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The Ghost Came Out of the Lake

A red moon greeted me as I arrived at Eilean Donan Castle,
late at dinner time, a heat wave wrecking zest
of our intended peaceful nightly rest.

It was late but I decided on a nocturnal swim.
O blessed water, so calm, so cool, so placid.
Suddenly I heard the crash of the waves,
an echo, a forlorn ululation of sweet melodious tune.
Alarmed I looked behind and saw a fog cover the lake.
Foamy white lamb-like waves danced around me.
The waves dragged me up on to the sandy beach.
Behind me I saw a figure surrounded by a nebula,
Swimming slowly towards the splendiferous shore.
She came out all wet still wearing an old-fashioned gown.

Both out of breath, we lay on the smooth sand.
Above a red moon shone brightly that cloaked the stars.
In the strange night we looked at each other and smiled.
Soon we were embraced in a long lingering kiss.
Ecstasy escalated rapidly, emotions running riot,
Until the red moon descended behind Donan Castle.
I turned back to her and saw her in the water
Swimming into a swirling mist and disappear.

Back at the castle I climbed up to my room.
There hanging on the wall was a painting of her doom.
Lady Murdina, Warrior of the Sea, drowned 1888. 
Seeing the painting and the date, I fainted. 


7 January 2022
A Ghost Story Poetry Contest
Sponsored by: Angela Tune
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Anaya Avatar
September 19, 2022 at 2:57 PM
Congratulations, Victor on your winning placement. Strangers who meet in unusual circumstances, leaves me wondering. Perhaps he was the ghost who appeared to her. Either way such a delight for both!
George Avatar
September 14, 2022 at 8:58 PM
So glad that your poem has finally got the placement it truly deserved. Hearty Congratulations!
Poet Avatar
September 14, 2022 at 11:50 AM
Victor, my Heartfelt congratulations on winning top placement in my contest. What a great piece of writing. That was something that I enjoyed reading. Blessings
Kiser Avatar
January 11, 2022 at 3:54 PM
What a well-crafted fantasy of this woman; beautifully mysterious and a great read.
M  Avatar
January 10, 2022 at 8:08 PM
Wow Victor a wonderful mysterious poem and a wee bit saucy!!Ha….Debx
Kannan Avatar
January 10, 2022 at 7:03 AM
I am loving this Ghost Story... Such wonderful calm and lovely imagery throughout... Thanks for sharing this stunning write...
Dietrich Avatar
January 9, 2022 at 4:42 PM
gosh she must have been quite the vixen in her day. Such a wonderful passionate ghost. GREAT story, Victor
Brown Avatar
January 9, 2022 at 4:16 PM
Victor, I enjoyed the story. Amazing Writing...Debra
Kitchin Avatar
January 8, 2022 at 12:00 PM
Victor, love the story and the twist at the end, best of luck in the contest! hugs
Proxenos Avatar
January 8, 2022 at 11:14 AM
Hi Victor, A scary but very creative enjoyable poem well penned, Best wishes, Jennifer
Calasibetta Avatar
January 8, 2022 at 9:06 AM
Victor this is a 'classic'....the tension and excitement you have created in a tale that speaks volumes to the spernatural! Good Luck in the contest....I know it's a winner! :) Paulette P.S. you mentioned in one of your comments to one of my poem that it wasn't scary. I think you may have me confused with someone else~this is the first time I am reading this.
Buhagiar Avatar
January 8, 2022 at 12:31 PM
I wanted to assure you that my ghost story is not scary. Victor
Seeker Avatar
January 8, 2022 at 6:50 AM
How many have kissed a ghost and lived to tell the tale? Quite a write!
Daniel Avatar
January 8, 2022 at 6:47 AM
Wow! this is quite a ghost story, Victor, anyone would have been shocked, love it:)
Rodrigues Avatar
January 8, 2022 at 6:19 AM
That was quite the night! Lamb-like waves , forlorn ululation, ecstasy with a ghost, realization that makes one faint.
Messina Avatar
January 8, 2022 at 4:53 AM
A chilling experience. Great write, Victor. It had me captivated from start to finish.
Skelly Avatar
January 8, 2022 at 2:30 AM
I am just about to enter my ghost poem that coincidentally refers to a castle..I see you have not submitted this work? Delice
Buhagiar Avatar
January 8, 2022 at 6:01 AM
I have submitted this for the contest, but that does not mean you cannot write a ghostly story on a castle. Go ahead.
Horsman Avatar
January 8, 2022 at 12:24 AM
Oh wow, love it hope its for contest.
Ball Avatar
January 7, 2022 at 1:18 PM
WoW! What a story! It's actually a great beginning for a short ghost story. You should continue to write this one Victor. Loved it. Wonderful imagery. God Bless, JB
Cunningham Avatar
January 7, 2022 at 12:43 PM
Great story telling Victor. A very romantic ghostly tale. I've seen it years ago when we went on a tour of the Highlands, I didn't actually go inside though. Tom
Rose  Avatar
January 7, 2022 at 10:46 AM
wow what a lovely story of love and romance with a twist of fate. Victor, I love the way you spin a web, your at your best when you take poetry by the hand, Lovely write, :)
Buehler Avatar
January 7, 2022 at 10:18 AM
An intriguing nocturnal tale that completely captivates. I loved the ending, which holds a surprise and a dash of humor. Best wishes, Evelyn
Roper Avatar
January 7, 2022 at 10:10 AM
Wow, imagination with imagery and feeling. Awe, a love of a ghost.. Beautiful, Victor. Enjoyed the story. Hugs
Baker Avatar
January 7, 2022 at 8:26 AM
Loved the creative and imagery. Victor. The mystery and intrique were enjoyable and the ending well written. Bill
Pandit Avatar
January 7, 2022 at 7:06 AM
Your imagery and details bring forth the castle and the swim in your signature style. Much enjoyed this tale of a romantic encounter with a ghost, Victor.
Poet Avatar
January 7, 2022 at 6:20 AM
Victor, this poem in lyrical form was pretty fascinating. You performed an outstanding job. I feel as if I'm overseeing a supernatural film because everything appears so genuine and frightening! A gloomy mood is established by the fortress, fog, and blood moon. Shivers engulf my body.
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