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Secret Love Pantoum - Emotive Write

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I always think of you on the first of May Recalling the New York Mining Disaster What a tragedy it ruined my holiday For whom the bell tolls expressed the broadcaster Recalling the New York Mining Disaster Stayin Alive would have been a miracle For whom the bell tolls expressed the broadcaster Immortality? Guess I am cynical Stayin Alive would have been a miracle My secret love died that day; now I’m alone Immortality? Guess I am cynical If I can’t have you I don’t want to go home My secret love died that day; now I’m alone Such a heartbreaker! Forbidden love so right If I can’t have you I don’t want to go home You should be dancin’ right here with me tonight Such a heartbreaker! Forbidden love so right What a tragedy it ruined my holiday You should be dancin’ right here with me tonight I always think of you on the first of May Beegees Titles used - the Beegees were prolific songwriters writing well over 900 songs for themselves and other artists The first of May New York Mining Disaster Tragedy Holiday For whom the bell tolls Stayin’ alive Immortality If I can’t have you Secret love Alone Heartbreaker Love so right You should be dancin’ Musical Pantoum Contest Sponsored by Silent One 05~30~16

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Anisha Dutta

Date: 6/22/2016 8:28:00 AM

Great write JAN. I am so late to visit. Any way I didn't miss it. Congrats n love

Jan Allison
Date: 6/22/2016 5:44:00 PM

Thanks Anisha - i too spend less and less time here at the moment:-( hugs Jan xx

Bl Devnath

Date: 6/15/2016 2:33:00 PM

Congrats on your beautiful win with this beautiful poem my lovely friend. A 7.Loved always, bl

Jan Allison
Date: 6/16/2016 7:23:00 AM

Thanks BL:-) hugs Jan xx

Lukas Ficklin

Date: 6/15/2016 12:00:00 AM

Great write JAN... Congrats on your win :)

Jan Allison
Date: 6/15/2016 6:54:00 AM

Many thanks Lukas:-) hugs Jan xx

Eve Roper

Date: 6/14/2016 9:42:00 PM

Jan, congratulations on your win !! :-) Hugs

Jan Allison
Date: 6/15/2016 6:54:00 AM

Many thanks Eve:-) hugs Jan xx

Karam Misra

Date: 6/14/2016 8:17:00 PM

Excellent write, Jan. Congrats on your fabulous win. ~karam~

Jan Allison
Date: 6/15/2016 6:54:00 AM

Many thanks Karam:-) hugs Jan xx

Janis Medders Tobechi

Date: 6/14/2016 3:14:00 PM

Congratulations, Jan and very thoughtful and well penned piece....

Jan Allison
Date: 6/15/2016 6:55:00 AM

Thanks Janis:-) hugs Jan xx

Scott Thirtyseven

Date: 5/31/2016 8:45:00 AM

A very clever, very enjoyable write. Best of luck in the contest.

Jan Allison
Date: 5/31/2016 8:58:00 AM

Thanks Scott:-) hugs Jan xx

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 5/31/2016 3:24:00 AM

enjoyed this truly Jan, good luck in the contest:)... ~Luv Linda~

Jan Allison
Date: 5/31/2016 5:56:00 AM

Thanks Linda:-) hugs jan xx

Matthew Anish

Date: 5/30/2016 9:17:00 PM

I liked the early Bee Gees better. Do you remember the one with the line "I just got to get a message to you"? I think you have made a fine use of the Malaysian form. Peace & Love Matthew Anish

Jan Allison
Date: 5/31/2016 5:55:00 AM

I too like the early stuff but Saturday Night fever was a fabulous soundtrack too - one of my fave tracks is called 'Ellan Vannin' its all about our little Island the Isle of Man where they spent their childhood years:-) hugs Jan xx

Judy Ball

Date: 5/30/2016 8:46:00 PM

Very well done. Good luck on the contest. God Bless, JB

Jan Allison
Date: 5/31/2016 5:52:00 AM

Many thanks Judy:-) hugs Jan xx

Mike Hauser

Date: 5/30/2016 7:37:00 PM

Wonderful job!

Jan Allison
Date: 5/30/2016 7:39:00 PM

Thanks Mike it was quite a challenge to write - if it hadn't been a public holiday here on our little Island and i was listening to the motorbike races on the radio and chilling wouldn't have tried this contest:-) hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/30/2016 6:57:00 PM

wow, a job very well done, Dearie!!! I have one too. Hope to post it this week sometime. you chose a great group to represent titles of and a great theme.Soupmail.

Jan Allison
Date: 5/30/2016 7:02:00 PM

Thanks Andrea I await your soupie:-) hugs jan xx

Alexis Y.

Date: 5/30/2016 12:00:00 PM

Hi Jan, I really enjoyed reading your "Pantoum". You made it look easy. I did one called "Beauty Is In The Eye Of The Be Holder"and don't I will be doing another anytime soon. I'm sure you will be in the winner's circle with this write. Best of luck in the contest 7 :-) Alexis

Jan Allison
Date: 5/30/2016 12:49:00 PM

It really is quite a challenge - if I hadn't been on holiday I probably wouldn't have put the time and effort into writing it:-) hugs Jan xx

Eileen Manassian

Date: 5/30/2016 10:50:00 AM

How Deep Is Your Love? One of my favs. This was beautiful, Jan. Very well written...so cleverly done. hugs, dear one. Good luck

Jan Allison
Date: 5/30/2016 7:42:00 PM

They wrote some awesome music Eileen - I love 'immortality' ... am having it played at my funeral lol. The Beegees spent some of their childhood on the Island in fact Robin had a house here up until his death in 2012

Jan Allison
Date: 5/30/2016 12:37:00 PM

Thanks Eileen - there are so so many Bee Gees songs i could have used and several more stanzas could have been penned - may do another one on a happier theme:-) hugs jan xx

Frederic Parker

Date: 5/30/2016 10:01:00 AM

nicely done..it looks like it was a lot of work..good luck in the contest..I believe it will do well

Jan Allison
Date: 5/30/2016 10:12:00 AM

Thanks Frederic it was a real challenge but as it's a bank holiday and I am at home listening to the pre TT races on the radio I thought I would use the time to write the poem:-) hugs jan xx

Sandra Haight

Date: 5/30/2016 9:28:00 AM

Love this, Jan! You used those song titles so well in your well-written, emotional Pantoum! I see a winner here! Hugs, Sandra

Jan Allison
Date: 5/30/2016 9:30:00 AM

Thanks Sandra - I wasn't going to even write for the contest as I thought it was quite a challenge. the Bee gees were such prolific song writers I probably could have done more stanzas but am happy with the poem as it is:-) hugs Jan xx