Once Broken

Time has two hands a branch has it leaves the sky needing clouds, and I am lost without you -- the face that brought everything into clear focus, the voice that made music of simple conversation, the smile that lit my heart like Roman Candles on Fourth of July -- the calm that never returned after our stormy parting… indeed, even heaven and hell now seem flipping in an unsettling toss, that never comes to light – up in air, a funnel of perpetual longing the sad reality, seldom do-overs when it comes to arrows of the heart once broken….

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Silent One

Date: 11/9/2023 5:11:00 PM

You put it so profoundly and yet one can feel the pain.. I really like the use of words in the opening.. to describe the brokenness... And the ending just perfect..

Joe Dimino
Date: 11/10/2023 3:17:00 AM

Ah yes! For sure, we have all felt the joy and sting of cupid -- what the heck, we keep trying. Even with the failures, I have enjoyed some splendid hills and valleys:) Thank you my friend.

The Situation

Date: 11/8/2023 6:37:00 PM

I see poems like this an say "Been there done that" It's part of life here and there.

Joe Dimino
Date: 11/8/2023 7:30:00 PM

Here and there, everywhere; on Mars I would suspect, wherever relationships -- very relatable. Thank you TS. Have a great evening my friend.

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 11/8/2023 3:13:00 PM

poignant and true words, Joe. Parting from a relationship is stormy indeed and seldom are there do overs. I can identify with the feelings within you words...hard to let go of them sometimes. Enjoy your evening, Sara

Joe Dimino
Date: 11/8/2023 4:05:00 PM

Especially for those who were deeply committed to the relationship, often committed afterwards:)) Never easy.

Deb M

Date: 11/7/2023 1:25:00 PM

Wonderful write Joe…love “the calm never returned after our stormy passing” … Touching and sad! Debx

Deb M
Date: 11/7/2023 3:58:00 PM

I won't tell them!!

Joe Dimino
Date: 11/7/2023 3:11:00 PM

Thank you, Deb; I still watch a lot of old movies. Hooked on those romantic Tearjerkers. Oops! What will they think of me at the Dojo. Blessings.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 11/7/2023 1:24:00 PM

wow, fantastic imagery here and a poignant topic as well!

Joe Dimino
Date: 11/7/2023 3:13:00 PM

See, I got a good poem from my failed romance. It was worth it. Blessings my friend.

Bill Baker

Date: 11/7/2023 8:09:00 AM

So true, Joe. The longer we hold onto the pain of errors in our life, the more pain we have to endure and the less happiness we allow to come into our lives. I enjoyed reading your poetry today, my friend. Bill

Joe Dimino
Date: 11/7/2023 3:15:00 PM

Ain't that the truth! Learn from them -- and move on. Every new day an opportunity to remake one's self. No miracles in hometown, but there's a huge world out there, and maybe some who still don't have Google Search. Blessings my friend.

Lin Lane

Date: 11/7/2023 4:15:00 AM

These days, the whole world seems to be turned upside down. But that chaos seems trivial when love is lost. Very expressively written, Joe.

Joe Dimino
Date: 11/7/2023 6:42:00 AM

Hi Lin; thank you. Have a great day!