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This historic tree was part of California's pride...........located in the William B. Ide Adobe State Historic Park of my hometown

The day I died, a village cried and tears washed to the river's side I meant the world, to my survivors A Valley Oak......yes, that was me... A stately tree with history They drew from me a sense of pride Four hundred years, I had sheltered them with limbs that reached up to the sky. I stood my ground, through all the rain They understood, my worth, my veins ran deeper than the eye could see FOUR HUNDRED YEARS!.....Yes, I was old !! And blood turned cold the day I fell You see, I was much more than Oak I spoke for those who've long been gone. I reigned beside this countryside and watched the tribes beneath the sky I saw the white men, take away and claim the ground beneath me, found And soon a way of life would end And I would bend my boughs, to pray Four hundred years, I've overlooked a river bend, below my limbs I watched the steamboats ferry men and saw men die, and saw men rise and saw men carry hope again And those who came so long ago would build a town that grew to know how values and our valiant strides are deep as roots, as mine that grew I was not just a simple tree... I had a place in history... I sat beside a little house One still a treasured artifact Once built along the river's bend, It now sits naked in my tracks without the shade that I had lent The man who lived here, led a state The first to govern, in my shade It is a fact that through the years I've watched and shed a thousand tears What will become of what is left? A town is left, a state bereft But facts can't change that I was here... My roots hang tight to yesteryear They've grieved, and shed their tears for me when winds prevailed, and down I fell I wish them well, and if I can .....I'll try to surge from down within perhaps one root will sprout, and tell my leaves to find the breeze again ____________________________________________________ 8/23/15 Inspired By Tree Personification Contest Sponsor....Charlotte Puddifoot Based on the actual tree that came down in my home town https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/William_B._Ide_Adobe_State_Historic_Park

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Date: 9/4/2015 6:05:00 PM
Carrie, Congratulations on your "Trees Personified" win.... SKAT
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Date: 8/31/2015 2:44:00 PM
Very nice Carrie, congrats!
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Date: 8/30/2015 11:33:00 PM
Very wonderful write Carrie, sad expressions! Congrats on awesome win!
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Date: 8/30/2015 9:18:00 PM
Oh Carrie, how very sad, and how beautifully your dear tree spoke to us from its heart. My tree poem entry was similar...this month we lost our historical tree which stood since 1699. However, it did not place. Congratulations to your for your awesome win! 7+Fav, Hugs, Sandra
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Date: 8/30/2015 8:23:00 PM
Wonderful description and flowing poem. Congratulations on your win Hugs Eve
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Date: 8/30/2015 5:10:00 PM
quite an epic you have here, carrie, what a story, and i'm seeing the picture that goes with it for the first time...i must say i love the way you closed the poem, those last two lines are memorable - congrats on your win in my contest! :)
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Date: 8/30/2015 4:46:00 PM
Dropping back with my congratulations Carrie:-) Hugs Jan xx
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Date: 8/26/2015 11:01:00 PM
oh wow, this is astounding, and what made it even more special is that it was a true story! VERY good one and SURE to win!
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Date: 8/23/2015 2:32:00 PM
Carrie, I so enjoyed your personification, such moving poem, well done 7 and thanks for visiting my personification of a tree
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Date: 8/23/2015 2:03:00 PM
A powerfully constructed tribute to a giant that is no more. Beautifully honed and good cadence throughout. ;)
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Carrie Richards
Date: 8/23/2015 2:03:00 PM
This tree was a treasure, and the little historic park is just a couple miles or so down the road from where I live, along the beautiful Sacramento River. We have had many lovely walks and picnics under the shade here. A sad day when it fell. Thanks for stopping by. :)
Date: 8/23/2015 1:59:00 PM
Absolutely lovely, Carrie! A long life lived and a story to tell; a part of history. We grieve at her demise, but there is hope still...! // paul
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Carrie Richards
Date: 8/23/2015 2:05:00 PM
Thank you Paul! Indeed ..a part of California history, which cannot be replaced. :(
Date: 8/23/2015 1:39:00 PM
oh such beautiful personification I have seen other poems on a similar theme - I think Charlotte will love this Carrie - good luck:-) hugs Jan xx
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Carrie Richards
Date: 8/23/2015 2:01:00 PM
Thanks so much for the kind words, Jan!

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