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That Sinking Feeling

Skipping my mind across the lake Sinking sinking With each breath I take Looking up a gurgling sound Breath escaping My feet tightly bound I can still remember Your hand on my face Heart beating fast Feeling out of place The car ride was bumpy in the dark tiny trunk Arms tightly bound feeling woozy and drunk Yes I was the witness to that horrible crime I was there for my murder Now I’m suspended in time You fit me with shoes Custom made for the deep I guess an accountant has too many secrets to keep As I sank oh so slowly There was one consolation The beauty of detail was my preoccupation A letter will arrive In a few short days my friend Yes by registered mail What you started will end Because details are my trade All your crimes big and small Except for my murder They’ll be revealed one and all

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Frances Byrne

Date: 5/2/2020 8:29:00 AM

Hi Richard, What a terrific narrative, you kept my attention. Take care, Frances

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/2/2020 9:11:00 AM

Thanks for the visits. ;0)

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/1/2020 1:35:00 PM

wow, this is AWESOME, Richard. I love ID murder mysteries and movies, etc of this genre. Great way to capture that feeling and the nice revenge at the end of this.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/2/2020 9:23:00 AM

Thanks Andrea, hugs Rick.

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 5/1/2020 11:00:00 AM

Rick, You would make an excellent detective, but we would have to keep you alive Inspector Columbo! Great write - a fav. - very sharp. Blessings, Jennifer.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/2/2020 9:11:00 AM

Ha ha, cute one.

Judy Ball

Date: 4/30/2020 4:41:00 PM

WoW! What a dark and sad tale. Sounds like keeping books for the mob isn't a good idea. Well done. God Bless, JB

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/1/2020 9:34:00 AM

Thanks Judy, blessings to you as well.

Michelle Faulkner

Date: 4/29/2020 6:06:00 PM

I like the crime noir feel of this - the beauty of detail, what a compelling line!

Lindsay Laurie

Date: 4/28/2020 11:04:00 PM

G'day Richard … kind of scary but very, very good poetry indeed. I really liked this - thanks Richard - Lindsay

Harry Horsman

Date: 4/28/2020 8:38:00 AM

Putting wrong to right? great poetry Richard,,love it.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 4/28/2020 1:05:00 PM

Thanks Harry. ;0)

Gordon Mcconnell

Date: 4/27/2020 3:32:00 PM

You tell this so well keeping one encaptured to the very end, Richard, indeed superb penning!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 4/28/2020 1:06:00 PM

Thanks Gordon.

Allright Poet

Date: 4/27/2020 2:05:00 AM

I am astounded with this well-written poem because I know how the author well and his writings. It is a profound and revealing subject which I think deserves a podium.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 4/27/2020 7:59:00 AM

Thanks Allright. ;0)

Eve Roper

Date: 4/26/2020 9:43:00 PM

Great story, Richard.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 4/27/2020 8:00:00 AM

Thanks Eve.

Timothy Hicks

Date: 4/26/2020 7:25:00 PM

Have you ever watched the movie (or read the book) The Lovely Bones? This spooky, disembodied revenge reminds me of that plot! Very eerie ... but has you rooting for the ghost's final request. Nicely done.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 4/26/2020 8:01:00 PM

Nope, I haven’t read it but it sounds interesting. Thanks for the visit Timothy.

Eileen Manassian

Date: 4/26/2020 5:46:00 PM

Wonder what inspired this piece? Intriguing tale..

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 4/26/2020 8:02:00 PM

The first line came to my head a few days ago and when I woke up the next day, the rest fell into place. ;0)

Gershon Wolf

Date: 4/26/2020 12:58:00 PM

Nice work, Detective Lamoureux! Hope you got the guy for tax evasion...And I hear that Heaven broadcasts these trials on 'Satellite TV' now. Stay tuned! … So enjoyed, Richard. Great narrative! :) gw

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 4/26/2020 8:08:00 PM

Thanks Gershwin. ;0)

Tom Cunningham

Date: 4/26/2020 12:45:00 PM

Loved this Richard, justice served from the grave, hope the letter does not get returned to sender. Stay safe Tom.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 4/26/2020 8:08:00 PM

Ha ha, I guess that could happen.

John Hamilton

Date: 4/26/2020 10:31:00 AM

Nothing like a good pair of cement shoes eh Rick? Nicely said, I was wondering where it was going at the beginning but it all makes sense as you reach the end. Wonder what's in the notes?

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 4/26/2020 8:12:00 PM

Thanks John. ;0). Maybe I will have to write a second piece with the details.