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Soldiers marched, upright and ready Bayonet's pointed, their hand at the steady The town folk feared what was at hand They were simple folks, working the land The soldiers carted away those who could work On trains they went, when finished, into the earth Others though not in working order Faced a certain death, in weather getting colder Hey you in the wheel chair? What's your name? Darren Sir, I am a poet of fame Well lad, follow me, is your end game Hey you who hobbles along? What's your name? Seren Sir, I am a painter of fame Wee lady, soon you shall be one dead dame Hey you, walking in your dreams? What's your name? Arthur sir, a man who now is lame Get in line with the others the soldier proclaimed Off we went to the edge of the town Each with fear in our hearts and eyes piercing like darts We knew the fate that had landed us together A poet , an Artist and a dead philosopher The firing squad you see, cared not our valor We three were blindfolded and tied up to large trees As the rifles were loaded and the orders given A voice from the heavens said they wont be forgiven The lieutenant in his fancy dress uniform Yelled out, at the ready, the bullets soon to storm A silence filled the void, but only for a moment Fire he said, as three dead villagers fell, lives stolen Darren, Seren, and Arthur, ended up in heaven, where every day, they lived in a beautiful garden, with not only beautiful flowers, but an open bar, and all you can eat buffet, Darren now runs free. Seren now has 2 new knees, every month, for eternity, and happily runs Marathons along with Darren. Arthur sits at the bar in the garden, while sipping his rum and cokes, absolutely amazed, as he chats with the bar tender, Tim Smith. Notes: This was inspired by Serens comments from PoetrySoupChat in which she said, they should shoot us both, dues to the recent pain and suffering. ( she had a knee operation ) Darren has gone through multiple operations recently, and I am amazed at this strength and positive attitude towards others even in his darkest moments. There is no good suffering, whether it be physical, emotional, depression, and the only thing I can think of is to laugh, as laughter at least brings smiles and maybe a wee bit of solace. I mentioned Tim, because he too recently went through knee surgery, so he knows the pain, I simply could not kill him in this poem, as then who would be the bartender? This made people smile, that's all the counts for me, and I wish to assure you no poets here actually shot in the making of this poem! I hope the music, represents in a more serious way, the suffering of pain, in any way it should manifest itself.

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Date: 11/4/2017 11:18:00 AM
This is a beautifully written poem, Arthur, a masterful weave of vivid imagery! I was so touched by your motivation for writing this. What a wonderful way to express empathy to those who are suffering - and I love the comic edge you gave it! Congrats on this well-deserved win!
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Date: 11/2/2017 9:39:00 PM
Congratulations on your well deserved poem Of the Week!
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Date: 11/2/2017 8:52:00 PM
I applaud your creative vision and energy arthur. Quite an amazing write. Enjoyed!
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Date: 10/30/2017 4:16:00 PM
Hi Arthur, I am so glad I stumbled across this well written. It was soo thoughtful of you to pen this poem. I agree , pain in any form is no joke. I 'm sure that everyone you mentioned felt better after reading this piece. Congratulations on getting the poem of week. It was well deserved:-) Alexis
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Date: 10/30/2017 8:03:00 AM
Arthur, I had to read your work after you so graciously read mine. The poem did not take me where I suspected it might. It led me to a better place that believes there is a better place after death. Actually the epilogue (story) did that. Thanks for continuing after the poem
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Date: 10/29/2017 8:44:00 PM
Amazing, Arthur, to involve people you truly enjoy .. that is what family is Hugs Eve~`*
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Date: 10/29/2017 12:23:00 PM
I wouldn't shoot any of you because there's a cure for what ails all of you. Vivid imagination, Arthur.
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Date: 10/29/2017 7:12:00 AM
congrats on POTW:-) I'm gutted i wasn't included in the poem ... i have broken something ... ok I confess it's only a a fingernail lol hugs jan xx
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Lin Lane
Date: 10/29/2017 12:21:00 PM
I haven't broken anything either, Jan. You would've made a good nurse for the trio of injured poets in this one.
