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Spontaneity

Something simple, something sweet. Something magical, my soul’s favorite treat. The calm before the storm, a captivating blur, of feelings no bystander could infer. A magical intensity of silent poetry. Bittersweet bliss manifesting inside of me. Spontaneity whipping through the air. All sense of reality halts in a bright glare. Clouds of the past dissipate, With each ray of light You create. A roller-coaster ride lacking a safety belt, Surpassing any type of affection I’ve ever felt. Like riding a wave, yet a board would serve no purpose. I am constantly floating above the surface. Reality holds no depiction to genuinely describe, The notion of comprehending all that is inside. Foraging for a taste of your love, I encounter a crystal blue abyss. Tiny ripples of Nirvana, too precious to resist. Drifting towards the center, a luminous light draws me in. Here I realize I found my key to explore within. A whirlwind of beauty emerging from every angle. So engulfed in Universal chemistry, I am now comfortably entangled. Smacked with a supercharged rush leaving me numb, frozen with awe. Eventually revived, God was the first thing I saw.

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Date: 3/7/2024 3:46:00 PM
What a wonderful write. Congratulations on your silver medal finish.
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 3/7/2024 5:35:00 PM
thank you, Richard, for your congratulatory words and visit. I was pretty excited about this win! Have a splendid evening, Sara
Date: 3/7/2024 10:05:00 AM
Sara, this is a delightful riot of rhymes and rollicking images that truly flesh out Seeker's line of inquiry! Love "comfortably entangled!" Love your creative word usage as spontaneity bubbles up in every line! Congratulations on your win! Blessings!
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 3/7/2024 5:34:00 PM
wow, thank you, Sam, for your enthusiasm and wonderful compliments. I'm glad you saw that it subtly fit the line of inquiry..that's validating for me. Thanks, too, for your congratulatory words! Wishing you a blessed evening, Sara
Date: 3/7/2024 7:12:00 AM
What a profound write!!From line one to last---mind blowing !!I love "the calm before the storm, a magical intensity of silent poetry". A fave for me.
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 3/7/2024 5:33:00 PM
thank you for your enthusiastic and positive comments. What wonderfully complimentary words. I'm humbly grateful for the fave...means a great deal to me. Have a terrific evening, Sara
Date: 3/7/2024 4:04:00 AM
This is such a powerful poem. I wonder how I missed it ! Poetry connects us to the inner soul and we experience a rare joy which has never been known to us. We become so lighthearted that we are levitated to a higher plane. There one may meet with even God. You have been passing through such a mystical and surreal experience and have so powerfully relayed this experience that we too could partake in it! Lovely poem dear Sara. Congratulations on your podium win.
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 3/7/2024 4:45:00 AM
Your words were a delight to read this morning, dear Valsa. I agree; poetry connects us to the inner soul bringing us a special kind of joyous connection...that higher plane to which you refer. I agree...the process seems mystical at times. You captured so much with your comments and thanks for sharing your thoughts and insights. Thanks, too, for your congratulatory words. Blessings & hugs, Sara
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 3/7/2024 4:45:00 AM
Your words were a delight to read this morning, dear Valsa. I agree; poetry connects us to the inner soul bringing us a special kind of joyous connection...that higher plane to which you refer. I agree...the process seems mystical at times. You captured so much with your comments and thanks for sharing your thoughts and insights. Thanks, too, for your congratulatory words. Blessings & hugs, Sara
Date: 3/6/2024 11:37:00 PM
Back to say congratulations on your trophy win! Yaaaaaaaay!
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 3/7/2024 4:42:00 AM
thank you for being my cheerleader this morning. I'm delighted and grateful with the placement. Wishing you a splendid day, hugs, Sara
Date: 2/25/2024 10:33:00 AM
Sara this is brilliant and surely a winner! I love that you see God at the end. But my favorite part is “ Clouds of the past dissipate, With each ray of light You create. A roller-coaster ride lacking a safety belt, Surpassing any type of affection I’ve ever felt.” Best wishes in the contest!
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 2/25/2024 11:03:00 AM
thank you for your generously kind words, Karen. You made my day! You 'got' my poem, and I'm grateful. Thanks for your well wishes. Hugs and blessings, Sara
Date: 2/25/2024 2:32:00 AM
A really lovely poem dear Sara. You have excelled. Best wishes from Wen
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 2/25/2024 4:10:00 AM
awww, thank you Wendy. I appreciate you and your thoughtful words, hugs Sara
Date: 2/24/2024 7:42:00 PM
Sara, what a powerful poem. Beautifully rhymed and emotion packed.
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 2/25/2024 4:10:00 AM
thanks, Jerry, for those accolades! I appreciate receiving them. Have a great Sunday, Sara
Date: 2/24/2024 3:17:00 PM
Beautiful writing- so captivating, a fav
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 2/24/2024 4:58:00 PM
thank you for your visit and for the fav...humbly grateful! enjoy your weekend, hugs, Sara
Date: 2/24/2024 11:58:00 AM
Totally in awe of your gift of poetry, Sara. This is inspiring to experience as I read. The movement, the imagery, the depth passion of the emotions stirred were luminescent. A spiritual experience in the final line, "Eventually revived, God was the first thing I saw". The perfect ending. Smiles and Blessings my soulmate, Bill
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 2/24/2024 5:00:00 PM
I appreciate your complimentary words about my writing and about this poem in particular. I'm grateful you 'got' the depth and spiritual nature of this poem. I thought you might like the ending...hooray. hugs from the writer in the other room!
Date: 2/24/2024 9:13:00 AM
Dear Sara... Your poem is a testament to the power of poetry to convey the depths of human experience and the mysteries of the soul. It invites readers to embark on a journey of self-discovery and spiritual exploration, resonating with themes of love, transcendence, and the divine presence. The language is lyrical and evocative, leaving a lasting impression on the heart and mind of the reader...
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 2/24/2024 5:01:00 PM
thank you, Silent One. I am grateful for your in depth read and your understanding of the transformative and soulful nature of my poem. I appreciate your complimentary words as well. Hope you're having a wonderful weekend, Sara
Date: 2/24/2024 7:32:00 AM
This is an overwhelming and intense experience of love and the spiritual connection that comes with it. Your word choice is rich and evocative, with vivid imagery and sensory diction that creates a tangible aura for the reader. You use poetic devices such as metaphor "Clouds of the past dissipate", "Spontaneity whipping through the air" and simile "Like riding a wave" to convey the emotion and the ethereal nature of love. The rhythm is flowing and dynamic, echoing this roller-coaster ride.
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 2/24/2024 8:52:00 AM
thank you, dearest Sotto, for such an in depth read and understanding of my poem. I'm grateful you that my poetic devices adding emotion and depth to the spontaneous experience. I don't know where the words for this poem came from...but I'm glad they came :-) Your visit and words are meaningful and much appreciated, your poetess friend in TExas, Sara
Date: 2/24/2024 5:59:00 AM
Talk about a zen moment! The epiphany of epiphanies. Like I said before, you're a contemplater and thinker Sara. Cool poem
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 2/24/2024 8:53:00 AM
thanks, Tom! I appreciate your enthusiasm for my poem and for your complimentary words. Grateful for you--have a splendid day, Sara

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