Sparkin'

The one room school house always was too full.
The windows oversized and chill on winter days.
You sat behind me, I thought you were real cool,
one day you passed a note to me to say...

I Love YOU, you wrote in colored pencil.
I kissed the yellow paper on that line,
then took out a red pen and I stenciled
a perfect heart, PLEASE Be My Valentine.

He blushed from ear to ear and, he scribbled more
a crumpled paper said,  "Please meet me in the park...   
on the bench, by the fence,".. too cute to ignore.
The bell rang, out we went into the dark to spark.

That day so long ago, now we're old and gray
I often think of that kiss, as near me, my man lays.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2012

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Shines Avatar
August 24, 2012 at 1:54 AM
nice write and congrats
Liwayway Avatar
August 22, 2012 at 11:38 PM
wow!!!!!!!! Excellent composition!! I like it... Congratulations Debbie!!
Grisetti Avatar
August 22, 2012 at 12:35 PM
Congratulations on your wonderful sonnet, a well derserved first.
Brown Avatar
August 22, 2012 at 10:31 AM
Congratulations on your contest win today Debbie. Love, Carol
M V Avatar
August 22, 2012 at 9:42 AM
Beautifully crafted poem,Debbie.Congratulations on your first place win!
Macmillan Avatar
August 22, 2012 at 7:24 AM
CONGRATS! Hey, you nailed the nostalgic feel that this 'test required, spark. Great word, great image. Now, the romantic in me likes to think "my man" is the same boy, as many here do, but the heartbroken realist in me sees something else. A lovely little private memory that is only mine of my first love, safey guarded from my current love. Ah, now which, which? ;-) Perhaps its better left unsaid. SO glad that Craig topped this. Hugs, Cyndi... hmmm, I wonder if he thought along my lines?
Gooden Avatar
August 22, 2012 at 6:12 AM
Congratulations, sparklin poem. Enjoyed.
Tams The Golden Girl Avatar
August 22, 2012 at 2:52 AM
So sweet what a great story this is congratulations xx
Pettit Avatar
August 21, 2012 at 11:36 PM
So very good. No wonder this was chosen to be at the top of the heap in the contest. Congratulations!
Dietrich Avatar
August 21, 2012 at 8:56 PM
So sweet, Debs. I had not seen it yet. BIG congrats on your NUMBER ONE win.
May Avatar
August 21, 2012 at 8:51 PM
congrats on your super win
Ryerson Avatar
August 21, 2012 at 6:33 PM
Awww...Deb, this a real gem of nostalgia you wrote here 'went into the dark to spark'...love it!....congratulations - Tim
Brown Avatar
May 31, 2012 at 6:30 AM
I have not been on the soup for almost a week to read and comment. I have enjoyed being able to read your poetry this morning. I wanted to stop by to thank you for the comments you made during my absence from the soup. I appreciate you taking the time to read and comment Debbie. Love, Carol"
Susan Avatar
April 25, 2012 at 8:42 AM
nice story and I like the picture too. congrats on your win!
Song Avatar
April 24, 2012 at 6:04 PM
The grandest of love poems, Debbie...I am forever Wow'ed! Superb entry...WOW! :) Gwendolen
Richards Avatar
April 23, 2012 at 10:43 AM
Ahhh....such a sweet, and tender memory, I love this charming description of a childhood infatuation...(terrific photo to enhance it)...just charming all the way!
Quigley Avatar
April 23, 2012 at 8:14 AM
First love. It never leaves us. We take it out and look at it from time to time, then return it to our memory box, secure within our hearts. Congratulations Debbie
Grisetti Avatar
April 23, 2012 at 8:03 AM
Congratulations on your place in Frank's contest.
Brown Avatar
April 23, 2012 at 6:13 AM
Congratulations on your win in Frank's "A Childhood Memory" contest Debbie. Love, Carol
Brown Avatar
April 19, 2012 at 11:14 AM
Stopping by to say Thank You for your kind comments on my poetry Debbie. It is a pleasure to read your writings. Have a wonderful day. Love, Carol
Salama  Avatar
April 18, 2012 at 6:21 PM
This was beautiful Debbie! I really enjoyed it ...Samia
Poet Avatar
April 12, 2012 at 12:18 AM
A lovely poem.Enjoyed....
Grisetti Avatar
April 9, 2012 at 5:21 PM
I really like this story. Reminds me of a crush I had in third grade. So sweet and innocent.
K. Avatar
April 9, 2012 at 8:52 AM
This is such a sweet poem going back to memory lane, Debbie :D Really enjoyed this one :) and the thought of childhood sweethearts making it past their golden years is sublime. Lucky them :) Thank you very much for your encouraging comments in my poem-- hmm now you are making me want to post a blog when I am relatively lying low here, heehee...maybe soon, thank you for the suggestion and compliments :) Means a lot to me sweetie :D hugs to you!
Heckman Avatar
April 7, 2012 at 1:16 PM
Hi Debbie I still haven't figured out how to give a 'comment' so I'm contacting you here. I made the changes to Makeda. Thank you so much for your help....what a wonderful poem Passing A Love Note! It reminds me of when I was a 'boy chaser' at around 7 or 8 years old. I would line up my dates then go to their parents house for cake. I accumulated quite a few boyfriends. thanks again
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