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Glass-like smooth of even's yawn Just I, alone, and one cob swan Trace cursive paths upon the lake For we are OF the earth, not on Sets the sun, to blow a kiss Hushed glissades of feral bliss Parting surface, gentle wakes Surely, heaven must be this? Swan and I, we share the eves In feathered white tuxedo sleeves He follows, as I row the skiff My chaperon, as daylight leaves I think, perhaps, he's lonely, too Searching for a soul-mate who Shares his love of blushing skies And cleaving mirrored lakes, anew The water's darkened interludes Reflect our images and moods Hopes we held of love this morn Are put to bed as day concludes Ere we meet, when dusk is drawn I say a prayer that he'll be gone That one of us will find true love ... For we are OF the earth, not on. ~ 2nd Place ~ in the "2019 Poetry Marathon Mile 9" Poetry Contest, Mark Toney, Judge & Sponsor. ~ 3rd Place ~ the "Beauty Of Solitude" Poetry Contest, Line Gauthier, Judge & Sponsor. ~ Honorable Mention ~ in the "Your Choice (7), Any Form, Any Theme" Poetry Contest, Brian Strand, Judge & Sponsor.

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Date: 7/7/2020 5:48:00 PM
This is a lovely form, Greg. Makes me wonder if Frost's "Stopping By Woods on a Snowy Evening" is also in Rubaiyat form? This is gentle and sad, dreamy in its imagery and and wistfulness. "Hopes we held of love this morn / Are put to bed as day concludes". The lonely swan makes a wonderful companion "In feathered white tuxedo sleeves". On par with so many great writes from your golden pen. I'll always be a fan, Bard. God be with you ~ John
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 7/7/2020 7:35:00 PM
That's so very kind of you, John, and I greatly appreciate the wonderful words of encouragement - I'll still be writing poetry (and maybe a book) at times, so will make an appearance here-and-there. I think you and John H are the only regular commenters on my work anymore, and it means a lot. Blessings, Sir! :o)
Date: 1/11/2019 1:33:00 PM
This is simply gorgeous Greg. Congratulations on you second placement! xxoo : )
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 4/1/2019 12:22:00 PM
Thank you so much, Connie - this one is VERY special to me, one of those that just "happened", and came from where I know not ... "elsewhere". It's almost spiritual when that happens. Blessings! :-) <3
Date: 1/6/2019 9:21:00 PM
Greg, I thoroughly enjoyed your Rubaiyat poem! Congrats on your win on mile 9 of my 2019 Poetry Marathon contest. By continuing to place in the contest you are accumulating points toward the final. ~Mark
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Date: 5/4/2018 7:33:00 PM
Lovely imagery in your lines of tranquility, Gregory, though loveless is always sad. Congrats! All the best to you. :) ~ Artsie
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 5/6/2018 4:16:00 PM
Thank you so much, Artsie ... I found TWO soul-mates in this life, (many never find ONE), so while I'm alone now I am blessed to have loved on such a deep level, (and I'm not done yet - I hope, haha!). I'm so pleased you enjoyed my poem! I see you have a horse for your avatar - I love horses, and I sometimes do work for a very rich man who owns some of the finest stables in the world (Godolphin) and the original Arabian bloodline - just amazing and beautiful creatures! Blessings, my friend! :-) <3
Date: 5/4/2018 7:22:00 PM
A beautiful image, Gregory, of interpreted loneliness and longing for the perfect mate. Congrats on your podium finish.
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 5/6/2018 4:11:00 PM
Many thanks to you, Line, I greatly appreciate it! :-)
Date: 5/4/2018 7:00:00 PM
Congratulations on your win with this peaceful expression of the beauty of solitude. You brought back great memories of early mornings of the lake, not on. :)
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 5/6/2018 4:11:00 PM
That's so kind of you, Susan, thank you so very much! I grew up on the lake, (year-round), and we always spent summers there after moving, so many of my best memories include it. I am also about a half-hour from the mountains and the ocean, so I have the best of both worlds, (I just don't care for the cold anymore). Blessings! :-) <3
Date: 5/4/2018 10:50:00 AM
Greg, we are only allowed 500 typewritten characters to say congratulations. I could use all of them and more to tell you how marvelous your poem is and how serene it made me feel just reading it. Thank you for using the exquisite talent God has given you that so richly blesses others.
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Date: 5/6/2018 4:08:00 PM
This is such a wonderful comment, Curtis, and it means a great deal to me ... thank you SO much for taking the time and commenting from your heart! Blessings always, my friend! :-)
Date: 4/9/2018 2:12:00 PM
A very worthy gold medal winner, Gregory. Awesome poem.
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 4/11/2018 1:09:00 AM
Very kind of you, Line - thank you muchly! :-) <3
Date: 3/15/2018 2:03:00 AM
Now I know why got the first place in ranking. The subject is great, but you picked a very difficult style (Rubai) and masterfully expressed it.
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 5/6/2018 4:06:00 PM
Thank you, my friend! :-)
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Pashang Salehi
Date: 3/15/2018 9:33:00 AM
You are welcome.... very nice job, I read it again.
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 3/15/2018 2:47:00 AM
That is very kind of you, Pashang, and I so appreciate the wonderful comments! This one is very special to me. Blessings and thanks to you!
