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My mother had a sewing machine identical to this one, it was sold when my parent's house was cleared.

The ruins of the old Coventry Cathedral still remain next to the new Cathedral which was consecrated by Queen Elizabeth II on 25th May 1962.

THE DARKEST DAYS OF HER LIFE
The sewing machine, long idle, gathered dust I discovered it, by chance, in my late mother’s attic. My hand brushed the protective wooden case, lifting the lid, I saw her antique sewing machine. The cover had kept the machine in good condition I could clearly see the maker’s name Jones, in gold letters. I’d never seen the machine before, but remember my mother telling me she’d made clothes for orphaned children The war years seemed like only yesterday, she’d tell me, recalling vivid memories of the bombing, which caused such destruction in the city of Coventry where she’d lived. The air raid sirens would wail, people hurried to the shelters hoping; praying they and their loved ones would survive. During the ten hour raid when the Cathedral was bombed she’d fled to a tiny cellar, with few provisions. Many hours passed, the candle spluttered, spent, and all was dark … Fictional poem but based on some fact One, Nine and Sixteen contest Sponsored by Viv Wigley Required lines 1- 'The sewing machine, long idle, gathered dust' 9- 'The war years seemed like only yesterday' 16- 'The candle sputtered, spent, and all was dark' 4/13/18

