Winged Warrior Poet Rhyme

Suicide Prevention

'Inside My Suicide'

There once was a lonely man...on a lonely bridge, near a lonely city...
he did not want fame, our money, or our pity...
All he wanted was a smile, a kind gesture, a simple hello...
all he got was a light breeze, that came with the evening snow...
He wrote a note that sadly read,
“I give mankind 1 hour before my final bed..."
The cars drove on by,
people scurrying with a selfish cry...
In the morning a note was found...
Near a lonely bridge, a lonely city, where the man had drowned.

...the rest of the note said...

Step inside my suicide
A humble servant with love denied 
Waiting for someone to say ‘hello’ to warm the evening snow
On a lonely bridge, near a lonely city with a shallow glow
With no words of hope, I can not cope
As I look down my slippery slope
I shed a lonely tear that has no fear
Warning me that the end is near
My eyes are now shut a restless rut
I am falling for the cords are cut.



This poem is based on a true story...
a smile really does make a difference...
a big white smile :)



Sept.14.2017
Suicide Prevention
Sponsored by: Laura Loo

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Beautiful Scars September 21, 2017 at 4:20 AM wow! this was outstanding, really poignant and made me think. Loved it..thank you and congrats :)

Constance La France September 19, 2017 at 7:57 AM Winged, CONGRATULATIONS on your placement with this wonderful poem

Joanna Daniel September 17, 2017 at 9:09 AM This is so sad, WW, sometimes we don't give the attention that we need to to other's pain, as you say, a smile can really make a difference and a listening ear can work wonders:) beautiful entry for the contest:)

Silent One September 16, 2017 at 10:28 AM I can relate to this.. A very close friend of mine committed suicide in 1996... well written my friend..

John Hamilton September 15, 2017 at 6:30 PM Such a sad reality for those whose hope is gone, well written on a difficult subject should do well in the contest!

Nette Onclaud September 15, 2017 at 4:26 PM profound and deep, WW...such an eloquent write..huggs

Maria Williams September 15, 2017 at 6:21 AM Gosh what can I say that hasn't been said already except'Awesome'. WW, you've done it again, what a deep and powerful write. How sad too when these things can be prevented...Maria

Russell Sivey September 14, 2017 at 9:24 PM WW, Wow! You have written a masterful write, one that is worthy of first place! I can not express enough the sadness of this poem, as I have attempted once in my life...but failed thank goodness as my life was not over, it was only just beginning! I was young and stupid, depressed beyond hope, at least my hope! So this is a difficult subject for me, I should write one for myself! I surely loved reading this amazingly awesome poem here this evening! What a grandiose piece, Very Great Work!!

Andrea Dietrich September 14, 2017 at 8:58 PM W W. I put an O between your initials because this is a WOW entry in the contest of Laura Loo. Maybe I have not read many of them yet, but I think this may be the best of the lot!!

Vijay Pandit September 14, 2017 at 7:55 PM A sad story, well depicted--good luck WW for a win!

Susan Ashley September 14, 2017 at 7:02 PM Wow! Powerfully and fantastically written Winged Warrior. Excellently emotive and evocative. Every line is so eloquently and poetically expressed with the desperate reality of this person's final moments... An amazing write my friend!

Sunlite Wanter September 14, 2017 at 6:43 PM Dark, dark, but deeply well written.

Gary Smith September 14, 2017 at 6:17 PM A deep and profound poem, enough said.