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Separate Lives - the Contest Version

Please, stop, and look me in the eyes. You are all flustered, I realize But I am not willing to hear your cries Until you settle down and look me in the eyes. I know this came to you as a big surprise But the situation here didn’t just vaporize It didn’t drop down upon us from the heavenly skies You knew I wasn’t satisfied; there were no lies. Now that I’m leaving, you won’t hear the whys Instead you would rather just criticize It must be MY fault is what you surmise Because, after all, you are such a good prize. So, please, stop and look me in the eyes I want to be friends after these good-byes. NOTE: My first version of this had too many lines per the contest rules which, at first, I failed to notice. This is an abbreviated version for the contest. The longer (and better, I think) version is still posted.

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Date: 5/29/2010 7:04:00 AM
Wonderful poem Joe, must check out the longer version. Many congratulations on your win in Carolyn's contest >> James
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Date: 5/28/2010 5:22:00 PM
Haaaaaaaaa! The leaving part is always the worst part. Smile! Congratulation, Joe. On your success in Carolyn's contest. Agape, Moses
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Date: 5/28/2010 4:04:00 PM
Great write. Congratulations. Love, Joyce
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Date: 5/28/2010 1:21:00 PM
You have me smiling with this one. Good use of rhyme to share your thoughts. Congratulations on being one of the winners in Carolyn's contest. Keep that pen flowing.
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Date: 5/28/2010 9:50:00 AM
Congrats Joe on your HM in the Monorhyme contest for this wonderful write .. enjoy your honor and victory for a well deserved write my friend.. and have a happy memorial day weekend.. with luv from the "Sweetheart"
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Date: 5/28/2010 9:11:00 AM
I hope you are able to remain friends with this lady, Joe. Congratulations on your success in the contest. Love, Carolyn
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Date: 5/27/2010 8:18:00 AM
It may be revised, and abbreviated....but terrific!! Good luck Joe!!! ~
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Date: 5/26/2010 10:31:00 PM
Absolutely awesome searching for the longer version now.
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