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Remnants of Time

Black roses sprawl, to droop, then fade raking tendrils of her attic’s shades; a brief display which glints inked nights only for time’s sake, buds do parade. How fleeting the luster of stems’ arms, between weeping dusk and chilled sun twigs crack like love's farewell --sad moon, a wish-- the fragrance of bliss gone. She digs remnants; gazing afar perhaps to cuddle ringlets of star, that hides dawn’s lamp from memories instead her eyes reflect more scars. Though pain mocks unbecoming heart a young bough nestles on ground's arc; granting reprieve in place of tears to kindle sparks for dance to start. Open Poetry Contest Sponsor: Charlotte Puddifoot 7/12/2015

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Date: 8/1/2015 12:15:00 PM
Beautiful, Nette! Appreciate your imagery and expression!
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Date: 7/22/2015 2:50:00 AM
Exquisite poetry nette! Congrats on ur awesome win dear friend!
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Date: 7/20/2015 3:01:00 PM
I knew this would be at the top Nette. Big congrats on your win!
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Date: 7/20/2015 1:42:00 PM
Congrats Nette! hugs :-)
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Date: 7/20/2015 8:03:00 AM
Nette, do love some of the lines here and some phrases!!! splendid!! mabuhay!~Olive ELoisa =') ( still am here)
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Date: 7/20/2015 8:04:00 AM
ringlets of stars is my fave phrase!!!
Date: 7/20/2015 5:26:00 AM
WOW, NETTE.....a purely metaphoric delight...sweet sadness tinged with renewal. Wonderfully word painting.
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Date: 7/20/2015 3:39:00 AM
Lovely and creative; delightful imagery and several captivating phrases dressed in poetic attire! #7 Congratulations:) hugs // paul
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Date: 7/20/2015 3:35:00 AM
As Carly Simon famously sang: "Nobody does it better"...I gotta study this form which you have put to such elegant use my friend! Congratulation are DEFINITELY in order...
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Date: 7/19/2015 8:20:00 PM
You do this so well, Nette, I'm in awe. Congratulations on this lovely verse . Viv x
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Date: 7/19/2015 8:09:00 PM
Congratulations on your win 7 Hugs Eve
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Date: 7/19/2015 6:10:00 PM
Nette, congratulations in Charlotte Puddifootst... SKAT
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Date: 7/19/2015 6:03:00 PM
So beautiful sad, and only you could describe the scene in your unique, exquisite style. Congrats to you, Nette!
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Date: 7/19/2015 2:50:00 PM
as always, beautiful language and imagery from you, nette, liked 'ringlets of star' particularly - congrats on your win in my contest :)
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Date: 7/19/2015 2:37:00 PM
Such a touching poem Nette so beautifully penned many congrats on your win:-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 7/12/2015 11:09:00 PM
Nette this is absolutely stunning! A7
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Date: 7/12/2015 1:30:00 PM
Massive, intense! Only one who is fully in touch with her feelings can write this.
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Date: 7/12/2015 1:08:00 PM
I flipping loved this !Granting reprieve instead of tears! Brilliant poetry, held me throughout!
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Date: 7/12/2015 9:22:00 AM
Astonishingly eloquent.
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Date: 7/12/2015 3:45:00 AM
Gosh Nette. Such grace in every line. Even where it suggests heartbreak...I agree with Frederic. That line is a powerful metaphor. Gl with the contest. huggs
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Date: 7/11/2015 8:54:00 PM
twigs crack like love's farewell is such a powerfull line..I actually heard it..a beautiful poem my friend but that line I wish I had written..good luck in the contest
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Date: 7/11/2015 7:29:00 PM
That sounds more like Cloud 10.....wow...
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Date: 7/11/2015 6:07:00 PM
Touching poem as it ends with a spark of renewal. And the flow of your words leave me wanting more!
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Date: 7/11/2015 5:38:00 PM
Oh my Nette. I see another winner here. Your creative mind has no bounds! I love the intensive imagery your poem expresses! 7
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