Sweats and Sweets

A flamed anguish gathers in a bleak cellar of gray nights pounding on my veins, steaming through a roughened flesh; that in my days I have lost passion’s luster and solitude is the only elixir I rub for now. Yet in reflection, the breaths find out how this darkness can shed a glow upon excretion of angst: the allowing of heart’s root begins to sprout in dewy, fertile mornings. I roam along cafes where flavored kisses once bloomed in July: your turn now to beg for a second chance, oh much too soon. For I have reaped moments of lush joy, of christened peace ,as new blossoms ripened from discoveries and friends to feast; till goblets of life sparkled like oozing champagne while your face turned old from stubbles of time. 6/18/2015 Olive Eloisa Guillermo’s Sweats and Sweets
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Kayode Avatar
July 6, 2015 at 1:49 AM
I love this,congrats Nette...huggs.
A   Avatar
June 30, 2015 at 6:11 PM
Hi Nette. Congrats on your SWEATS AND SWEETS win. LOVE LINDA
A  Avatar
June 29, 2015 at 11:55 PM
Nette, this is a nice sweet win *Hugs* SKAT
Guzzi Avatar
June 28, 2015 at 7:59 PM
Yes in many, many cases we are far better & more ourselves without 'them' Congrad's on Your Win. Light & Love
Sergi Avatar
June 28, 2015 at 6:18 PM
Great poem, nette congratulations!
Sergi Avatar
June 28, 2015 at 6:17 PM
Great poem, bette: Congratulations!
Callus Avatar
June 28, 2015 at 3:57 PM
So lovely to be back with much deserved congratulations on this winning entry, Nette! A second read confirms my initial comments:) hugs // paul
Fraser Avatar
June 28, 2015 at 2:53 PM
Many congratulations Nette on your placing in Olive's contest with this gem, hugs, James :) :)
Wigley Avatar
June 28, 2015 at 1:18 PM
Well up to your usual standard, Nette. Congratulations. Viv x
Mandani Avatar
June 28, 2015 at 11:19 AM
You haven't "lost passion's luster". It's very much there. Very nice.
Guillermo - Fraser Avatar
June 28, 2015 at 10:06 AM
Nette, another original version of sweats and sweet, a sweet "revenge" for a love Unanswered then later came to pursue ---begging, really good flow! The last two lines are remarkable.. I feel and see that sweats and sweet are revealed within the lines. Beautiful! CONGRATULATIONS! ~Olive Eloisa ( I wanna see you again soon.. :D!)
La France Avatar
June 19, 2015 at 5:46 PM
Nette, beautifully penned poem full of wondrous lines and words 7 and thanks for visiting my poem, the weathered door
Caswell Avatar
June 19, 2015 at 9:53 AM
Beautifully visualized and well written in depth and beauty ... Nice flow.. Cheers,, Kattzcradle
Roper Avatar
June 18, 2015 at 3:11 PM
Nice write, Nette, a 7 hugs eve
Kendrick Avatar
June 18, 2015 at 5:23 AM
The tantilizing flavors reads like a winner..Way to go, Lady for the contest..Thanks for the visit to my page..Sara
Dietrich Avatar
June 17, 2015 at 10:41 PM
It's great to see that you went to your free verse roots for this one. This is sure to delight Olive's heart . I notice she really loves unusual imagery and this one reminds me of the kind of poetry Olive would enjoy seeing on her winners' list!
Austin Avatar
June 17, 2015 at 4:35 PM
Oh yeah, those "goblets of life!"How great to come out of the doldrums, to gain new friends. May you have the sweets from now on. Love, daver
Callus Avatar
June 17, 2015 at 2:15 PM
This is why I love your poetry, Nette! The topic is tackled in a mature sense of creativity, without having to refer directly to the title itself. Then you leave it up to us readers to work out the equation. #7 As usual, your poetic language is champagne based:) hugs // paul
Pinet Avatar
June 17, 2015 at 2:01 PM
Beautiful words expressed from the heart and pen of a poet. It tantalizes us with succulent imagery to seduce us with the nectar of poetic creativity. Emile #7
Ongado Avatar
June 17, 2015 at 12:57 PM
Never mind the pained steam; you became better for it!I wish I could write off the cuff like this, radiant poet.All the best!
Lalion Avatar
June 17, 2015 at 12:52 PM
After sweating off a sad affair, you came out even sweeter! How you tie themes is incredible. Fascinating word-scenes top to end!
Andresen Avatar
June 17, 2015 at 12:52 PM
- A new era in life with flowers and champagne ... not beg .... go by :) - A great poem for that title, dear Nette - I wish you good luck in the contest :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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