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I originally wrote this as a Quatorzain, first as a new form for me, but it did not fit the 12 line requirement for the contest, so I rewrote it combining the last two stanzas as a Free Verse.

(Quatorzain) Outside my window The earth shakes. Loud roars of thunder crash as the lightening blinds my vision; Nordic Gods warring in the darkened sky outside my window. Outside my window The rain falls. Raindrops form rivulets on the glass in the torment that rages; Ever changing images through slow movie frames outside my window. Outside my window The wind blows. Limbs of trees create ghostly dances to the melody of the storm; Star crossed lovers reach with leafy hands for longing embrace outside my window. Outside my window The Flowers bloom. Sweet Night Blooming Jasmine shivers in the cool damp air; Beauty, fragility, strength outside my window. People in the distance meandering aimlessly through the night. Life goes on outside my window. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ (Free Verse for Contest) Outside my window The earth shakes. Loud roars of thunder crash as the lightening blinds my vision; Nordic Gods warring in the darkened sky outside my window. Outside my window The rain falls. Raindrops form rivulets on the glass in the torment that rages; Ever changing images through slow movie frames outside my window. Outside my window The wind blows. Limbs of trees create ghostly dances to the melody of the storm; Star crossed lovers reach with leafy hands for longing embrace outside my window. Outside my window The Flowers bloom. Sweet Night Blooming Jasmine shivers in the cool damp air as people hurry by; Beauty, fragility, strength. Life goes on outside my window. 09/27/15 James Inman OUTSIDE MY WINDOW : NEW POETS ONLY CONTEST-1st Place Bev Smith 10/8/2015

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Date: 10/10/2015 12:15:00 PM
Well done congrats x wendy well written x
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James Inman
Date: 10/10/2015 12:59:00 PM
Thank you Wendy.
Date: 10/2/2015 5:13:00 AM
Proud to share top spot with this tour-de-force, well done, James ;)
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James Inman
Date: 10/2/2015 8:27:00 AM
Thanks Bill, the feeling is mutual. Your write was unique, creative and wonderfully written.
Date: 9/29/2015 9:38:00 AM
James, the subtle line breaks in each opening line creates a "Haiku-like" nature to each stanza. Well deserved win.
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James Inman
Date: 9/29/2015 1:09:00 PM
John, I love the insights I get on some of my poems, as I'm sure you do as well. Great observation! Something I had not noticed. Thank you for the comment.
Date: 9/29/2015 5:04:00 AM
Well done congrats xxx Wendy
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James Inman
Date: 9/29/2015 1:04:00 PM
Thank you so much, Wendy.
Date: 9/29/2015 1:59:00 AM
The flowers bloom for us to pick, turn it into a bouquet and gift it to you on your win! Congrats James!
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James Inman
Date: 9/29/2015 1:03:00 PM
Balveen, Balveen, I love flowers. Thank you!
Date: 9/28/2015 11:39:00 PM
Very wonderful take on the theme James! Congrats on a fantastic win!
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James Inman
Date: 9/29/2015 12:50:00 PM
Thanks Dr. Sharma. Fun contest.
Date: 9/28/2015 10:59:00 PM
James, Congrats in Bev Smith's, contest. Hugs **SKAT**
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James Inman
Date: 9/29/2015 12:51:00 PM
Thank you SKAT!
Date: 9/28/2015 10:07:00 PM
James congratulations on your win.
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James Inman
Date: 9/29/2015 12:50:00 PM
Thanks Michael.
Date: 9/28/2015 8:23:00 PM
This write came alive with your creative images... Thank you for entering my contest James ! Bev
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James Inman
Date: 9/28/2015 8:47:00 PM
Thanks Bev, really enjoyed it. Great subject for a contest.
Date: 9/28/2015 6:34:00 PM
Wow, so much imagery. Love it. Congrats on your win, James. :) Janece
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James Inman
Date: 9/28/2015 8:51:00 PM
Thank you so much Janece. It was a fun write.
Date: 9/28/2015 4:07:00 PM
beautiful imagery James congrats on your win:-) hugs jan xx
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James Inman
Date: 9/28/2015 8:52:00 PM
Thanks Jan. As always, love your visits.
Date: 9/27/2015 10:15:00 AM
Very nice James. Like all the images outside your window.
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James Inman
Date: 9/27/2015 11:17:00 AM
Thanks you Michael.