Side To Side

Side to side beaten a hundred times at the hands of pride down the line smashed how long will it last on the floor crashed Side to side aimlessly tossed before I fly the innocent left to cry deflated I hide in shame but to you it was just a game

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Joseph May

Date: 10/1/2016 7:38:00 PM

Congrats on your win Tim

John Watt

Date: 10/1/2016 12:30:00 PM

Poignant and powerful. Congrats, Tim ~ John

Francis J Grasso

Date: 10/1/2016 10:41:00 AM

Congrats, Tim!

Lu Loo

Date: 10/1/2016 10:29:00 AM

well written, like Janice said this is very open to interpretation, that's very intriguing Tim, enjoyed this a lot. congratulations on your placement :)-luloo

Janice Canerdy

Date: 10/1/2016 8:54:00 AM

A 7 for this fine open-to-interpretation WINNING poem, Tim. Janice

Arthur Vaso

Date: 9/29/2016 2:19:00 PM

This is a very Olympic sized poem!!!!! :)

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 9/29/2016 12:29:00 PM

Powerful and emotional my friend, Tim! Very well written!

Daniel Turner

Date: 9/29/2016 11:41:00 AM

Very nebulous, Tim. Could be interpreted many ways. I guess I'll commit to someone tossing your love aside. Probably wrong but that's the way I see it.

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 9/29/2016 4:59:00 AM

This is a sad poem Tim..I do believe there alwahs those who will toss us at a side..and those who genuinely care...Those that toss aside..make us appreciate those who truely care more...So hopefully ..someone elses game will turn in our favour.Sad and powerful

Jan Allison

Date: 9/29/2016 2:18:00 AM

Is it to do with baseball Tim - not that I have a clue about sports:-) hugs Jan xx

Eileen Manassian

Date: 9/29/2016 12:49:00 AM

Very sad, Tim. Very well worded, but so sad. There is a quote that comes to mind..."with all the toys in the world, you chose to play with my heart." Never forgot that quote. This is also revealed in the worlds of your poem. These games are not fun to play. Hugs

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 9/28/2016 11:48:00 PM

I agree with Victor. Open to interpretation. It reminded me of a game in which a kid is being tossed side to side, which is what a person has done to you, I imagine! Nice one, tim.