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Outside My Window

Lover # 1 outside my window willow branches stroke the wind fish waits for the fly Lover # 2 voice unheard by wind sea erases our sand prints nothing but old bones moon and sun shine forever ancient bonsai still growing For Deb's contest

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Robin Davis

Date: 4/26/2014 12:45:00 PM

barbara This is a creative and uniquely descriptive write. Thank you for the nice comment on my Colors poem.

Hgarvey Daniel Esquire

Date: 3/16/2011 4:04:00 PM

Dear Barbara, Congratulations On YOUR Well Deserved 1st Place win Superb Pen LOVE YOU ALWAYS...HG

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 3/14/2011 5:50:00 AM

Congratulations on your win Barbara in Debbie Guzzi's contest "Love Talks". Love, Carol

Wilma Neels

Date: 3/14/2011 4:54:00 AM

Hey BG, congratulations on your win in Deb's contest with this gem :)

Tahera Mannan

Date: 3/13/2011 8:52:00 PM

Whoa BG a great job with this. No wonder you made the top Notch. Warm congrats.

Robert Pettit

Date: 3/13/2011 5:42:00 PM

Congratulations on winning in Deb's contest. Barbara, I can see why you won the top prize in Deb's contest.

John Freeman

Date: 3/13/2011 12:53:00 PM

Beautiful job Barbara, wonderful to see you at the top with this worthy honor in first place. Agaape, Moses

Gwendolen Song

Date: 3/13/2011 12:20:00 PM

Gorgeous write. Congrats on your 1st place! Gwendolen Rix

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 3/13/2011 11:38:00 AM

Congratulations on the first place win in the contest of Debbie, Barbara

Jack Horne

Date: 3/13/2011 9:35:00 AM

Many congratulations on your win : ) Jack

Robert A. Dufresne

Date: 3/13/2011 5:35:00 AM

very well done Barbara and certainly deserving of first place. Congratulations to you. A very fine poem.

Deb Wilson

Date: 3/13/2011 5:21:00 AM

Just beautiful and so descriptive..congrats on your 1st place win!love,Deb

Jan Camille Tongco

Date: 3/12/2011 8:32:00 PM

this poem is really fantastic! I fell in love with it the moment i read it. congratulations on your win, Barbara, you truly deserve it -- camille ^_^

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 3/12/2011 7:21:00 PM

Congrats BG on your first place win in Love Talk with another awesome dialogue between lovers.. enjoy with luv..

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 3/12/2011 4:05:00 PM

Yo, LNC, hope you're dancing on cloud nine with your first-place win! I'll be up there waiting for you. Big congratulations! Awesome work. Love, Carolyn

Joyce Johnson

Date: 3/12/2011 3:53:00 PM

Congratulations on your big no. 1. Beautifully composed. Love, Joyce

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/12/2011 3:46:00 PM

YIPPPEEEE, Barbara, I sure was happy to see you place high just now! congratulations.

Gert W. Knop

Date: 3/12/2011 8:04:00 AM

Great Haiku and Tanka, Barbara! Enjoyed the imagery. And thank you for commenting "First Spring Flowers". Due to my handicapped right arm I couldn't be as busy on Soup as I wanted. Best of luck in Debbie's contest!...Have a great Sunday and week ahead!....All the best, Gert

Carol Fillmore

Date: 3/9/2011 12:18:00 PM

This is lovely Barb! Good luck in the contest:) Thanks for your comment on "Chickadee Symphony", and glad you enjoyed this:) Carol

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/7/2011 6:48:00 AM

wow, you did splendidly with this one. All I could think to do was use personification and I fear my meaning will be going over everyone's head. But yours is very clear. I predict a great win! Luv, Andrea