Lin Lane Poet Ottava rima

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Summer Rain

Tattered Petals: Wounded Heart

Tattered on the garden path are petals
from roses, beheaded by Summer rain
when storm clouds emptied their brimming kettles

In the garden, my tender blooms were slain
Raindrops cut them like needle sharp nettles
I viewed the masacre with grim disdain

Thunder bellowed a victorious roar
Baneful Summer rains continued to pour

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My tears fell like rose petals to the ground
Recalling a rain storm of years ago
When lightning struck my heart with force profound

Summer's rain became a fierce Winter snow
a blizzard of barbed words ran love aground
It died like roses from rain's pelting blow

Tattered were petals; wounded was my heart
From lashing torrents that ripped us apart

          
        August 21, 2017    
 Spring Rain Storm Contest 
sponsoredby Dale G. Cozart

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Charlie Smith September 6, 2017 at 8:10 PM Great work Lin, congratulations... Lin Lane September 7, 2017 at 7:58 AM Thank you, Charlie

Jan Allison September 6, 2017 at 3:58 PM Really loved This poem on first read Lin congratulations on your win:-) hugs Jan xx Lin Lane September 7, 2017 at 7:57 AM Thanks, Jan

John Hamilton September 6, 2017 at 6:50 AM Congrats on your great placement Lin, wonderful metaphor, very powerful! Lin Lane September 7, 2017 at 7:57 AM thanks, John

Mike Gentile September 6, 2017 at 6:36 AM Congrats on your win, Lin! Lin Lane September 7, 2017 at 7:57 AM thanks, Mike

Janice Canerdy September 5, 2017 at 9:34 PM I absolutely love this beautiful, moving poem--my newest favorite. Congrats, Lin! Janice Lin Lane September 7, 2017 at 7:57 AM thank you very much

Kim Rodrigues September 5, 2017 at 8:53 PM So lovely and I love the video too! Congrats, Lin! <3 Kim Lin Lane September 7, 2017 at 7:57 AM thank you

Susan Ashley September 5, 2017 at 6:51 PM Congratulations Lin on your win with your evocative and emotive poem! :) Lin Lane September 7, 2017 at 7:56 AM thank you

Dale Gregory Cozart September 5, 2017 at 4:39 PM Congratulations on your 5th Place win! This was a VERY tough contest to judge. Thank you so much for taking the time to enter. Lin Lane September 7, 2017 at 7:56 AM thank you

Jerry T Curtis August 26, 2017 at 6:14 AM I liked this imagery and any one who has raise flowers know the sadness you speak of. Good luck with the contest--in my book it's a winner Lin Lane August 26, 2017 at 6:36 AM Thanks ever so much for the compliments, Jerry.

Russell Sivey August 22, 2017 at 4:45 AM So perfect this poem is! This is such a fantastic poem that I have fallen in love with it! What a tremendous piece, I really enjoyed reading it this morning my friend, you have expressed yourself so fully with this lovely poem, Great Work!! Lin Lane August 26, 2017 at 6:35 AM Thanks for the many kind words, Russell.

Winged Warrior August 21, 2017 at 8:08 PM Weathered storms of love...I hear you my lady...hopefully the rainbows will leed us to a pot of gold lol...great write as always my friend...best of luck...god bless...^WW^ Lin Lane August 21, 2017 at 8:37 PM Thank you for the nice remarks, WW. They're always appreciated.

Charlie Smith August 21, 2017 at 4:24 PM Great metaphor well used in this form Ms. Lin, my compliments... Lin Lane August 21, 2017 at 8:36 PM My thanks for the compliments, dear Charlie.

Jan Allison August 21, 2017 at 11:25 AM wonderful metaphor Lin, fabulous imagery and I particularly love that final couplet. I struggle with Iambic pentameter (mental block from when i first started writing and posting and my poems being criticised for being simple) But I am trying to improve my writing and still learning all the time:-) hugs jan x Lin Lane August 21, 2017 at 12:02 PM Shame on those who criticize, Jan. You are a talented poet, whether you write about emotional issues, as in your sweet write about autism , or your bathroom humor. Hugs to you.

Heidi Sands August 21, 2017 at 10:08 AM Excellent poem Lin! I like the line blizzard of barbed words ran aground! Good luck in the contest. I think this will do well! Lin Lane August 21, 2017 at 10:24 AM Thank you very sincerely, Heidi.

Tim Smith August 21, 2017 at 9:53 AM Just amazing writing Lin. The metaphor used was perfect. Lin Lane August 21, 2017 at 10:24 AM I'm gratified that you like this one, Tim. Thank you.

Joanna Daniel August 21, 2017 at 9:38 AM Beautiful, you're the winner for me, Lin, who can beat such lovely poetry? And here, I don't even know to write in iambic pentameter:(:( Lin Lane August 21, 2017 at 10:22 AM Thank you very much, Jo. You're compliments always encourage me.