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This is a form of poetry I created called an "Elemental" Compared to the "haiku" but a different structure. This form consists of 7 lines with 7 syllables in each line. Also the rhyme pattern is AABBCCA The first and last line must be the same . An "Elemental" must pertain to the 3 elements- (earth, water and sky)

The Elements

'Neath a starry darkened sky 
Moonlit treetops peak up high 
Fallen seeds on rivers float 
'Fore the whites of winters coat 
Washed ashore into the weeds 
Growing trees from dewdrop beads 
'Neath a starry darkened sky

earthskywaterhaiku

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Howard Kerr

August 6, 2021 at 1:47 AM

Hi Charles, This superb work is a template for the poet within us all. Thanks for your podium placement of my entry in your contest. Howard

Marius Alexandru

July 8, 2021 at 7:18 PM

I like this new form of yours, and the poem is great

Jan Allison

July 7, 2021 at 7:56 AM

what a wonderful example to inspire us, will see if i can come up with a poem for you:-) hugs jan xx

Constance La France

July 6, 2021 at 7:03 AM

Charlie, your poem is so dreamy and beautiful and I love your invented form and this is a great example for your contest, I hope I can write you a poem worthy ~ peace and tranquility _Constance

Malabika Ray Choudhury

July 5, 2021 at 6:37 PM

Lovely! Excellent example ~ Mala

Andrea Dietrich

July 5, 2021 at 2:37 PM

this is really gorgeous. Thanks for this example of your new poetry form!!

Kim Rodrigues

June 28, 2021 at 4:44 AM

Very pretty, Charles!

Joanna Daniel

June 26, 2021 at 4:51 AM

Very nice new form, Charles:) beauty can always be found in nature :)

Jo Chamberlain

June 25, 2021 at 1:44 PM

I really enjoyed the flow of your poem. I have read a few of your poems now, you have a great talent. Thank you for sharing.

Michelle Faulkner

June 24, 2021 at 6:42 PM

Very interesting form you created, I think I like the rivers the best! (We are heading for a heat wave in my neck of the woods, so I'm wanting a lot of rivers at the moment!)

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