderful Ekphrasis, love the idea of the shadow propping up the spine, all self sanctioned saints are totally untrustworthy, except me of course, love it, cheers David
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David Kavanagh
Date: 7/28/2024 1:53:00 PM
Perhaps the light is coming around her flanks, and gives the impression of a darker shade along her back, definitely something to munch on :)
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Di11y Da11y
Date: 7/28/2024 1:46:00 PM
Thanks David, this one was the same notion as my quirky qwerty, just written up differently. I couldn't figure out the logic of the shadow on the back but it allowed for some poetic licence. I think saints, prime ministers, presidents - if they think they should have that job, then there's a question mark straight away. I appreciate your visit to my page, thank you :)
Date: 7/28/2024 10:52:00 AM
Your poems about art are among my favorites. This one is terrific. I love discovering "new" art from past masters of art. Sadly, I am largely ignorant of classic art.
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Date: 7/28/2024 11:12:00 AM
Thank you so much Chetta, I didn't realise you read my page regularly :) I'm learning as I go along - typically the gallery websites are interesting but recently I've found less well known paintings from favourite artists from private collections on auction sites such as Sotheby's. Sometimes I'll weave in a back story if there is one but I'll often just view the paintings and see where it takes me x
Date: 7/28/2024 4:59:00 AM
Dilly, I admire your free verse but I would love to read more rhyming verses like this from you because this one promotes your talent in that form.
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Date: 7/28/2024 6:03:00 AM
:)
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Lin Lane
Date: 7/28/2024 5:20:00 AM
You’re welcome. I find the right mood is needed for most endeavors. I’ve readied canvases and then just sat there staring at them before thinking, Nope, not in the mood.’
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Di11y Da11y
Date: 7/28/2024 5:12:00 AM
Thank you Lin, when I first joined the site I would regularly try out all different forms but they do need the right mood. Rhyming can be nice as it's like breadcrumbs leading towards the end of a poem. I appreciate your encouraging comment, thank you

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