One Long Last Look

The moon shimmied up her pole in the sky
   Winking at me with her crescent eye
The stars danced in time to a silent tune
   As the season ended that started in June

O, one long last look at summer's constellations
   Before they surrender to Fall's deportations
And the heavens assign them to regions distant
   As brisk winds whisk them away in an instant




                September 22, 2020
   Completely Your Choice (#15) Poetry Contest
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Kingston Avatar
December 6, 2021 at 7:04 PM
I remember a poem from years ago, that came to mind when I read your poem, "Two things can tear my heart in two, moonlight on still pools and you" Moonlight is on my list of ten of my favorite things. It is so beautiful, I love its soft light, especially on the water at night. Oh my, that was an unintentional rhyme, funny. Your poems are so motivating. :)
Gauthier Avatar
January 16, 2021 at 11:27 AM
I laughed when i got to the line "Winking at me with her crescent eye" yet you pull the reader right back in with a most romantic and nostalgic poem. A delightful read ~ so glad to have it included in the 2020 PS Anthology, Gershon ~
Gondolf Avatar
December 2, 2020 at 2:48 AM
Gershon, I was glad to see this one included in the anthology, congrats. John
Wolf Avatar
December 2, 2020 at 2:59 PM
Thank you for noticing, John. Happy Tuesday evening. :) gw
Mchattie Avatar
October 28, 2020 at 7:15 PM
It snowed here a couple of weeks ago. We kind of missed fall but it sounds lovely. Well done my friend. Stay frosty.
Y. Avatar
October 23, 2020 at 2:40 AM
WoW! Gershon, I missed this well written write. Nice piece on the changing of the seasons. Good imagery, content and rhymes. Congratulations on placing high on the 100 Best New Poems list! :-)
Wolf Avatar
October 23, 2020 at 10:38 AM
Thank you so much for the enthusiasm, Alexis. Happy Friday! :) gw
Baron Avatar
October 22, 2020 at 6:53 AM
I love the image "the moon shimmied up her pole" I'm new to Poetry Soup. Nice work! Lisa
Wolf Avatar
October 22, 2020 at 5:29 PM
Hey, welcome to Poetry Soup, Lisa, and thanks for letting me know what you like about this poem! Moonbeams and Stardust, Gershon
Anderson Avatar
October 21, 2020 at 7:43 PM
Perfect imagery in this, and captured the transitions of seasons so nicely.
Wolf Avatar
October 22, 2020 at 5:26 PM
Thank you so much for your kind words, Kathy. Light and Hope, Gershon
Davidson Avatar
October 17, 2020 at 6:44 AM
Simply beautiful
Wolf Avatar
October 17, 2020 at 6:12 PM
Thank you for the lovely comment, nicola. Appreciated! Joy and Light, Gershon
Fowler Avatar
October 14, 2020 at 6:07 AM
This is beautifully written Gershon. Such imagery! Linda
Wolf Avatar
October 14, 2020 at 2:29 PM
Thank you for the sunshine in your comment, Linda. Have a wonderful Wednesday! :) Gershon
Hamilton Avatar
October 12, 2020 at 12:06 PM
Glad to see this beauty as Potd, it's also top on the best new top 100, so it's getting it's due recognition, a wonderful write Gershon! Wasn't that Moses' sons name?
Wolf Avatar
October 12, 2020 at 3:23 PM
Thank you so much, John... And, yes, you are right: Moses' son's name was Gershom. (The 'm' and 'n' in this name are interchangeable; it's a grammatical idiosyncracy in Hebrew, which only applies in certain cases). The name means: "I was a stranger there" (in Egypt, as Moses was certainly a stranger in Pharaoh's palace). Thanks again, Gershon
Marcum Wong Avatar
October 10, 2020 at 10:38 AM
You mesmerize us with Luna’s antics Gershon. Outstanding imagery connecting us with the cosmos. Congratulations on your very deserving POTD and being at the top of the best new poems list my friend! This gem is going into my Faves! Blessings xxoo
Wolf Avatar
October 11, 2020 at 7:00 PM
Thank you so much for such high praise, Connie, and for the FAVE. Always an honor for me... Here's hoping that your life is beginning to slowly return to normal. ~ Keep the Faith, Gershon
Kaufman Avatar
October 5, 2020 at 5:49 AM
I so felt the wonderful energy in your words..what a great poem..thanks and congratulations...
