Lin Lane Poet Monorhyme

Sorrow, Be Gone

Morning didn't paint pastel skies 
Thunder drummed, a sound I despise
Tears rolled down from my blurry eyes
Gloomy sunrise         Gloomy sunrise

Melancholy feelings were grim
Life was sorrowful without him 
Like words sung in funeral hymn
My light's gone dim    My light's gone dim

I wear depression like a shroud
Before God's alter, with head bowed,
Incessantly, I pray aloud
My love avowed       My love avowed

I became wistful and withdrawn
The moment I awoke at dawn
How long will my heartache drag on
Sorrow, be gone    Sorrow, be gone



June 9, 2023
Eight Word Challenge Contest
Sponsored by Emile Pinet
*Monotetra Form

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John Lawless June 29, 2023 at 2:56 PM Rhymes slipped so gently into the angst as to mimic unseen tears. Beautifully done Lin

Sam Kauffman June 29, 2023 at 11:51 AM Lin, a poem of courage in the face of gloomy dawns that refuse to leave us. "Sorrow be gone." Love the form you chose. It reinforces each stanza. Blessings to you for a brighter dawn absent of gloom. Lin Lane June 29, 2023 at 11:56 AM Thanks for liking the Monotetra form, Sam. I don't use it often, but I think it's a good one to use when emphasis is needed. The required words were all gloomy but had to be used. Dawn is my favorite time of day and none of mine are gloomy.

Beata Agustin June 23, 2023 at 3:01 AM Congrats! Thanks for sharing your talent. God bless you. Lin Lane June 29, 2023 at 11:55 AM Thanks a lot, Beata.

Linda Alice Fowler June 22, 2023 at 6:25 AM I love this monorhyme Lin. Great form, great win. Congratulations! :) Lin Lane June 22, 2023 at 5:42 PM Thanks ever so much, Linda.

Emile Pinet June 21, 2023 at 5:09 PM Congratulations Lin, your poem earned a distinguished place in my contest. Very well done, you were successful against a field of talented poets, my friend; Emile. Lin Lane June 22, 2023 at 5:41 PM Thank you so very much, Emile. I’m always honored to have my poetry on your winning list.

Jay Narain June 9, 2023 at 4:56 PM Another nice poem. Where you guys such a poetic muse, I would like to know? Poem reflects the melancholy underwriting. Always good luck from my side. Lin Lane June 10, 2023 at 5:58 AM Thanks for your sweet thoughts, Jay. I appreciate them.

Mark Koplin June 9, 2023 at 10:18 AM Appropriate verses for the words Emile chose for his contest. Good luck, my friend. Lin Lane June 9, 2023 at 11:46 AM Engrossed in depth of melancholy as befits the theme. Thanks, Mark.

Jan Allison June 9, 2023 at 8:10 AM wow Lin you excel at every form you write, you pen such exquisite poetry. I love the impact of the repeated phrase in each verse, dont think I've ever tried a Monotetra form before. Good luck in the contest i predict top 3 for this gem:-) hugs Jan xx Lin Lane June 9, 2023 at 8:16 AM It’s in Emile’s capable hands. Place or not, I always enjoy the form. Try it and thank you, Jan.

Sotto Poet June 9, 2023 at 7:58 AM With masterful skill, you've shared your profound understanding and vivid descriptions of the requested words. Oh, my heart is burdened with such sorrow and darkness, will this tragedy ever dissipate? Sure, will. Good luck with the contest, dear Lin. Lin Lane June 9, 2023 at 8:13 AM Thank you, Lasaad. Such sadness will always dissipate if not fully disappear. Your comments are always so encouraging.