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perpetual prompt word chosen 01/22/24
Sponsored by: Constance La France

loss may one day resurrect its sum ~ good news for most too bad for some! (by poet) I so much want to give the game away about life about death and how I found my way See I’m a shaman a conduit an entity of unknown power Able to see through time, and rearrange in rhyme I’m a god without a heaven a demon sans a hell, You know me as David I speak in code as well But to give the game away when I write, would not be right, although I do have this right I’m much more comfortable giving hints It got boring, and tantalising watching you die, especially before you were born, ergo no real fun, So I don’t anymore This is what omnipotence brings knowing the song before it sings, so I mix the words, and let the music be! Lyrics are all important to me A hint about harmony I’m sorry to disappoint it’s not for everyone, that’s not to say but is my point To see an illustration switch on your tv And then I hear you pray Why not peace, equality, and love ever after You already know that answer, (free will) humanity’s greatest strength, and greatest ill killing for the thrill only you fight for me? I’m on a beach watching neutron stars about to blow “say cheese” (snap) It’s quite a sight even for perpetual eyes Oh what joys! I am benevolent I am malevolent go ahead take your pick In the end not giving the game away, is always my ultimate trick

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Constance La France

Date: 2/14/2024 6:09:00 AM

David, excellent writing and congratulations on your win in my contest, love your quote too, blessings, Constance

David Kavanagh
Date: 2/14/2024 6:21:00 AM

Thank you Constance, I’m delighted with your great placement, glad you enjoyed, cheers David

I Am Anaya

Date: 1/30/2024 4:41:00 PM

Congratulations on your top win! Way to go there champ.

David Kavanagh
Date: 2/14/2024 6:20:00 AM

Heya Anaya, thank you so much! Cheers David

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 1/24/2024 8:31:00 AM

Life is a mystery. I only see that we are living here with so many choices. Choose wisely.

David Kavanagh
Date: 1/24/2024 8:56:00 AM

Free will Victor, sometimes only comes with two choices, depending of course, what part of the world one is living in, cheers David

Sand Blown

Date: 1/23/2024 3:21:00 PM

...you write very interestingly....so, here goes......life be to learn by....with a 'full-loss-of-fees' harmony....it freely echoes of the ups - downs we are.....and, see our present consist-tense as from our own consist-tent.....stan

David Kavanagh
Date: 1/23/2024 3:38:00 PM

Thanks Stan I’ll take that as high praise from the soups wordsmith, your full-loss-of-fees, shall be reimbursed in total harm-money for all damages incurred! Cheers David

Sotto Poet

Date: 1/23/2024 7:04:00 AM

A great poem about the enigmatic nature of a shaman with omnipotent powers, and the ambiguity of their benevolence or malevolence, David. Profound musings on life, death, the human condition, and their extraordinary abilities. Good luck with the contest. Language: The word choice in the poem is evocative and mysterious, with the use of enigmatic phrases such as "I found my way," "a conduit," "entity of unknown power,"

David Kavanagh
Date: 1/23/2024 9:43:00 AM

Great to hear from you Lasaad, as always you never shirk away from opining on my more controversial and complex posts on the human condition, we do have extraordinary abilities, both good and bad in equal measure, A lot of ambivalence here as I supersede into the role of that unknown perpetual entity, cheers David

Lin Lane

Date: 1/23/2024 6:48:00 AM

Leading off with a rhyming Monoku... that's so you. Whether you're a god without a heaven or a demon without a hell, you spiral around in this poem as if your paths (shadowed or not) are always of your choosing. You didn't choose the Goliath role, but being somewhat ambiguous makes your character flexible to wear a white hat or a black one. Having perpetual eyes allows you the freedom to be mystical. Keep your secrets under wraps. Divulge them and you lose your powers.

David Kavanagh
Date: 1/23/2024 9:26:00 AM

Heya Lin! I think we talked before about humanity not knowing for sure their ultimate fate, for if we did, we would know the mind of a god, or indeed devil, so I came at it by using ambivalence towards the perpetual theme, of course I have hunches and theories on (the meaning of life) and omnipotence, I definitely choose my own path, but am every bit at the mercy of whatever tomorrow brings, thanks so much, for such an enjoyable comment, cheers David

Di11y Da11y

Date: 1/23/2024 12:14:00 AM

How am I missing your poems?! Anyway located this and love the boldness of the inclusion of your name :) oh dear I see you have been the one leaving secret paths in shadows that my feet don't fit? And all those portals that spiralled into view, just almost? Love the final lines. Just realised David rhymes with Sid - the codes are leaping off the page haha... Erm David, kept a lid (on it)

David Kavanagh
Date: 1/23/2024 1:55:00 AM

I believe all those secret paths and portals (hints) really exist Dilly, and you have a gift for decoding them into your poems, I had to use my own name here, probably as a biblical reference to the guy, David and Sid do loosely rhyme, you’re already finding codes, they are out there somewhere, but I’m not saying where lol! Cheers David

I Am Anaya

Date: 1/22/2024 7:34:00 PM

Winner takes all, you're the winner, pleased to meet you, David. Although I think I know you well, its the game I'm ignorant to. Why do I feel sympathy, the gods are ice cold perhaps I feel guilty, and bold. You brought out all these emotions inside. Tricky good, is this a contest?

David Kavanagh
Date: 1/23/2024 12:11:00 PM

ABBA have got to be up there with the all time greats, even the stones and Metallica would give them the highest of praise, perhaps we could ask Admin to extend our lifetime memberships into perpetual ones, hey you got me thinking maybe we already did in a previous cycle through life? them swines I’ll be straight onto them! Lol!

I Am Anaya
Date: 1/23/2024 10:50:00 AM

Haha, ABBA as well. I didn't know which way to go, either way I'd be wrong, one thing I do know is that it's not a game for me, 'cause I know too well that what we say in any way shape or form, we are at one time or another, hence my motto: "If the shoe fits!" Dilly gets it! Yes perpetual -forever, like a Lifetime Membership, even that can be disrupted at any time, by saying wrong things. Lol. I didn't notice the quote, perfect. Hugs ~Anaya

David Kavanagh
Date: 1/23/2024 1:38:00 AM

Heya Anaya, I see your reference to (sympathy for the devil), were Jagger reveals who he is, and gives the game away, (I don’t) but do leave many hints, perhaps I’m just a regular nobody, saying how he may see the world through a perpetual entity’s eyes, thanks so much for reading and commenting on this (tricky) post, it’s for Constance’s contest, cheers David