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Presence Beyond My Mind

A Sistine Chapel lies outside our house, a cellar used by former runaways. Recalling stories from our grandpa Joe, remember how he always kept a horse to transport couples found in hiding there. The ceiling shelves deflect a spotlight's eye from secret spots where common folk once hid. Consider how he felt, my grandpa Joe, his future jeopardized within our town. Even with the best of good intentions, slave owners' law - greater than freedom's law. My grandpa kept the ceiling stocked with food for needy refugees to take their fill in building strength to last their journey through. Sometimes when I am zapped and cannot cope I am compelled to grab a light and go descending on this niche of grace and peace. A ceiling with more beauty is not found than grandpa's Sistine Chapel underground. written 03-01-2018 contest: Eight Word Challenge - 24 lines maximum by Robert Haigh

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Date: 3/15/2018 9:19:00 PM
Wonderful imagery in your poem, Reason , and written very well using the required words. Congratulations on your win! Hugs ~`*
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Date: 3/15/2018 7:20:00 PM
A very beautiful and touching poem, Reason. Congratulations on your fine placement in the contest. Sandra
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Date: 3/15/2018 11:52:00 AM
Reason, this piece is thrilling, moving, and SO well-written!. CONGRATS! Janice
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Date: 3/14/2018 11:39:00 PM
Sincere congratulations on your well-deserved win, RAP - blessings, and keep up the great work, friend! :-)
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Date: 3/14/2018 9:00:00 PM
This is great, and what a story. Congrats, Reason. Regards, Viv
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Date: 3/14/2018 4:13:00 PM
Very touching. Love your poem, Reason. Congrats.
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Reason A. Poteet
Date: 3/14/2018 8:37:00 PM
thanks, Line, for taking the time to leave a comment and rewarding words.
Date: 3/14/2018 1:43:00 PM
Congrats on your win, Reason :)
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Reason A. Poteet
Date: 3/14/2018 2:03:00 PM
I welcome your kind words, Laura and wish you well.
Date: 3/2/2018 6:59:00 AM
Enjoyable blank verse and a nice story ... enjoyed reading ...
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Reason A. Poteet
Date: 3/2/2018 9:22:00 AM
Glad you enjoyed it, Probir. TYVM
Date: 3/2/2018 6:03:00 AM
Not only the story behind your poem is awesome..the way you wrote this poem is extraordinary..great skills you have RAP! This poem ranks at the top of winners list in my mind.
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Reason A. Poteet
Date: 3/2/2018 9:23:00 AM
Appreciate the read and reply, Vijay. You are too kind, but I love it.
Date: 3/1/2018 9:59:00 PM
This is a beautiful story! Lovely blank verse.. so vivid and unique. Hope this does very well in the contest :)
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Reason A. Poteet
Date: 3/2/2018 9:36:00 AM
Glad you read it and left such a nice reply. I enjoyed the write and while a placement would be welcomed, I’m always happy when someone comments before the contest is judged.
Date: 3/1/2018 9:40:00 PM
wow, this is beautiful scenery and a great story of a time gone by (hopefully) you must be so proud of ur grandfather :)
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Reason A. Poteet
Date: 3/2/2018 9:38:00 AM
TY, Lewis, while it was not about my own grandfather, I would be proud to claim any one of many who helped slaves gain their freedom after the war. Thanks so much for commenting

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