John Gondolf Poet Sonnet

Safe Within These Walls

The night is softly speaking to my heart,
and calling me to listen to her plea;
go out and search the world for Cupid’s dart,
and find a lover who will set you free.

A gentle breeze is blowing in my mind
as scent of jasmine hanging in the air;
it’s telling me that I should go and find
the lovely lady of my dreams, so fair.

And still I sit alone within my room
surrounded by these walls built ‘round my soul;
protecting lonely spirit in its womb
from unknown urges seeking to control.

Alas, my demons, won’t you set me free;
remove these chains forever binding me.



August 23, 2018

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Line Gauthier September 8, 2018 at 5:25 PM Lovely, John. It's hard to get out there. Well written. Congrats on your fine win. John Gondolf September 8, 2018 at 5:51 PM Thank you so much, Line, I appreciate it. John

Jesse Rowe September 2, 2018 at 4:55 PM A wonderful sonnet that (as someone else alluded to), relatable to many people, I suspect. Masterfully composed. Congrats on your placement. John Gondolf September 2, 2018 at 5:17 PM Thanks, Jesse, I appreciate it. John

John Hamilton September 2, 2018 at 2:37 PM Back with congrats knew it was a winner! John Gondolf September 2, 2018 at 2:43 PM Thanks, John, I appreciate your support. John

Sandra Haight September 2, 2018 at 9:22 AM Such a sad, longing plea for true love you have imaged in your beautiful poem, John. Yours is an excellent Sonnet that incorporates both the syllable count and the feet required, where some did not! Congratulations on your win! Sandra John Gondolf September 2, 2018 at 9:56 AM Thank you, Sandra, I always appreciate your wonderful comments. I always put extra time and efforts into my sonnets to get the meter right, I appreciate you noticing that it was proper. John

Paul Callus September 2, 2018 at 7:10 AM These are expressive words inspired by self-induced elusive love, John. Congratulations on your fine win. Regards // paul John Gondolf September 2, 2018 at 8:36 AM Thanks so much, Paul, I appreciate it. John

Viv Wigley September 2, 2018 at 1:14 AM ....and how this must be played out in hearts across the globe, John. A fine Sonnet, well done. regards, Viv John Gondolf September 2, 2018 at 7:01 AM Thanks, Viv, I appreciate it, john

Connie Marcum Wong September 1, 2018 at 10:44 PM I love the scent of Jasmine so much I wrote a poem about it John. Your sonnet is sublime! Congratulations on your wonderful win! : ) John Gondolf September 1, 2018 at 11:09 PM Thank you, Connie, I appreciate your comments and support. All the best. John

Emile Pinet September 1, 2018 at 7:45 PM Congratulations John! Your poem earned a distinguished place in my contest, it was a difficult contest to judge but your beautiful poem succeeded in catching my attention, well done my friend, Emile. John Gondolf September 1, 2018 at 9:37 PM Thanks, Emile, I appreciate it and thanks for hosting the contest. John

CayCay Godwin August 25, 2018 at 11:30 PM Excellent yearning wrapped in longing and fear. Based on our 'conversations', I believe this to be fiction and applaud you for empathy-stepping into another's emotions and delivering a poem of haunting sadness. You did it. Poetry hugs ... CayCay John Gondolf August 26, 2018 at 5:42 AM Thank you, CayCay, I appreciate your comments. I was like this when I was in high school but not so much now. Thanks for your visit and support. John

Lindsay Laurie August 25, 2018 at 7:16 PM G'day John … a wonderful sonnet written in true sonnet style - congrats John - Lindsay John Gondolf August 25, 2018 at 9:26 PM Howdy, Lindsay, thanks for the comments and visit, I appreciate it. John

Andrea Dietrich August 24, 2018 at 5:13 PM What a great sonnet, John. If it's for the new sonnet contest, I wish you luck. i found one computer at the hotel so I hope to see a few more poets while I can! John Gondolf August 24, 2018 at 6:37 PM Thank you so much, Andrea, hope you are having a good trip. John

Brandy Nicole August 23, 2018 at 1:33 PM Opening the heart completely- is different for each individual. It sounds like you were afraid of the fall. Which is perfectly normal. You express this emotion so well. I am happy you took that step, and have found love. :) Brandy Brandy Nicole August 23, 2018 at 2:05 PM Yes, afraid to fall- with the fear of being rejected. All at the same time. You are right and so is John Hamilton. In truth, we all go through this. It is good that your heart did find love. Awe, even if many times. ~ Brandy John Gondolf August 23, 2018 at 1:42 PM Thank you for you thoughts, Brandy. Actually I think John was closer to being correct, I wasn't so much afraid of the fall as I was afraid of rejection. But yes, I got over that and have found love (or something like it) more than once and maybe a bit jaded. John

Kim Rodrigues August 23, 2018 at 10:59 AM A great write, Poet John! John Gondolf August 23, 2018 at 11:12 AM Thank you, Kim, your comment brought a smile to my face :) John

John Hamilton August 23, 2018 at 10:38 AM Well said John, speaks for many who have been shackled to a fear of rejection, this one should do well in the contest! John Gondolf August 23, 2018 at 10:57 AM Thanks, John, I appreciate yours thoughts and your support. John

Carolyn Devonshire August 23, 2018 at 9:36 AM Wow! You took a theme that is quite familiar to me (and probably many others), and chose the perfect words to express how hard it is to muster strength to move on after a relationship ends. Well done, John! You also have a knack for avoiding excessive use of articles (like the and a). Your touching sonnet reflects effort and creativity. If for the sonnet contest, I would place this one high. Hugs, Carolyn John Gondolf August 23, 2018 at 10:01 AM Thank you, Carolyn, I'm glad my poem was relevant to you. When I was in high school I was always shy and introverted; this poem expresses some of the feelings I had at that time in my life. I have never placed well in Emile's contests, we will see how this one does. I appreciate your support my friend. John

Heidi Sands August 23, 2018 at 8:56 AM Great one John. Hopefully, the soul will be set free :) John Gondolf August 23, 2018 at 9:10 AM Thank you, Heidi. The spirit has been free for a while :)