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Our Last Sunset

The sky tonight spills a bouquet of rose petal lights - a marriage of confetti clouds, a mirage of rosy haze rays. The sands are flushed with evening's delicate blush, a gentle watercolour wash on the shingle-shushed shore. The dying sun bleeds crimson rivulets of light - vermilion, scarlet, ruby, garnet - blood-tinged crystals glimmering on the tide. Shimmering moments when time and togetherness entwine, when the bright tin-silver light of day ebbs quietly away and the sea shivers glittering prisms of apricot light. Let us hold the moment and linger on the blush-flushed cusp of night, where tranquillity and twilight combine, warmed by the low love-glow of the spruce-scented sky. Let the susurrous whisper of waves answer difficult questions - those that we fear to ask. Watch reality drift far out to sea; the brittle dry driftwood of halting words and hard choices floating out on roseate ripples of the tide. Shall we sit together on the salt-sparkling shore of a new tomorrow? Or will the sun go down around us, our love diminishing in its dwindling light?

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Date: 9/26/2023 11:14:00 AM
Belated Congratulations! The dying sun bleeds crimson rivulets of light" - Charlotte your descriptions leave me in awe, true artwork in words. The title is crushing, made me sigh. While using in the end, the sunset for both its beauty and an ending love. My interpre.? Fabulous!
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Date: 7/30/2023 3:27:00 PM
Intense colours of grief intertwine with the beauty of a sunset. It's beautiful in it's sadness Charlotte. I love everything you write!
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Date: 7/27/2023 10:10:00 AM
I like this. Your attention to details, especially in regard to nature, really helps set the mood. You've got the pretty colors and pleasant odors, but the deep reds and blood tinged crystals inform us that there are mixed emotions here. Will their love survive another day or die right there on the beach? We may never know
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Charlotte Puddifoot
Date: 7/28/2023 1:50:00 AM
then you know exactly what i'm writing about, it's never easy is it..glad you like the poem anyway
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Tom Woody
Date: 7/27/2023 3:43:00 PM
This one is a fave. I've been there. Twice. Sigh
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Tom Woody
Date: 7/27/2023 3:06:00 PM
After reading your follow up comment on my poem I understand
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Charlotte Puddifoot
Date: 7/27/2023 2:34:00 PM
the sun went down around us..
Date: 6/26/2023 2:34:00 AM
I like the ending in this. You know at some point it's all coming to an end, but you still go through the motions waiting for the inevitable, which is never quick.
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Date: 6/24/2023 11:05:00 PM
I once was lost but now i'm found. hold not to me the picture I allowed the love I had is still true.keep this and I,ll know it;s true
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Date: 6/24/2023 10:37:00 PM
I am Lord Byron looking on the work of Frankenstine. seeing the work of what movies would shine.
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John Loving Iii
Date: 6/24/2023 10:41:00 PM
If not forgivness then silence would still awe the works I just saw. But dry was I was I when then I left I do not blame you having now once then left.
Date: 6/20/2023 8:53:00 PM
Your sunset overflows like a rainbow tipped over dripping colors into the sunset. A perfect metaphor for a relationship that maybe is experiencing its twilight. I always read your poems with a sense of awe and wonder at their poetic majesty. Congratulations on your win! Blessings and all the best.
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Date: 6/19/2023 1:41:00 PM
You're amazing Charlotte (my granddaughter's name BTW)--you've absolutely nailed this one (you always do). I will speak to specifics in a blog--love these thoughts!
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Date: 6/19/2023 11:36:00 AM
Beauty that flows effortlessly and smoothly from your quill. I take inspiration from the artistic formation of your words. Congratulation on your fantastic win Charlotte :-)
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Date: 6/19/2023 7:44:00 AM
confetti clouds, a mirage of rosy haze rays… the shingle-shushed shore… the spruce-scented sky… roseate ripples of the tide…Such lovely imagery! Congratulations, Charlotte, on your podium win!
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Date: 6/18/2023 11:50:00 PM
Beautiful and masterfully penned, Charlotte. It transported me back to a time when the only solace I found was at the beach at sunset. Congratulations on your win. Regards, Suzette
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Date: 6/18/2023 9:27:00 PM
"Shall we sit together on the salt-sparkling shore of a new tomorrow? Or will the sun go down around us, our love diminishing in its dwindling light?" - Very beautiful questions of relationship constructing. Congratulations!
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Date: 6/18/2023 8:06:00 PM
Congratulations on such a wonderful poem, filled with imagery and delight.
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Date: 6/16/2023 8:47:00 AM
gorgeous on both a literal and visceral level Charlotte...wonderfully written :)
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