Wolf Avatar
October 5, 2020 at 7:05 AM
Nancy, very nice of you to encourage me so. Light and Joy, Gershon
B. Avatar
October 3, 2020 at 8:46 AM
A belated congratulations on your POTD, dear friend.. Your write literally took my breath away! Superb!! Really enjoyed .. This gem is going right into my faves! Many blessings to you, Gershon..
Wolf Avatar
October 5, 2020 at 7:04 AM
Robertina, your comments always inspire me, this one being no exception. Thank you so much, dear Poet. Blessings, Gershon
Legros Kelley Avatar
October 1, 2020 at 2:07 PM
So beautiful This took me in. Beautifully painted through your eloquence.
Wolf Avatar
October 1, 2020 at 2:32 PM
Appreciate your kind words, Betty Jo. Happy Thursday! :) gw
Michael Avatar
September 25, 2020 at 10:41 AM
Departing seasons once again...Congratulations Gershon on POTD
Wolf Avatar
October 1, 2020 at 2:22 PM
Funny, come to think of it: In Chicago, a season departs and it's back a week later. lol. Thanks, Arturo. :) gw
Buhagiar Avatar
September 24, 2020 at 11:08 PM
Congratulations for your POTD. Quite a poem. ~~
Wolf Avatar
October 1, 2020 at 2:21 PM
Thank you, Victor. Here's to peace in the world. :) gw
Logan Avatar
September 24, 2020 at 10:07 PM
I read your earlier reply to my comment, GW. Take heart, for it wasn't the moon that gave you the N/A.
Wolf Avatar
October 1, 2020 at 2:20 PM
You're right, Jenna... I can get N/A's all by myself. I really don't need the moon's help. lol. Happy Thursday, Gershon
Allison Avatar
September 24, 2020 at 4:25 PM
the seasons change so quickly GW and your poem is so delightful to read, many congrats on POTD and am gobsmacked its your first of the year - admin should change the algorithm as some get the award of POTD/POTW on a monthly basis and some never get it. WRITE ON!!!:-) hugs Jan xx
Wolf Avatar
September 24, 2020 at 4:46 PM
Thanks for the gobsmack. lol... I was surprised by POTD, that's all. At any rate, your comments are worth much, much more to me than any algorithm-based award. Hope you are well, Gershon
Hinshaw Avatar
September 24, 2020 at 3:45 PM
Congrats, Gershon. Deeeeeelighted to see this masterpiece be featured as POTD! Bob H
Wolf Avatar
September 24, 2020 at 4:49 PM
And I am deeeeeeelighted to read your nice comment, Bob. Thank you! Blessings, Gershon
Gondolf Avatar
September 24, 2020 at 3:08 PM
The season has changed indeed. Congrats on POTD, Gershon. And best of luck in the contest. Cheers, John
Wolf Avatar
September 24, 2020 at 4:51 PM
Thank you so much for your good wishes, John. Best of the season to you! :) gw
Mcgee Avatar
September 24, 2020 at 11:55 AM
... Before they surrender the falls deportations... You have penned a master. Congrats on this POTD... I'm sure it must feel grand,! :D
Wolf Avatar
September 24, 2020 at 2:04 PM
Appreciate your support, Jeanne. What feels grand is all the lovely comments from you and others. Happy Thursday! Blessings, Gershon
Ryder Avatar
September 24, 2020 at 11:45 AM
Food for contemplation. Thanks Gershon.
Wolf Avatar
September 24, 2020 at 2:03 PM
Thank you so much, Lisle. Happy Thursday! ~ Gershon
Nicole Avatar
September 24, 2020 at 11:40 AM
"One long last look at summer's constellations" Such a beautiful thought, as the seasons are changing, right before our eyes. Fall is definitely in the air. Which I enjoy the beauty of this season. The vivid colors, the cooler temps. Congratulations Gershon, on Poem of the Day. :) Brandy
Wolf Avatar
September 24, 2020 at 2:03 PM
Thank you for all of your kind words and thoughts, Brandy. Let's hope for an awesome Autumn. Starlight and Moonbeams, Gershon
La France Avatar
September 24, 2020 at 11:16 AM
Gershon, a big congratulations on POTD with this beauty _Constance
Wolf Avatar
September 24, 2020 at 2:02 PM
Thank you for your supports, Constance. Joy and Jubilation, Gershon
Roper Avatar
September 24, 2020 at 11:12 AM
Gershon, congratulations on POTD.
Wolf Avatar
September 24, 2020 at 2:01 PM
Thank you, Eve, and Happy Thursday to you! Blessings, Gershon
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