Pain

when you smile at me I watch the curve of your lips as they part to speak- then I heed the sad whispers of a torn, grief stricken heart

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Sara Kendrick

Date: 10/19/2024 7:54:00 AM

Ahhhh!! Grief so deeply felt from these lines. It is hard to watch another person suffer in deep grief and there is really nothing that can be done to help them through other than to listen. It takes time and more time. Thanks for sharing this one with us. Sara K

Bill Baker

Date: 3/28/2022 4:46:00 PM

Intriguing Tanka, Valsa. You gave me something to think about with the ending. Hugs, Bill

Gershon Wolf

Date: 3/26/2022 10:09:00 PM

This is touchingly presented, Valsa. A guide to the tension between what is revealed and that which is veiled. A FAVE for me. Thank you, Gershon

Tom Cunningham

Date: 3/26/2022 8:24:00 AM

A very emotional write Valsa, you write emotional verse well. Tom

Sotto Poet

Date: 3/26/2022 8:17:00 AM

Valsa, you've successfully mixed two different feelings. It's the twist in your poem's final two lines that I find most interesting.

Vijay Pandit

Date: 3/26/2022 5:37:00 AM

I like the turn in your poem--in the ending two lines, Valsa. Two emotions well blended.