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Sweats and Sweets

A flamed anguish gathers in a bleak cellar of gray nights pounding on my veins, steaming through a roughened flesh; that in my days I have lost passion’s luster and solitude is the only elixir I rub for now. Yet in reflection, the breaths find out how this darkness can shed a glow upon excretion of angst: the allowing of heart’s root begins to sprout in dewy, fertile mornings. I roam along cafes where flavored kisses once bloomed in July: your turn now to beg for a second chance, oh much too soon. For I have reaped moments of lush joy, of christened peace ,as new blossoms ripened from discoveries and friends to feast; till goblets of life sparkled like oozing champagne while your face turned old from stubbles of time. 6/18/2015 Olive Eloisa Guillermo’s Sweats and Sweets

Copyright © | Year Posted 2015




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Date: 7/6/2015 1:49:00 AM
I love this,congrats Nette...huggs.
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Date: 6/30/2015 6:11:00 PM
Hi Nette. Congrats on your SWEATS AND SWEETS win. LOVE LINDA
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Date: 6/29/2015 11:55:00 PM
Nette, this is a nice sweet win *Hugs* SKAT
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Date: 6/28/2015 7:59:00 PM
Yes in many, many cases we are far better & more ourselves without 'them' Congrad's on Your Win. Light & Love
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Date: 6/28/2015 6:18:00 PM
Great poem, nette congratulations!
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Date: 6/28/2015 6:17:00 PM
Great poem, bette: Congratulations!
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Date: 6/28/2015 3:57:00 PM
So lovely to be back with much deserved congratulations on this winning entry, Nette! A second read confirms my initial comments:) hugs // paul
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Date: 6/28/2015 2:53:00 PM
Many congratulations Nette on your placing in Olive's contest with this gem, hugs, James :) :)
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Date: 6/28/2015 1:18:00 PM
Well up to your usual standard, Nette. Congratulations. Viv x
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Date: 6/28/2015 11:19:00 AM
You haven't "lost passion's luster". It's very much there. Very nice.
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Date: 6/28/2015 10:06:00 AM
Nette, another original version of sweats and sweet, a sweet "revenge" for a love Unanswered then later came to pursue ---begging, really good flow! The last two lines are remarkable.. I feel and see that sweats and sweet are revealed within the lines. Beautiful! CONGRATULATIONS! ~Olive Eloisa ( I wanna see you again soon.. :D!)
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Date: 6/19/2015 5:46:00 PM
Nette, beautifully penned poem full of wondrous lines and words 7 and thanks for visiting my poem, the weathered door
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Date: 6/19/2015 9:53:00 AM
Beautifully visualized and well written in depth and beauty ... Nice flow.. Cheers,, Kattzcradle
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Date: 6/18/2015 3:11:00 PM
Nice write, Nette, a 7 hugs eve
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Date: 6/18/2015 5:23:00 AM
The tantilizing flavors reads like a winner..Way to go, Lady for the contest..Thanks for the visit to my page..Sara
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Date: 6/17/2015 10:41:00 PM
It's great to see that you went to your free verse roots for this one. This is sure to delight Olive's heart . I notice she really loves unusual imagery and this one reminds me of the kind of poetry Olive would enjoy seeing on her winners' list!
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Date: 6/17/2015 4:35:00 PM
Oh yeah, those "goblets of life!"How great to come out of the doldrums, to gain new friends. May you have the sweets from now on. Love, daver
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Date: 6/17/2015 2:15:00 PM
This is why I love your poetry, Nette! The topic is tackled in a mature sense of creativity, without having to refer directly to the title itself. Then you leave it up to us readers to work out the equation. #7 As usual, your poetic language is champagne based:) hugs // paul
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Date: 6/17/2015 2:01:00 PM
Beautiful words expressed from the heart and pen of a poet. It tantalizes us with succulent imagery to seduce us with the nectar of poetic creativity. Emile #7
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Date: 6/17/2015 12:57:00 PM
Never mind the pained steam; you became better for it!I wish I could write off the cuff like this, radiant poet.All the best!
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Date: 6/17/2015 12:52:00 PM
- A new era in life with flowers and champagne ... not beg .... go by :) - A great poem for that title, dear Nette - I wish you good luck in the contest :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 6/17/2015 12:52:00 PM
After sweating off a sad affair, you came out even sweeter! How you tie themes is incredible. Fascinating word-scenes top to end!
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