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Safe Within These Walls

The night is softly speaking to my heart, and calling me to listen to her plea; go out and search the world for Cupid’s dart, and find a lover who will set you free. A gentle breeze is blowing in my mind as scent of jasmine hanging in the air; it’s telling me that I should go and find the lovely lady of my dreams, so fair. And still I sit alone within my room surrounded by these walls built ‘round my soul; protecting lonely spirit in its womb from unknown urges seeking to control. Alas, my demons, won’t you set me free; remove these chains forever binding me. August 23, 2018

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Line Gauthier

Date: 9/8/2018 5:25:00 PM

Lovely, John. It's hard to get out there. Well written. Congrats on your fine win.

John Gondolf
Date: 9/8/2018 5:51:00 PM

Thank you so much, Line, I appreciate it. John

Jesse Rowe

Date: 9/2/2018 4:55:00 PM

A wonderful sonnet that (as someone else alluded to), relatable to many people, I suspect. Masterfully composed. Congrats on your placement.

John Gondolf
Date: 9/2/2018 5:17:00 PM

Thanks, Jesse, I appreciate it. John

Sandra L. Weiss

Date: 9/2/2018 4:33:00 PM

Another win with your lovely sonnet. It is beautifully written. A yearning for love, yet trapped by the heart's fear.

John Gondolf
Date: 9/2/2018 5:04:00 PM

Thank you, Sandy, I appreciate your support and encouragement. John

John Hamilton

Date: 9/2/2018 2:37:00 PM

Back with congrats knew it was a winner!

John Gondolf
Date: 9/2/2018 2:43:00 PM

Thanks, John, I appreciate your support. John

Sandra Haight

Date: 9/2/2018 9:22:00 AM

Such a sad, longing plea for true love you have imaged in your beautiful poem, John. Yours is an excellent Sonnet that incorporates both the syllable count and the feet required, where some did not! Congratulations on your win! Sandra

John Gondolf
Date: 9/2/2018 9:56:00 AM

Thank you, Sandra, I always appreciate your wonderful comments. I always put extra time and efforts into my sonnets to get the meter right, I appreciate you noticing that it was proper. John

Paul Callus

Date: 9/2/2018 7:10:00 AM

These are expressive words inspired by self-induced elusive love, John. Congratulations on your fine win. Regards // paul

John Gondolf
Date: 9/2/2018 8:36:00 AM

Thanks so much, Paul, I appreciate it. John

Viv Wigley

Date: 9/2/2018 1:14:00 AM

....and how this must be played out in hearts across the globe, John. A fine Sonnet, well done. regards, Viv

John Gondolf
Date: 9/2/2018 7:01:00 AM

Thanks, Viv, I appreciate it, john

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 9/1/2018 10:44:00 PM

I love the scent of Jasmine so much I wrote a poem about it John. Your sonnet is sublime! Congratulations on your wonderful win! : )

John Gondolf
Date: 9/1/2018 11:09:00 PM

Thank you, Connie, I appreciate your comments and support. All the best. John

Emile Pinet

Date: 9/1/2018 7:45:00 PM

Congratulations John! Your poem earned a distinguished place in my contest, it was a difficult contest to judge but your beautiful poem succeeded in catching my attention, well done my friend, Emile.

John Gondolf
Date: 9/1/2018 9:37:00 PM

Thanks, Emile, I appreciate it and thanks for hosting the contest. John

CayCay Jennings

Date: 8/25/2018 11:30:00 PM

Excellent yearning wrapped in longing and fear. Based on our 'conversations', I believe this to be fiction and applaud you for empathy-stepping into another's emotions and delivering a poem of haunting sadness. You did it. Poetry hugs ... CayCay

John Gondolf
Date: 8/26/2018 5:42:00 AM

Thank you, CayCay, I appreciate your comments. I was like this when I was in high school but not so much now. Thanks for your visit and support. John

Lindsay Laurie

Date: 8/25/2018 7:16:00 PM

G'day John … a wonderful sonnet written in true sonnet style - congrats John - Lindsay

John Gondolf
Date: 8/25/2018 9:26:00 PM

Howdy, Lindsay, thanks for the comments and visit, I appreciate it. John

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/24/2018 5:13:00 PM

What a great sonnet, John. If it's for the new sonnet contest, I wish you luck. i found one computer at the hotel so I hope to see a few more poets while I can!

John Gondolf
Date: 8/24/2018 6:37:00 PM

Thank you so much, Andrea, hope you are having a good trip. John

Brandy Nicole

Date: 8/23/2018 1:33:00 PM

Opening the heart completely- is different for each individual. It sounds like you were afraid of the fall. Which is perfectly normal. You express this emotion so well. I am happy you took that step, and have found love. :) Brandy

Brandy Nicole
Date: 8/23/2018 2:05:00 PM

Yes, afraid to fall- with the fear of being rejected. All at the same time. You are right and so is John Hamilton. In truth, we all go through this. It is good that your heart did find love. Awe, even if many times. ~ Brandy

John Gondolf
Date: 8/23/2018 1:42:00 PM

Thank you for you thoughts, Brandy. Actually I think John was closer to being correct, I wasn't so much afraid of the fall as I was afraid of rejection. But yes, I got over that and have found love (or something like it) more than once and maybe a bit jaded. John

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 8/23/2018 10:59:00 AM

A great write, Poet John!

John Gondolf
Date: 8/23/2018 11:12:00 AM

Thank you, Kim, your comment brought a smile to my face :) John

John Hamilton

Date: 8/23/2018 10:38:00 AM

Well said John, speaks for many who have been shackled to a fear of rejection, this one should do well in the contest!

John Gondolf
Date: 8/23/2018 10:57:00 AM

Thanks, John, I appreciate yours thoughts and your support. John

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 8/23/2018 9:36:00 AM

Wow! You took a theme that is quite familiar to me (and probably many others), and chose the perfect words to express how hard it is to muster strength to move on after a relationship ends. Well done, John! You also have a knack for avoiding excessive use of articles (like the and a). Your touching sonnet reflects effort and creativity. If for the sonnet contest, I would place this one high. Hugs, Carolyn

John Gondolf
Date: 8/23/2018 10:01:00 AM

Thank you, Carolyn, I'm glad my poem was relevant to you. When I was in high school I was always shy and introverted; this poem expresses some of the feelings I had at that time in my life. I have never placed well in Emile's contests, we will see how this one does. I appreciate your support my friend. John

Heidi Sands

Date: 8/23/2018 8:56:00 AM

Great one John. Hopefully, the soul will be set free :)

John Gondolf
Date: 8/23/2018 9:10:00 AM

Thank you, Heidi. The spirit has been free for a while :)