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Sparkin'

The one room school house always was too full. The windows oversized and chill on winter days. You sat behind me, I thought you were real cool, one day you passed a note to me to say... I Love YOU, you wrote in colored pencil. I kissed the yellow paper on that line, then took out a red pen and I stenciled a perfect heart, PLEASE Be My Valentine. He blushed from ear to ear and, he scribbled more a crumpled paper said, "Please meet me in the park... on the bench, by the fence,".. too cute to ignore. The bell rang, out we went into the dark to spark. That day so long ago, now we're old and gray I often think of that kiss, as near me, my man lays.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2012




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Date: 8/24/2012 1:54:00 AM
nice write and congrats
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Date: 8/22/2012 11:38:00 PM
wow!!!!!!!! Excellent composition!! I like it... Congratulations Debbie!!
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Date: 8/22/2012 12:35:00 PM
Congratulations on your wonderful sonnet, a well derserved first.
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Date: 8/22/2012 10:31:00 AM
Congratulations on your contest win today Debbie. Love, Carol
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Date: 8/22/2012 9:42:00 AM
Beautifully crafted poem,Debbie.Congratulations on your first place win!
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Date: 8/22/2012 7:24:00 AM
CONGRATS! Hey, you nailed the nostalgic feel that this 'test required, spark. Great word, great image. Now, the romantic in me likes to think "my man" is the same boy, as many here do, but the heartbroken realist in me sees something else. A lovely little private memory that is only mine of my first love, safey guarded from my current love. Ah, now which, which? ;-) Perhaps its better left unsaid. SO glad that Craig topped this. Hugs, Cyndi... hmmm, I wonder if he thought along my lines?
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Date: 8/22/2012 6:12:00 AM
Congratulations, sparklin poem. Enjoyed.
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Date: 8/22/2012 2:52:00 AM
So sweet what a great story this is congratulations xx
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Date: 8/21/2012 11:36:00 PM
So very good. No wonder this was chosen to be at the top of the heap in the contest. Congratulations!
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Date: 8/21/2012 8:56:00 PM
So sweet, Debs. I had not seen it yet. BIG congrats on your NUMBER ONE win.
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Date: 8/21/2012 8:51:00 PM
congrats on your super win
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Date: 8/21/2012 6:33:00 PM
Awww...Deb, this a real gem of nostalgia you wrote here 'went into the dark to spark'...love it!....congratulations - Tim
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Date: 5/31/2012 6:30:00 AM
I have not been on the soup for almost a week to read and comment. I have enjoyed being able to read your poetry this morning. I wanted to stop by to thank you for the comments you made during my absence from the soup. I appreciate you taking the time to read and comment Debbie. Love, Carol"
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Date: 4/25/2012 8:42:00 AM
nice story and I like the picture too. congrats on your win!
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Date: 4/24/2012 6:04:00 PM
The grandest of love poems, Debbie...I am forever Wow'ed! Superb entry...WOW! :) Gwendolen
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Date: 4/23/2012 12:25:00 PM
So sweet Debbie.............Brings back so many treasured memories.........Thank you~God bless you!!^Rick
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Date: 4/23/2012 10:43:00 AM
Ahhh....such a sweet, and tender memory, I love this charming description of a childhood infatuation...(terrific photo to enhance it)...just charming all the way!
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Date: 4/23/2012 8:14:00 AM
First love. It never leaves us. We take it out and look at it from time to time, then return it to our memory box, secure within our hearts. Congratulations Debbie
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Date: 4/23/2012 8:03:00 AM
Congratulations on your place in Frank's contest.
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Date: 4/23/2012 6:13:00 AM
Congratulations on your win in Frank's "A Childhood Memory" contest Debbie. Love, Carol
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Date: 4/19/2012 11:14:00 AM
Stopping by to say Thank You for your kind comments on my poetry Debbie. It is a pleasure to read your writings. Have a wonderful day. Love, Carol
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Date: 4/18/2012 6:21:00 PM
This was beautiful Debbie! I really enjoyed it ...Samia
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Date: 4/12/2012 12:18:00 AM
A lovely poem.Enjoyed....
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Date: 4/9/2012 5:21:00 PM
I really like this story. Reminds me of a crush I had in third grade. So sweet and innocent.
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Date: 4/9/2012 8:52:00 AM
This is such a sweet poem going back to memory lane, Debbie :D Really enjoyed this one :) and the thought of childhood sweethearts making it past their golden years is sublime. Lucky them :) Thank you very much for your encouraging comments in my poem-- hmm now you are making me want to post a blog when I am relatively lying low here, heehee...maybe soon, thank you for the suggestion and compliments :) Means a lot to me sweetie :D hugs to you!
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