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On the Edge

You left me sitting on the edge of a cliff As I sat waiting, I wondered where you were I became worried lost in the world of if All of those what ifs that cause my mind to blur I wondered if we were really meant to be Perhaps if I jumped I could set myself free I turned to glance back and see if you were there Thankfully I watched the wind blow through your hair First attempt at a Rispetto. Inspired by Russell Silvey

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Patrick Nigros

Date: 4/6/2014 12:36:00 PM

WOW, I LOVE HOW ONE LINE CALL FOR ATTENTION TO THE COMING ONE. LOVING THS WRITE

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 4/6/2014 12:48:00 PM

Thanks again Patrick.

Michael Dom

Date: 3/14/2014 7:29:00 AM

An intersting form of poem I am reading today. Soupmail.

Monterey Sirak

Date: 3/9/2014 5:07:00 AM

What a cage we build for ourselves with 'what if'. Your first attempt at this form is fantastically well done.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 3/9/2014 9:12:00 AM

Thanks, I enjoyed the challange. Eleven syllables per line presented the greatest challange.

Robert Pettit

Date: 3/6/2014 9:18:00 PM

Mission accomplished. This is a good example of this type of poem.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 3/7/2014 8:28:00 AM

Thanks Robert.

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 3/5/2014 6:37:00 AM

Ow fee..you kept me on the edge of what's going to happen till the end..Tnks God for the wind and its seven breezes in the last verse.A wonderful ending to an intriguing post.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 3/5/2014 7:48:00 AM

Thanks again Charmaine, cool glassess.

Abdulhafeez Oyewole

Date: 3/4/2014 2:11:00 PM

I love all the comments here and love the poem as well. Beautiful one indeed. Do have a splendid day.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 3/5/2014 7:49:00 AM

Thanks AO so nice to have your visit.

Kim Van Breda

Date: 3/4/2014 12:43:00 PM

"Rispetto"?? Educate me please. It flowed nicely and cliff/mind/freedom theme. Different and interesting Xx~Xx

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 3/5/2014 7:52:00 AM

8 lines 11sylables each ababccdd. Let me know if you give it a try.

Shadow Hamilton

Date: 3/4/2014 9:04:00 AM

excellent Rick I also love the last line hugs

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 3/4/2014 9:34:00 AM

Thanks Shadow.

Tim Ryerson

Date: 3/4/2014 4:59:00 AM

Wow Richard, what a stunning ending to this gem! You have done very well with your first attempt at this form...Good stuff! - Tim

Vicki Acquah

Date: 3/4/2014 2:36:00 AM

Nice... I enjoyed it... but hey I would never count the lines ... I just like the poem a lot ...esp when you glanced back.

Kayod5 Kayode

Date: 3/4/2014 12:02:00 AM

Hard to believe this your first attempt at Rispetto,neatly arranged and well compacted,the message clear in delivery.A great work Richard.

Russell Sivey

Date: 3/3/2014 10:18:00 PM

This is quite beautiful my friend, such a gorgeous write! I love what you have done with your inspiration...and what a harmonious Rispetto! I loved reading this amazing poem this evening...Great Work!!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 3/4/2014 7:23:00 AM

Thanks for the encouragement Russell, also thanks for the inspiiration.