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Date: 5/3/2018 10:41:00 PM
Nicely done, Jan! Congrats!
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Date: 5/4/2018 1:38:00 AM
Thanks Kim:-) hugs jan xx
Date: 5/3/2018 7:23:00 AM
A great story, Jan Well written; CONGRATULATIONS!
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Date: 5/3/2018 8:36:00 AM
Thanks Ralph:-) hugs jan xx
Date: 5/2/2018 9:03:00 PM
Wow! What a story! Many congrats on your fine win, Jan. Sincerely, Elaine
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Date: 5/3/2018 1:31:00 AM
Thanks so much Elaine:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 5/2/2018 5:14:00 PM
Much history shared here Jan. This makes for great poetry. I have enjoyed your winning entry, Congratulations !
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Date: 5/2/2018 5:31:00 PM
Thanks so much Pixie Dust, :-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 5/2/2018 4:29:00 PM
I knew this was good!. Congratulations Jan.
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Date: 5/2/2018 4:31:00 PM
Thanks jean I loved the contest prompt:-) hugs jan xx
Date: 5/2/2018 3:57:00 PM
Very well done, it all just flowed perfectly. Wonderfully written, Jan, Back at you with the congrats! hugs // Charlie
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Date: 5/2/2018 4:04:00 PM
Thanks so much Charles:-) hugs jan xx
Date: 5/2/2018 3:16:00 PM
And really well done. Congratulations. on a fine entry. Love, Joyce
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Date: 5/2/2018 3:26:00 PM
Many Thanks Joyce:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 5/2/2018 2:13:00 PM
Read a bit of history about Coventry and the times it was bombed in the Second World War, Jan. If you still have that old sewing machine, it might have antique value now. I got rid of my grandmother's machine when I got a new one for my sixteenth birthday. Congratulations on your win, Jan! Hugs, Carolyn
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Date: 5/2/2018 2:22:00 PM
The machine was sold when mum went into a care home yes it was an antique but we didn't get much for it at auction and in a way I'm sad i didn't keep it but it just would have gathered dust and hopefully its gone to a collector who will love it:-) Hugs jan xx
Date: 5/2/2018 11:50:00 AM
Congratulations on your win, Jan.. My grandmother had a sewing machine like this, but with age the cabinet started falling apart.. My aunt has refurbished it an it now sits in her living room.
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Date: 5/2/2018 12:45:00 PM
oh how lovely Eve, mum's machine went when the house was cleared, I regret it in a way but I am not a sewer and it would have just gathered dust, I hope someone gets pleasure from using it. it was such a well loved machine:-) hugs jan xx
Date: 5/2/2018 10:26:00 AM
Wow! What a great story. Compelling read. Congratulations on your win. Enjoyed!
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Date: 5/2/2018 11:44:00 AM
Many thanks Susan:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 5/2/2018 6:13:00 AM
Well done, Jan. Congtats on your fine win.
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Date: 5/2/2018 6:56:00 AM
Thanks Line. I am so behind in my commenting:-( hugs jan xx
Date: 4/19/2018 4:49:00 AM
This is so well written Jan. Viv allowed our imaginations great leeway to explore this theme. Good luck to you as well.
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Date: 5/2/2018 6:55:00 AM
Thanks Jean:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 4/15/2018 2:05:00 PM
Lovely, striking narrative, Jan. Love the poem and its historical aspect, too. This will do well in the contest. Hugs // paul
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Date: 4/15/2018 2:08:00 PM
I hope Viv will accept I added to one of his lines bu there is nothing in the rules that it couldn't be done:-) thanks so much for your support Paul:-) hugs jan xx
Date: 4/14/2018 3:53:00 PM
I see you've returned the lump you said I put in your throat. This pulls you in with its story then leaves you to come to your own conclusions with the ending. Wonderful Jan!
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Date: 4/14/2018 3:56:00 PM
Thanks so much Flo, I know it doesn't fit the new syllable requirement and I've added to Viv's 9th line but there was nothing in the original rules to say we couldn't, I am happy with the poem as it is in fact its one of my favourite 'serious poems:-) hugs jan xx
Date: 4/14/2018 5:38:00 AM
Dear Jan.....I loved the diamond descriptions of Mom's antique sewing machine penned by a golden poetic machine!
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Date: 4/14/2018 2:34:00 PM
Thanks Chuck, I regret getting rid of the machine, not that I ever used it but because I remember mum using it to make me clothes as a child, her eyesight and dexterity would prevent her from doing it now:-( hugs jan xx
Date: 4/13/2018 7:08:00 PM
Hi Jan , you are an amazing poet , beautifully penned so descriptive and involving the reader, good luck in the contest my friend ::)))Hugs~~~~Niall
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Date: 4/13/2018 7:13:00 PM
aww Niall you are too kind my friend I just write and hope people enjoy my thoughts:-) I still can't believe I even write poetry as I hated it at school lol:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 4/13/2018 1:41:00 PM
- I have such a sewing machine, Jan (SINGER) ... I bought it in flea market many years ago ... it stands as a decoration in my living room - A wonderful poem with a deep touching end - Best wishes in the contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 4/13/2018 1:43:00 PM
I wish I'd kept mum's machine for sentimental reasons but hopefully it went to a home where someone would cherish it:-) hugs jan xx
Date: 4/13/2018 10:53:00 AM
WOW - what a well-conceived and crafted piece. I love historical novels and this piece brought to mind the personal stories of individuals who experienced the horrors of World War II! Excellent write and I do expect to see this high on the winners' list! Love and hugs. Pandita
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Date: 4/13/2018 11:04:00 AM
I do hope mr Viv likes it Pandita, I much prefer to write humour for his contests but the 3 lines made me feel sad and this poem is the result:-) hugs jan xx
Date: 4/13/2018 10:48:00 AM
Great narrative, Jan. I'm sure it was very close to the truth in many cases. I think you ended it with a chilling thought as the candle was extinguished. A fine write.
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Date: 4/13/2018 11:03:00 AM
Thanks Lin, it made me so sad researching this poem especially reading of the devastation that was caused during the raid which destroyed the Cathedral which lasted 10 hours. The sewing machine in the pic is identical to the one we disposed of when mum went into the care home - she never passed on her sewing skills to me !:-( hugs jan xx
Date: 4/13/2018 9:22:00 AM
This tells such a vivid story, I felt like I was there-have a good day Jan-
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Date: 4/13/2018 9:29:00 AM
Thanks Michelle, I can't begin to imagine the terror those poor people must have gone through not knowing if they would survive and what they would see when they came out of the shelters, I read that on the night of the cathedral bombing over 500 people were killed:-) hugs jan xx
Date: 4/13/2018 8:51:00 AM
Enjoyable poem! History is a very fascinating subject to me so it's interesting seeing poems like this.
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Date: 4/13/2018 8:56:00 AM
Thanks Christopher, Coventry cathedral was bombed heavily during the blitz - In my childhood I visited both old and new cathedrals as my aunt lived in Coventry. Hugs jan xx

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