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She Was Gone

He had planned to marry her, to consecrate his vows in holy matrimony But those delicate sentiments had been shattered by his own actions, his awakening came too late, There was nothing left to mediate.. He was in delirium after she departed, She laughed at his obtuse explanation for why he cheated, slamming the door as she left it was over, finished, done! The wealth of blissful emotions that love provided Had been replaced with the indigent emotions of a broken heart His egregious actions left him saddened, Hours later he stumbled out of a bar Having drowned his sorrows in the abyss of his pain. 8-20-19 Eight Word Challenge 9 Contest Sponsor: John Hamilton

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John Hamilton

Date: 9/12/2019 10:42:00 AM

Congrats Joseph on placing in my hard to judge contest. Enjoyed your write

Joseph May
Date: 9/13/2019 9:07:00 AM

Thank you for my placement John..

Lin Lane

Date: 9/12/2019 5:02:00 AM

Such deep sorrow in your lines, Joseph. I appreciated every word. I hope my visit finds you well and happy.

Brenda Chiri

Date: 9/12/2019 1:04:00 AM

Beautiful with a sadness! Congrats on your placement in the contest Joseph a well deserved win!;)

Gry Christensen

Date: 8/30/2019 10:23:00 PM

I can relate to this. It really hits home. But it was good to read, like my own emotions are set free somehow. Beautifully penned.

Joseph May

Date: 8/26/2019 8:27:00 PM

Thanks to all who have or will comment on this poem...I appreciate your support..

Mystic Rose Rose

Date: 8/26/2019 4:53:00 PM

So many marriages come to an end after a disloyal affair, sometimes the heart just can't mend, well done dear poet, winning wishes are being sent your way Joseph, gl, and God bless.

Caycay Jennings

Date: 8/26/2019 1:36:00 AM

Sounds like your main character was clueless about infidelity vs commitment! I see a future full of bars should he fail to learn. I don't know the words demanded for the contest but you told a complete story, painted an entire scene in my mind. Good luck in the contest and all else. Poetry hugs ... CayCay

Ralph Sergi

Date: 8/25/2019 4:57:00 PM

Hi Joseph: I entered this contest as well and especially loved the way you conjured up a sad story in poetry. I'm also a little envious.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/21/2019 2:46:00 PM

I find it very difficult to fathom how to do free verse out of words like this. Anyway, I love the concise way you used the eight words to tell this story.

Nette Onclaud

Date: 8/21/2019 12:51:00 PM

ohh, darkly beautiful, joseph...i hardly noticed the words needed to churn this poem!... huggs

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 8/21/2019 10:01:00 AM

You used your eight words well. Sadly there is no cure for stupid. He got what he deserved.

Heidi Sands

Date: 8/21/2019 7:21:00 AM

You came up with a sad, realistic story with the words for the contest. Well done Joseph :)

Silent One

Date: 8/21/2019 2:12:00 AM

A very different take on the contest, nice use of the words... nothing like a broken heart..

Brandy Nicole

Date: 8/20/2019 10:36:00 PM

Many moments and emotions tangle around your words. The sad truth is, this happens more than it should- in reality. I wish it weren't so. This is so beautifully written and presented. ~ Brandy

Brenda Chiri

Date: 8/20/2019 6:19:00 PM

So sad yet you write it in such beauty!;)

Vijay Pandit

Date: 8/20/2019 3:05:00 PM

Realities of life when things go wrong..you captured the heartbreak of love lost well..many can relate to your poem. Words blended well to form a cohesive story..well done, Joseph..best for a win.

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 8/20/2019 1:35:00 PM

In retrospect or in hindsight we all would have done differently in certain situations in life, but whatever is said or done can never be retracted. Great write Joseph - best of luck. Hugs, Jennifer.