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SUMMER RAIN

Tattered Petals: Wounded Heart

Tattered on the garden path are petals
from roses, beheaded by Summer rain
when storm clouds emptied their brimming kettles

In the garden, my tender blooms were slain
Raindrops cut them like needle sharp nettles
I viewed the masacre with grim disdain

Thunder bellowed a victorious roar
Baneful Summer rains continued to pour

                       ~ ~ ~

My tears fell like rose petals to the ground
Recalling a rain storm of years ago
When lightning struck my heart with force profound

Summer's rain became a fierce Winter snow
a blizzard of barbed words ran love aground
It died like roses from rain's pelting blow

Tattered were petals; wounded was my heart
From lashing torrents that ripped us apart

          
        August 21, 2017    
 Spring Rain Storm Contest 
sponsoredby Dale G. Cozart 

Copyright © | Year Posted 2017




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Date: 9/6/2017 8:10:00 PM
Great work Lin, congratulations...
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Lin Lane
Date: 9/7/2017 7:58:00 AM
Thank you, Charlie
Date: 9/6/2017 3:58:00 PM
Really loved This poem on first read Lin congratulations on your win:-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 9/7/2017 7:57:00 AM
Thanks, Jan
Date: 9/6/2017 6:50:00 AM
Congrats on your great placement Lin, wonderful metaphor, very powerful!
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Lin Lane
Date: 9/7/2017 7:57:00 AM
thanks, John
Date: 9/6/2017 6:36:00 AM
Congrats on your win, Lin!
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Date: 9/7/2017 7:57:00 AM
thanks, Mike
Date: 9/5/2017 9:34:00 PM
I absolutely love this beautiful, moving poem--my newest favorite. Congrats, Lin! Janice
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Lin Lane
Date: 9/7/2017 7:57:00 AM
thank you very much
Date: 9/5/2017 8:53:00 PM
So lovely and I love the video too! Congrats, Lin! <3 Kim
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Lin Lane
Date: 9/7/2017 7:57:00 AM
thank you
Date: 9/5/2017 6:51:00 PM
Congratulations Lin on your win with your evocative and emotive poem! :)
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Lin Lane
Date: 9/7/2017 7:56:00 AM
thank you
Date: 9/5/2017 4:39:00 PM
Congratulations on your 5th Place win! This was a VERY tough contest to judge. Thank you so much for taking the time to enter.
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Date: 9/7/2017 7:56:00 AM
thank you
Date: 8/26/2017 6:14:00 AM
I liked this imagery and any one who has raise flowers know the sadness you speak of. Good luck with the contest--in my book it's a winner
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Lin Lane
Date: 8/26/2017 6:36:00 AM
Thanks ever so much for the compliments, Jerry.
Date: 8/22/2017 4:45:00 AM
So perfect this poem is! This is such a fantastic poem that I have fallen in love with it! What a tremendous piece, I really enjoyed reading it this morning my friend, you have expressed yourself so fully with this lovely poem, Great Work!!
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Lin Lane
Date: 8/26/2017 6:35:00 AM
Thanks for the many kind words, Russell.
Date: 8/21/2017 8:08:00 PM
Weathered storms of love...I hear you my lady...hopefully the rainbows will leed us to a pot of gold lol...great write as always my friend...best of luck...god bless...^WW^
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Date: 8/21/2017 8:37:00 PM
Thank you for the nice remarks, WW. They're always appreciated.
Date: 8/21/2017 4:24:00 PM
Great metaphor well used in this form Ms. Lin, my compliments...
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Date: 8/21/2017 8:36:00 PM
My thanks for the compliments, dear Charlie.
Date: 8/21/2017 11:25:00 AM
wonderful metaphor Lin, fabulous imagery and I particularly love that final couplet. I struggle with Iambic pentameter (mental block from when i first started writing and posting and my poems being criticised for being simple) But I am trying to improve my writing and still learning all the time:-) hugs jan x
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Date: 8/21/2017 12:02:00 PM
Shame on those who criticize, Jan. You are a talented poet, whether you write about emotional issues, as in your sweet write about autism , or your bathroom humor. Hugs to you.
Date: 8/21/2017 10:08:00 AM
Excellent poem Lin! I like the line blizzard of barbed words ran aground! Good luck in the contest. I think this will do well!
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Date: 8/21/2017 10:24:00 AM
Thank you very sincerely, Heidi.
Date: 8/21/2017 10:01:00 AM
Awesome poem, Lin! I know how this feels. I love the metaphor you used. I loved the imagery too.
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Lin Lane
Date: 8/21/2017 10:24:00 AM
Thanks for the kind comments, Julie.
Date: 8/21/2017 9:53:00 AM
Just amazing writing Lin. The metaphor used was perfect.
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Date: 8/21/2017 10:24:00 AM
I'm gratified that you like this one, Tim. Thank you.
Date: 8/21/2017 9:38:00 AM
Beautiful, you're the winner for me, Lin, who can beat such lovely poetry? And here, I don't even know to write in iambic pentameter:(:(
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Date: 8/21/2017 10:22:00 AM
Thank you very much, Jo. You're compliments always encourage me.