Date: 10/28/2017 6:23:00 PM
combining depth of contestwith a wee of humor is the mark of a greeat poem, arthur... this is way out of the gate!...huggs
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Date: 10/28/2017 5:11:00 PM
Awesome write, Arthur! Your creativity springs to the fore, bringing a smile yet highlighting the serious topic it is intended to represent. In the meantime I hope that the 'patients' are recovering both their strength and will to live:) Regards // paul
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Date: 10/27/2017 6:20:00 AM
Hello Arthur, A wondrously written Quatrain in every respect!! I felt like I was in the Firing Line too as I progressed from stanza to stanza. Outstanding Work My Friend!! Cheers and Best Wishes, Gary
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Date: 10/26/2017 9:57:00 PM
Bravo! Bravo!...Arthur...god bless...^WW^
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Date: 10/26/2017 1:19:00 PM
Very creative and inventive prose, Arthur. You sure bring your words to life, my friend. It's like I felt the bullets whizzing by me, thru me. Powerful poetry. Love and joy always.
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Lin Lane
Date: 11/5/2017 6:10:00 AM
You DO write wonderful poetry, Jan, whether humorous or with deep sentiment, and yes, you are fantastic...
Date: 10/26/2017 10:55:00 AM
You attention to detail is simply amazing Arthur! I enjoyed this piece! : )
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Date: 10/26/2017 8:36:00 AM
I gave this another read and yes it is still brilliant.
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Date: 10/26/2017 2:26:00 AM
Excellent story telling here. Very much impressed with your pen. Thanks for sharing it.
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Date: 10/25/2017 11:34:00 PM
Thoughtful piece, Arthur. Reminds me of my late Mother with her crippling arthritis, saying 'better to suffer in this world than the next'. Take care, chap. Regards, Viv
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Date: 10/25/2017 11:35:00 AM
Well, heckfier, ain't been to Artuo's house in ages and found out I missed a party! I B smilin' with hat over mah hart, singin' serapes and starin' at art. Well writ, sez this twit!
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Date: 10/25/2017 8:01:00 AM
Arthur, your muse is on steroids! You orchestrate original! You eliminate boredom! Ps Can I have a small part in your next endeavor? Your friend, chuck
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Date: 10/24/2017 9:41:00 PM
A beautiful story Arthur...Very nicely penned..
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Date: 10/24/2017 7:24:00 PM
Awesome write, my friend! I'll be a barfly
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Date: 10/24/2017 7:07:00 PM
Brilliant story telling as always! I am impressed!
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Arthur Vaso
Date: 10/25/2017 11:36:00 PM
Thank you Richard!
Date: 10/24/2017 6:00:00 PM
I guess i am just a weed in your flower garden or did I just wee in it and get banned lol. will be back in chat having a laugh with you guys! :-) hugs jan xx
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Arthur Vaso
Date: 10/25/2017 11:36:00 PM
There are no weeds, only hugs!
Date: 10/24/2017 5:09:00 PM
hey hang on a minute do i get a rum and coke as well..... or two.....come on Darren lets go and play hopscotch....Seren
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Darren White
Date: 10/28/2017 3:14:00 AM
Yeah, let's Seren :D Oh, and I want an icecream as well. Vanilla!
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Arthur Vaso
Date: 10/25/2017 11:35:00 PM
:) good idea, I have played Shot Scotch with Tim!
Date: 10/24/2017 3:16:00 PM
Wow, this is SO interesting, Arthur. It makes me wish I had the time to chat with you guys (and even be able to figure out how to do it). Yes, you all have suffering in common. I would be a great companion for you all with my bad shoulder always bothering me. I dread to know what is around the corner for me!! Love this!
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Arthur Vaso
Date: 10/24/2017 5:51:00 PM
Thanks Andrea, brought a few laughs to some, I am happy for that!
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