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Sorrow, Be Gone

Morning didn't paint pastel skies Thunder drummed, a sound I despise Tears rolled down from my blurry eyes Gloomy sunrise Gloomy sunrise Melancholy feelings were grim Life was sorrowful without him Like words sung in funeral hymn My light's gone dim My light's gone dim I wear depression like a shroud Before God's alter, with head bowed, Incessantly, I pray aloud My love avowed My love avowed I became wistful and withdrawn The moment I awoke at dawn How long will my heartache drag on Sorrow, be gone Sorrow, be gone June 9, 2023 Eight Word Challenge Contest Sponsored by Emile Pinet *Monotetra Form

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John Lawless

Date: 6/29/2023 2:56:00 PM

Rhymes slipped so gently into the angst as to mimic unseen tears. Beautifully done Lin

Sam Kauffman

Date: 6/29/2023 11:51:00 AM

Lin, a poem of courage in the face of gloomy dawns that refuse to leave us. "Sorrow be gone." Love the form you chose. It reinforces each stanza. Blessings to you for a brighter dawn absent of gloom.

Lin Lane
Date: 6/29/2023 11:56:00 AM

Thanks for liking the Monotetra form, Sam. I don't use it often, but I think it's a good one to use when emphasis is needed. The required words were all gloomy but had to be used. Dawn is my favorite time of day and none of mine are gloomy.

Beata Agustin

Date: 6/23/2023 3:01:00 AM

Congrats! Thanks for sharing your talent. God bless you.

Lin Lane
Date: 6/29/2023 11:55:00 AM

Thanks a lot, Beata.

Linda Alice Fowler

Date: 6/22/2023 6:25:00 AM

I love this monorhyme Lin. Great form, great win. Congratulations! :)

Lin Lane
Date: 6/22/2023 5:42:00 PM

Thanks ever so much, Linda.

Emile Pinet

Date: 6/21/2023 5:09:00 PM

Congratulations Lin, your poem earned a distinguished place in my contest. Very well done, you were successful against a field of talented poets, my friend; Emile.

Lin Lane
Date: 6/22/2023 5:41:00 PM

Thank you so very much, Emile. I’m always honored to have my poetry on your winning list.

Jay Narain

Date: 6/9/2023 4:56:00 PM

Another nice poem. Where you guys such a poetic muse, I would like to know? Poem reflects the melancholy underwriting. Always good luck from my side.

Lin Lane
Date: 6/10/2023 5:58:00 AM

Thanks for your sweet thoughts, Jay. I appreciate them.

Mark Koplin

Date: 6/9/2023 10:18:00 AM

Appropriate verses for the words Emile chose for his contest. Good luck, my friend.

Lin Lane
Date: 6/9/2023 11:46:00 AM

Engrossed in depth of melancholy as befits the theme. Thanks, Mark.

Jan Allison

Date: 6/9/2023 8:10:00 AM

wow Lin you excel at every form you write, you pen such exquisite poetry. I love the impact of the repeated phrase in each verse, dont think I've ever tried a Monotetra form before. Good luck in the contest i predict top 3 for this gem:-) hugs Jan xx

Lin Lane
Date: 6/9/2023 8:16:00 AM

It’s in Emile’s capable hands. Place or not, I always enjoy the form. Try it and thank you, Jan.

Sotto Poet

Date: 6/9/2023 7:58:00 AM

With masterful skill, you've shared your profound understanding and vivid descriptions of the requested words. Oh, my heart is burdened with such sorrow and darkness, will this tragedy ever dissipate? Sure, will. Good luck with the contest, dear Lin.

Lin Lane
Date: 6/9/2023 8:13:00 AM

Thank you, Lasaad. Such sadness will always dissipate if not fully disappear. Your comments are always so encouraging.