Date: 2/19/2018 7:34:00 AM
Captivating rhyme, a relaxing piece. Kudos to the poet, Greg and his inspiration, the sun and swan.
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 2/21/2018 11:54:00 PM
Thanks so much, RAP, I greatly appreciate it ... so pleased you enjoyed it! :-)
Date: 2/19/2018 2:47:00 AM
Congratulations, Greg on your great win.
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 2/19/2018 2:50:00 AM
Thank you, Subimal.
Date: 2/18/2018 5:35:00 PM
Gregory, back to congratulate you again for another fine win for your lovely, touching poem! Sandra :)
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 2/19/2018 2:25:00 AM
I'm pleased you enjoyed this one, Sandra, and I so appreciate the kind words! Blessings and many thanks to you, My Friend! :-) <3
Date: 2/18/2018 4:06:00 PM
Congrats on your fine poem win, Gregory :)
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 2/19/2018 2:24:00 AM
Thank you very much, Laura, I'm pleased you enjoyed it ... I appreciate you taking the time to comment! Blessings! :-) <3
Date: 2/18/2018 3:33:00 PM
Returning with congrats Gregory on your wonderful win with your beautiful and soulful poem. ~Susan
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Date: 2/19/2018 2:23:00 AM
That's so nice of you, Susan ... many kind thank yous to you, Dear Friend! :-) <3
Date: 2/18/2018 12:51:00 PM
Congratulations Greg on your win here! A very beautiful write! ~Judy
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 2/19/2018 2:22:00 AM
That's very kind of you, Judy, and I'm very thankful for your comments! Blessings, Friend! :-) <3
Date: 2/18/2018 12:22:00 PM
- A piece of art from nature and your pen ... - Congratulations on this beautiful poem, Greg :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 2/19/2018 2:22:00 AM
Blessings, Anne-Lise, I'm glad you enjoyed it! Thank you very much! :-) <3
Date: 2/18/2018 12:05:00 PM
A most magnificent write, dear Greg! No surprise that it is a first class winner! Congratulations to you on a well-deserved great win! Hugs and a round of applause! Pandita
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 2/19/2018 2:21:00 AM
Thank you so very much, Pandita, that's very sweet of you ... I'm so pleased you enjoyed it, my friend! :-)
Date: 2/18/2018 11:45:00 AM
Very deep, just a shame it as an older one.. congratulations on your first place in the contest..
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 2/19/2018 2:20:00 AM
Thank you for the kind encouragement ... I greatly appreciate it! Beautiful photos by your daughter ... talent there!
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Silent One
Date: 2/19/2018 2:10:00 AM
You are a very talented poet, yoy were not the only one whp entered an old one.. I feel you could have also written a winner with the actual photos...
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 2/18/2018 9:25:00 PM
Thank you, S1 - it was incomplete and uninspired in its previous existence, I feel. I apologize if I have erred ... seems to be a pattern for me of late, (perhaps time for a break). I am honored and humbled by the placement.
Date: 12/18/2017 7:08:00 PM
Re-read this beauty and I have to fave this Greg, it is really a stunning write!
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 12/20/2017 7:20:00 AM
Thank you so much, John, I greatly appreciate the kindness, friend! :-)
Date: 11/28/2017 9:05:00 PM
Wonderful write, say a prayer for yourself too she is out there, believe it! Great rhymes and congrats on another well deserved win!
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 11/29/2017 2:41:00 PM
I believe it, John, it's just FINDING her that's such a long shot. I have found two soul-mates in life and lost them, so I have been blessed, (and I know there are more), and if it's the will of God or the fates, then it will happen! Blessings, brother! :-)
Date: 11/27/2017 12:26:00 AM
Very beautiful, emotion stirring write! I so enjoy reading your work. Congratulations on your first place win Greg!! Best, Judy
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 11/29/2017 2:39:00 PM
Thank you so VERY much, Judy, your opinion means a lot to me - blessings and peace to you, Dear friend! <3
Date: 11/26/2017 8:01:00 AM
Such a well-written poem, Gregory, so touching and full of hopeful imagery. Congratulations on your fine placement. Sandra
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Date: 11/29/2017 2:38:00 PM
That's very sweet of you, Sandra - thank you so much, my friend, and blessings to you! :-) <3
Date: 11/26/2017 7:18:00 AM
Greg, your poem is just so beautiful and it touched my soul deeply, congratulations on your win in my contest !
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 11/29/2017 2:38:00 PM
Thank you so very much, Constance, I am honored and humbled that you found my poem worthy - this made my day! Blessings to you, friend! :-) <3
Date: 11/26/2017 1:28:00 AM
This is terrific, Greg, beautiful and wistful. Congrats on your first place, a worthy win. Regards, Viv
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 11/29/2017 2:37:00 PM
Very kind of you, Viv, thanks so much! :-)
Date: 11/25/2017 9:30:00 PM
Gorgeous imagery and content Gregory. Congratulations on your first place win with your beautifully stirring soulful write on silent commiseration.. Warmest wishes my friend!
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 11/29/2017 2:36:00 PM
Thank you so very much, Susan, I SO appreciate those wonderful comments! Blessings to you! :-) <3
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