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The Break-Up (Haiku-Ekphrasis)

. cold words of goodbye shared one hot summer evening with chilling regret For Brian's "Imagine" contest Edward Hopper's 'Summer Evening'

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Dane Ann Smith-Johnsen

Date: 10/24/2009 4:52:00 AM

Congratulations, Carrie, on placing in Brian’s Imagine contest with this wonderful poem It's easy to see why you did so well. The painting was inspiring. Your creativity shines. Smiles, Dane Ann

Brandee Augustus

Date: 10/19/2009 12:39:00 PM

I like how you wrote your poem like a stepping stair. Clearly the sadness of it is obvious with the words going down instead of up. Congratulations on your winning poem.

Donna Golden

Date: 10/18/2009 10:16:00 PM

Carrie, you always rise to the occasion and bring a stunner into the contest! Well done! Hugs, Donna

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 10/18/2009 7:12:00 PM

Congrats Carrie on your win in the contest.. such powerful words for a poignant message... bravo!

Robin L. Gass

Date: 10/18/2009 11:45:00 AM

Congratulations on your WIN in Brians contest with this lovely piece, Carrie! Love, Robin

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 10/18/2009 6:15:00 AM

Congratulations on your win in Brian's contest Carrie. Love, Carol

Brian Strand

Date: 10/18/2009 1:13:00 AM

Congrats on your success in my contest Carrie.Rgds Brian.My latest contest'Poet Laureate' is now open.

James Peranteau

Date: 10/12/2009 3:04:00 AM

Very powerful poem here carrie! Nicely done ! And p.s,....I had to correct a word in the pink one after you commented,...gently to gentle,....thanks for your kind comments. james

Elaine George

Date: 10/11/2009 4:13:00 PM

Dear Carrie, You have captured the essence of that painting profounding and masterfully. Love, Lainie. Best wishes in Brian's contest.

Corinne Curcio

Date: 10/11/2009 4:39:00 AM

Excellent work - Good luck in the contest.

Robin L. Gass

Date: 10/10/2009 9:48:00 AM

This is such a wonderful piece, Carrie. It so perfectly fits this painting! Excellent inspiration and displayed so beautifully! Good luck in Brians' contest! Love, Robin

Dane Ann Smith-Johnsen

Date: 10/10/2009 6:52:00 AM

Carrie, This is a very creative presentation of your haiku. I like the geometric design that reflects the geometric features in the painting. Nice job. Good luck in Brian's contest. Lovingly, Dane

Brian Strand

Date: 10/10/2009 12:33:00 AM

Carrie thank you for supporting my contest and for your welcome comments today.Rgds Brian

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 10/9/2009 11:36:00 PM

You describe so well the moment that drains us of hope and leaves us with "chilling regret," Carrie. Excellent entry for Brian's contest! Love, Carolyn

Raul Moreno

Date: 10/9/2009 2:52:00 PM

Excellent work Carrie, love the way you approached this, best of luck in the contest...Raul

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 10/9/2009 1:40:00 PM

a favs.. goodbye is the hardest word ,hardest then saying im sorry..i hate the break up yet i love this poem,excellent work--Charma

Sara Kendrick

Date: 10/9/2009 10:55:00 AM

I haven't looked at the picture but you have done a good description here. Keep writing. Sara

P Sheart

Date: 10/9/2009 9:28:00 AM

Great Ekphrasis Carrie, Great visual! Smile. Enjoy your poetry so much. Good luck in Brian's contest. A winner either way. Have a wonderful inspiring weekend! Love Light Truth Patricia