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That Sinking Feeling

Skipping my mind
across the lake
Sinking sinking
With each breath I take

Looking up
a gurgling sound
Breath escaping
My feet tightly bound

I can still remember
Your hand on my face
Heart beating fast
Feeling out of place

The car ride was bumpy
in the dark tiny trunk
Arms tightly bound 
feeling woozy and drunk

Yes I was the witness
to that horrible crime
I was there for my murder
Now I’m suspended in time

You fit me with shoes
Custom made for the deep
I guess an accountant 
has too many secrets to keep

As I sank oh so slowly
There was one consolation 
The beauty of detail
was my preoccupation 

A letter will arrive
In a few short days my friend
Yes by registered mail
What you started will end

Because details are my trade
All your crimes big and small
Except for my murder
They’ll be revealed one and all

Copyright © Richard Lamoureux | Year Posted 2020

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Frances Byrne Date: 5/2/2020 8:29:00 AM Hi Richard, What a terrific narrative, you kept my attention. Take care, Frances Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 5/2/2020 9:11:00 AM Thanks for the visits. ;0)

Andrea Dietrich Date: 5/1/2020 1:35:00 PM wow, this is AWESOME, Richard. I love ID murder mysteries and movies, etc of this genre. Great way to capture that feeling and the nice revenge at the end of this. Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 5/2/2020 9:23:00 AM Thanks Andrea, hugs Rick.

Jennifer Proxenos Date: 5/1/2020 11:00:00 AM Rick, You would make an excellent detective, but we would have to keep you alive Inspector Columbo! Great write - a fav. - very sharp. Blessings, Jennifer. Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 5/2/2020 9:11:00 AM Ha ha, cute one.

Judy Ball Date: 4/30/2020 4:41:00 PM WoW! What a dark and sad tale. Sounds like keeping books for the mob isn't a good idea. Well done. God Bless, JB Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 5/1/2020 9:34:00 AM Thanks Judy, blessings to you as well.

Michelle Faulkner Date: 4/29/2020 6:06:00 PM I like the crime noir feel of this - the beauty of detail, what a compelling line! Login to Reply

Lindsay Laurie Date: 4/28/2020 11:04:00 PM G'day Richard … kind of scary but very, very good poetry indeed. I really liked this - thanks Richard - Lindsay Login to Reply

Harry Horsman Date: 4/28/2020 8:38:00 AM Putting wrong to right? great poetry Richard,,love it. Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 4/28/2020 1:05:00 PM Thanks Harry. ;0)

Gordon Mcconnell Date: 4/27/2020 3:32:00 PM You tell this so well keeping one encaptured to the very end, Richard, indeed superb penning! Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 4/28/2020 1:06:00 PM Thanks Gordon.

Allright Poet Date: 4/27/2020 2:05:00 AM I am astounded with this well-written poem because I know how the author well and his writings. It is a profound and revealing subject which I think deserves a podium. Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 4/27/2020 7:59:00 AM Thanks Allright. ;0)

Eve Roper Date: 4/26/2020 9:43:00 PM Great story, Richard. Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 4/27/2020 8:00:00 AM Thanks Eve.

Timothy Hicks Date: 4/26/2020 7:25:00 PM Have you ever watched the movie (or read the book) The Lovely Bones? This spooky, disembodied revenge reminds me of that plot! Very eerie ... but has you rooting for the ghost's final request. Nicely done. Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 4/26/2020 8:01:00 PM Nope, I haven’t read it but it sounds interesting. Thanks for the visit Timothy.

Eileen Manassian Date: 4/26/2020 5:46:00 PM Wonder what inspired this piece? Intriguing tale.. Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 4/26/2020 8:02:00 PM The first line came to my head a few days ago and when I woke up the next day, the rest fell into place. ;0)

Gershon Wolf Date: 4/26/2020 12:58:00 PM Nice work, Detective Lamoureux! Hope you got the guy for tax evasion...And I hear that Heaven broadcasts these trials on 'Satellite TV' now. Stay tuned! … So enjoyed, Richard. Great narrative! :) gw Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 4/26/2020 8:08:00 PM Thanks Gershwin. ;0)

Tom Cunningham Date: 4/26/2020 12:45:00 PM Loved this Richard, justice served from the grave, hope the letter does not get returned to sender. Stay safe Tom. Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 4/26/2020 8:08:00 PM Ha ha, I guess that could happen.

John Hamilton Date: 4/26/2020 10:31:00 AM Nothing like a good pair of cement shoes eh Rick? Nicely said, I was wondering where it was going at the beginning but it all makes sense as you reach the end. Wonder what's in the notes? Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 4/26/2020 8:12:00 PM Thanks John. ;0). Maybe I will have to write a second piece with the details.