Star Light

Luna makes new overtures to present "starry skies" "Teasing twinkles" in its starry fleet With 'bright light' of a supernova Its flames "brightly blazing" like rays of solar 'Flares in fusion', burning until Light years have no alibi bright colors deep in space where astronomers brag of distant planets in a "galactic graph" But Luna fits the 'bill and still' shines bright 8-31-2022

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Beata Agustin

Date: 9/29/2022 5:51:00 AM

Wow! Thanks for sharing this... exposing excellent content and form, exemplifying well what your contest requires. God bless you.

Sara Kendrick

Date: 9/27/2022 1:12:00 PM

Creative and thoughtful work you have penned in this one. Sara

Anisha Dutta

Date: 9/26/2022 7:16:00 AM

Very nicely composed. It is a tough poem Don’t know how to manage in contest. Have a good day

Anna Marie Kaianah

Date: 9/5/2022 8:10:00 PM

Lovely poem. Blessing to you ~Anna Kaianah

Brandy Nicole

Date: 9/3/2022 6:19:00 PM

"bright colors deep, brightly blazing". Such a breathtaking image to behold. Your entire poem leaves me in complete awe. I love everything about the sky, and your words take me to the stars. :) Hugs, Brandy

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 9/3/2022 3:31:00 PM

Very nice, Joseph. I am trying to figure out exactly how you want this done. Am I to take it that the internal rhyme has to be close together or at least connected with "and" as you did in your poem here? And also the alliteration should all be close together like in your phrase "teasing twinkles" and "brightly blazing?" What if nearly the entire line were alliterative? Would it be ok just to put quotes around the entire line? Soupmail me if I got anything wrong!! What a great contest idea.

Reason A. Poteet

Date: 9/3/2022 4:51:00 AM

Marvelous, Joseph, my favorite line, " Its flames 'brightly blazing' like rays of solar ". I found the venue of your poem analagous to DC where politicians boast of single-handed victories. Well-structured piece with color.

Janice Canerdy

Date: 9/2/2022 7:44:00 AM

Joseph, this is very descriptive and expressive. I don't need to see those other wonders; the moon is enough! Janice